Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and fillers (e.g., “uh”), and use correct tenses and articles. Add one specific supporting detail (where you study or what you like about economics) and use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

예시: I am a university student studying economics. I hope to do a master's degree abroad next year, and my goal is to become an economist because I enjoy analyzing market trends.

제안: Answer directly and avoid vague phrases. Use correct tense and complete sentences. If you mention gaining experience, specify how (internship, part-time job) and where (type of bank or institution). Use a linking word to show sequence (for example, “first” or “before that”).

예시: I don't work at the moment, but I plan to become an economist. Before that, I hope to gain experience through an internship at a well-known commercial bank to learn practical financial analysis.

제안: Clarify your opinion about the workplace and give specific reasons. Avoid contradictory or unclear statements. Begin with a direct answer (Yes/No/Not sure), then explain why and give concrete examples of what would make it a good workplace (supportive colleagues, training, good culture).

예시: I can't say for sure because I haven't worked there, but I would expect a good workplace to have supportive colleagues and clear training. If I worked at a reputable firm, I would build strong relationships and learn from experienced staff.

제안: Make the response natural and specific. Explain what you like about a workplace (friendly atmosphere, learning opportunities) and avoid unclear phrases like “when I walk” or “work effectively and potentially.” Use linking words (for example, “also” or “in addition”) and give one concrete example of how you would participate or learn.

예시: Yes, I think I would enjoy it. I like workplaces where I can discuss ideas with colleagues and gain practical experience. For example, I would join team meetings and ask for feedback to improve my analytical skills.

제안: Respond clearly and give a brief plan with specific steps. Use present continuous or present simple correctly to describe current preparations and future intentions. Provide concrete activities you are doing (studying topics, taking courses, internships) and use linking words to structure the answer.

예시: I plan to become an economist, which is my long-term goal. Right now I am preparing by studying macroeconomics and statistics, and I am applying for internships to gain hands-on experience before starting a master's program.

× I'm a student, I'm currently studying in economics to pursue bachelors degree and I plan to go abroad for my master degree And uh, I definitely become an economist in future.

✓ I'm a student. I'm currently studying economics to pursue a bachelor's degree, and I plan to go abroad for my master's degree. I definitely want to become an economist in the future.

Multiple present-tense and noun form problems: 'studying in economics' should be 'studying economics' (no preposition). 'bachelors degree' and 'master degree' need articles and possessive apostrophes: 'a bachelor's degree' and 'a master's degree'. Run-on sentence and missing verbs: 'I definitely become an economist' is ungrammatical; use 'I definitely want to become' to express intention. Also add 'the' before 'future' as 'in the future'. Improve clarity with punctuation and conjunction 'and'.

× Well, I am not working at the moment, but in future I plan to work as an economist. Moreover, I gain some experience before pursuing my dream to do some other work in famous bank and.

✓ Well, I am not working at the moment, but in the future I plan to work as an economist. Moreover, I want to gain some experience before pursuing my dream of working at a well-known bank.

Tense and verb choice: 'in future' should be 'in the future'. 'I gain some experience' is incorrect for planned action; use 'I want to gain' or 'I plan to gain'. 'pursuing my dream to do some other work in famous bank' is ungrammatical: use 'pursuing my dream of working at a well-known bank'. Include article 'a' before 'well-known bank'.

× When I have no idea about the workplace and the environment. However, when I get a job in any reputed place, so definitely I try to my best and make a strong relationship with the with the colleagues and the.

✓ I have no idea about the workplace and the environment now. However, when I get a job at a reputable organization, I will definitely try my best and build strong relationships with my colleagues.

Fragment and structure: 'When I have no idea...' is a dependent clause used as a full sentence; make it independent. 'in any reputed place' should be 'at a reputable organization' and include article 'a'. Tense and modality: use future 'I will definitely try my best'. Remove duplicated 'the' and use plural 'relationships' and possessive 'my colleagues'.

× Yes, I enjoy the place when I walk. Apart from this, I share my thoughts and learn a good experience from the peers and colleagues as well as I try my best to work effectively and potentially.

✓ Yes, I enjoy the workplace when I go to work. I share my thoughts and learn from my peers and colleagues, and I try my best to work effectively and productively.

Verb and word choice: 'enjoy the place when I walk' is unclear; use 'enjoy the workplace when I go to work'. 'learn a good experience' is incorrect; use 'learn from' or 'gain valuable experience'. 'potentially' is wrong in this context; use 'productively'. Combine clauses with appropriate conjunctions and possessive 'my peers'.

× Well, I plan to become an economist because it is my dream and now I'm preparing myself to. As an economist, I learn a lot of data about the economics, which is beneficial for my upcoming test.

✓ Well, I plan to become an economist because it is my dream, and now I'm preparing myself for that. As an economist (in training), I am learning a lot about economics and data, which is beneficial for my upcoming test.

Tense and verb forms: 'preparing myself to' is incomplete; use 'preparing myself for that'. 'As an economist, I learn a lot of data about the economics' is awkward and ungrammatical—use present continuous 'I am learning a lot about economics and data' or 'I am learning a lot of data-related skills'. 'the economics' should be 'economics' without article. Ensure consistency of tense and clear noun phrases.