Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak more clearly and directly. Start with a simple topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct simple grammar (e.g. "I passed my ACC exam at UH Dial College in 2024"; "I am preparing to study abroad and improving my English"). Keep answers under five sentences and avoid filler words like "um" or repeated words.

예시: I am a student. I passed the ACC exam at UH Dial College in 2024, and now I am preparing to study abroad. I am also improving my English by taking weekly conversation classes and practicing with online resources.

제안: Good direct response but improve grammar and link ideas smoothly. Use a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail with a linking word (for example, "because" or "so"). Fix verbs: say "I am focusing on improving my English."

예시: I don't work at the moment; I am a humanities student preparing to study abroad next year. Because I want to study overseas, I am focusing on improving my English through online courses and language exchange.

제안: Content is unclear and has many mistakes and fillers. Be specific and avoid wrong vocabulary ("big salads" is incorrect). Use one clear reason and one specific example. Remove fillers like "uh" and "umm" and correct collocations ("career opportunities", "employees").

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because it offers strong career opportunities and good training. For example, the company provides regular workshops and a mentorship programme that help employees develop new skills.

제안: Answer is relevant but grammar and coherence need work. Use plural/singular correctly ("friendly colleagues"), make sentences complete, and link your example to the main point with a phrase like "for example". Limit to two supporting points and one short example.

예시: Yes, I quite like it because the environment is comfortable and colleagues are friendly. For example, flexible seating and good lighting help me concentrate, and supportive teammates make daily tasks more enjoyable.

제안: This answer is unclear, repetitive and grammatically incorrect. Start with a clear topic sentence about your main plan (e.g. "I plan to advance my career and start a business"). Then give one or two specific, logical steps with linking words ("first", "then"). Avoid repetition and filler words.

예시: In future, I plan to advance my career and eventually start my own business. First I want to study in the UK to gain international experience, and then I will take on more responsibilities at work and save money to launch my business.

× Currently I am a student. I passed my ACC exam from UH Dial College in 2024 page.

✓ Currently I am a student. I passed my ACC exam at UH Dial College in 2024.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect for indicating where you took an exam; use 'at' for institutions. Also 'page' is extraneous and likely a slip. In English (Bangladesh): use 'at' to show location of an exam or institution and remove unrelated words.

× Now I am preparing for UH study in the abroad and UH improve my English skill.

✓ Now I am preparing to study abroad at UH and improving my English skills.

Use the infinitive 'to study' for planned actions and 'abroad' does not need 'the'. Use present continuous 'am improving' for ongoing action and plural 'skills'. In English (Bangladesh): say 'preparing to study abroad' and 'improving my English skills' for correct tense and word forms.

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

The '>' character is not appropriate punctuation. Remove it. In English (Bangladesh): use standard question mark only.

× I am not working at the moment. I am a student majoring in humanities and I am preparing to study abroad next year. I am focusing on improve my English.

✓ I am not working at the moment. I am a student majoring in humanities and I am preparing to study abroad next year. I am focusing on improving my English.

After 'focusing on' you must use the -ing form 'improving'. In English (Bangladesh): use 'focusing on improving' not 'focusing on improve'.

× Yes, overall it is good place to work because it offers many opportunities like uh, big salads and umm career partner which motivates the employ employees to perform well for you.

✓ Yes, overall it is a good place to work because it offers many opportunities, such as career development and partnerships that motivate employees to perform well.

Missing article 'a' before 'good place'. 'big salads' is likely incorrect phrase; I replaced with 'career development'. 'employ employees' is wrong duplication and word order; use 'motivate employees'. 'for you' is unnecessary. In English (Bangladesh): include articles, choose correct nouns (career development), and use correct verb forms: 'motivate employees'.

× Yes, I quite like the place where I work because it has a comfortable environment and friendly colleague who is make my day enjoyable.

✓ Yes, I quite like the place where I work because it has a comfortable environment and friendly colleagues who make my day enjoyable.

Use plural 'colleagues' when referring generally and 'who make' to match plural subject. 'is' before 'make' was incorrect. In English (Bangladesh): match subject and verb number and use plural when speaking generally about coworkers.

× For example, flexible seating and good lighting help me concentrate and having supportive teammates mean.

✓ For example, flexible seating and good lighting help me concentrate, and having supportive teammates helps.

After 'having supportive teammates' the verb must agree: singular 'having... helps' or better rephrase 'they help'. The original ends abruptly 'mean' which is incorrect. In English (Bangladesh): ensure clauses are complete and verbs agree with subjects; use 'helps' or rephrase to 'they help me'.

× You know my future, I plan to advance advance my career by and taking more responsibility with my field.

✓ In the future, I plan to advance my career by taking more responsibility in my field.

Remove repetition 'advance advance', fix word order and use 'in the future' or 'I plan to' and the structure 'by taking' to show how. In English (Bangladesh): say 'advance my career by taking more responsibility in my field'.

× I I would like go to UK and then then I decide to in my future, I am planning a business for.

✓ I would like to go to the UK, and then I plan to start a business in the future.

Use 'would like to go' with infinitive 'to go'. Add definite article 'the' before 'UK'. Remove duplicate words 'I I' and 'then then'. Use 'plan to start a business' for clear intention. In English (Bangladesh): say 'would like to go to the UK' and 'plan to start a business'.