Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: まず話の冒頭で簡潔に職業を述べ、その後に経歴を自然な時制で付け加えましょう。現在完了（have worked）を使う場合は正しい形にし、余計な繰り返しを避けて5文以内に収めること。発音や数詞（"10 years"）は明瞭に。例：’I have worked as a broadcast journalist for ten years.’ のように一文でまとめ、その後短い補足を入れると自然です。

예시: I have worked as a broadcast journalist for ten years. I report on local news for a TV station, covering community events and municipal meetings.

제안: 場所を言うときは正しい地名と前置詞を使い、時制を現在形で統一しましょう。'in the central of Tokyo'は不自然なので 'in central Tokyo' に。通勤時間は現在の習慣なので現在形で表現します。また一文で簡潔に述べ、必要なら接続語で補足を加えましょう。

예시: I work in the Roppongi area in central Tokyo. It takes about 30 minutes to get there by train from my home.

제안: 意見は冒頭で述べ、理由を具体的かつ文法的に正しく続けましょう。発音や地名のスペル（Roppongi）に注意。語彙は『convenient』『central』『shops』『meet people』を正確に使い、関係代名詞や接続詞（because, so）で文を繋げて自然な流れに。冗長な語や不自然な語順をなくすこと。

예시: Yes, I think Roppongi is a very convenient place to work because it's in central Tokyo and there are many shops and restaurants nearby, so I can easily meet colleagues or clients.

제안: 同じ理由を繰り返さずに簡潔に答え、反対意見（disadvantage）を表現する際は原因を明確に述べましょう。'one of the disadvantages is...'の後に具体的な問題（例えば、 commute is long, my apartment is small）を続ける。文法と語順（'a little bit problem my house'→'a small problem with my house'）を正すこと。

예시: Yes, I like working there because it's very convenient and I can meet many people. However, one disadvantage is that my house is quite far, so my commute can be tiring.

제안: 将来計画は明確で文法的に正しい構造で述べましょう。'continue my job'→'continue in my job' または 'continue working as a journalist'。期限を示すときは 'within the next two years' を使い、目的（study abroad）を正確に表現する。曖昧な表現や繰り返し（'go to go study upload'）を避けること。

예시: I plan to continue working as a journalist because I find it very interesting. However, within the next two years I hope to study abroad to improve my reporting skills and learn more about international journalism.

× I work as a journalist in the local televisions.

✓ I work as a journalist in the local television station.

'Televisions' (plural) is incorrect when referring to a broadcasting organization; use 'television station' or 'television' as an uncountable noun. Also 'local' should modify 'television station'. Suggestion: use singular countable noun with 'a' or use uncountable form.

× I've been working. I've been worked for 10 years.

✓ I've been working for 10 years.

The correct form to express an action that started in the past and continues now is the present perfect continuous: 'I've been working'. 'I've been worked' is incorrect because 'worked' is a past participle and cannot follow 'been' to form continuous aspect here. Remove the extra sentence and combine into one: 'I've been working for 10 years.'

× I work in the Lopong area, which is in the central of the Tokyo.

✓ I work in the Roppongi area, which is in the center of Tokyo.

Use correct place name 'Roppongi' and 'in the center of Tokyo' should be 'in the center of Tokyo' without 'the' before Tokyo. Also 'central' as adjective needs a noun (central area) but 'in the center of' is more natural.

× It took 30 minutes by train from my house.

✓ It takes 30 minutes by train from my house.

When describing a regular or current travel time, use present simple 'takes' not past 'took'. Maintain subject-verb agreement: 'It takes 30 minutes.'

× I think Lumpungi is a balay convenient place because it's in the centre of the Tokyo and there is so many shops around there and easy to meet many persons.

✓ I think Roppongi is a really convenient place because it's in the center of Tokyo, there are so many shops around, and it's easy to meet lots of people.

Multiple errors fixed: correct name 'Roppongi'; 'balay' is not English—use 'really' or 'quite'; 'convenient place' fine; 'the centre of the Tokyo' should be 'the center of Tokyo' (no 'the' before Tokyo); 'there is so many shops' must be plural agreement 'there are so many shops'; 'easy to meet many persons' should be 'easy to meet lots of people' (use 'people' not 'persons').

× I like this place because it's a very convenient place because Lopongi is in the central area of Tokyo and we can meet many persons working in the Tokyo area.

✓ I like this place because it's very convenient: Roppongi is in the central area of Tokyo, and we can meet many people who work in the Tokyo area.

Avoid repetition ('this place' and 'convenient place'); 'Lopongi' corrected to 'Roppongi'; 'many persons' should be 'many people'; add relative clause 'who work' for clarity; remove unnecessary articles ('the Tokyo area' -> 'the Tokyo area' is acceptable but 'Tokyo area' is more natural without 'the').

× But one of the disadvantage is a little bit problem my house.

✓ But one of the disadvantages is that my house is a bit far (or has a few problems).

Original sentence is ungrammatical. 'One of the disadvantage' should be plural 'disadvantages'. 'is a little bit problem my house' is disordered; add 'that' and clarify meaning: if the house is far, say 'my house is a bit far', or if there are minor problems at home, 'there are a few problems at my house.' Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I want to continue to my job because this job is very interesting, but uh, the within the two years of future, I want to go to go study upload.

✓ I want to continue in my job because it is very interesting, but within the next two years I want to go abroad to study.

Fix verb collocations: 'continue in my job' or 'continue with my job'; 'the within the two years of future' should be 'within the next two years'; 'go to go study upload' is incorrect—likely meant 'go abroad to study'. Use correct infinitive form 'to go abroad to study' and natural time expression.