Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear. Start with a simple topic sentence stating your status, then add one specific, short detail about what you study or do. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g. “I manage young architecture”) and unnecessary words. Keep to one or two sentences and use correct vocabulary.

예시: I'm a student. I study architecture at university, and I focus on sustainable building design.

제안: Give a clear, natural response: state location and job role accurately, and add one brief reason why. Use correct collocations (e.g. “an office worker” not “a officer worker”). Avoid repeating opinion without support.

예시: I work in Beijing as an office worker in an architectural firm. I enjoy it because I can learn practical skills from experienced architects.

제안: Be coherent and specific. Start with a topic sentence (Yes, it is), then give one or two clear, connected reasons. Use appropriate linking words (because, and, also) and correct nouns (e.g. “cafés” not “coffees”). Avoid garbled clauses like “we often work we can offer.”

예시: Yes, it's a great place to work because there are many new shops and restaurants nearby, and several quiet cafés where colleagues sometimes work or meet.

제안: Answer directly and finish your supporting detail. Use complete phrases and specific examples (e.g. “good facilities” or “parks nearby”). Use correct vocabulary (“the underground” is fine, but say what is good). Keep it to two sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, I like it because the transport is very convenient — I can take the underground to work. There are also good facilities nearby, like supermarkets and a park.

제안: Give a clear plan and reasons. Start with a direct statement of your plan (e.g. I plan to continue working here or I hope to change jobs), then support it with specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Avoid unclear phrases (“The film”, “engage them”, “I can what's more”).

예시: I plan to continue working here for the next two years because the job gives me valuable experience and my colleagues are supportive. After that, I might pursue a master's degree in architecture to advance my career.

× I'm a student, I manage young architecture.

✓ I'm a student; I study architecture for young people.

The original uses 'manage young architecture' which is ungrammatical and likely a wrong verb/noun choice. Use present simple 'study' to describe current occupation as a student and a clearer noun phrase 'architecture for young people' or 'youth architecture'. Ensure verb meaning matches intended activity.

× I'm working in Beijing as a officer worker.

✓ I'm working in Beijing as an office worker.

Article and noun form are incorrect. Use 'an' before a vowel sound and correct noun 'office worker'. Also 'working' as present continuous is fine for current employment.

× It's a very good job.

✓ It's a very good job.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Present for simple description is appropriate.

× Yes it is. There are many new shops and restaurants around my company.

✓ Yes, it is. There are many new shops and restaurants around my company.

Original lacked a comma after 'Yes'. Otherwise sentence is correct; present simple and 'there are' correctly describe current surroundings.

× And there are also many coffees we often work we can offer.

✓ There are also many coffee shops near where we often work that we can visit.

Original is ungrammatical: 'many coffees' should be 'many coffee shops' and the clause order is confused. Rephrase to clarify meaning: present simple and relative clauses show location and ability to visit.

× Yes, I like the place where I work because the traffic is quite convenient.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because the transport is quite convenient.

'Traffic is quite convenient' is awkward; use 'transport' or 'the public transport' or 'the traffic is light'. The structure and tense are otherwise fine.

× I can take the underground to work and there are lots of good.

✓ I can take the underground to work, and there are lots of good places nearby.

Original ends abruptly and misuses 'lots of good' without a noun. Add noun 'places' and 'nearby' for clarity; keep present simple for habitual action.

× The film to continue working here because it's really a good job.

✓ I plan to continue working here because it's a really good job.

'The film to continue' is incorrect. Use 'I plan to continue' or 'I hope to continue' to express future intention. Keep simple present for general truth about the job.

× The colleagues are quite nice, they helped me a lot to engage them and I can what's more.

✓ My colleagues are quite nice; they have helped me a lot to integrate, and I can learn more from them.

Use 'my colleagues' rather than 'the colleagues'. 'They helped me a lot to engage them' is ungrammatical; use 'have helped me to integrate' or 'helped me settle in'. 'I can what's more' is incomplete — replace with 'I can learn more from them'. Use present perfect to link past help to present state.