Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and correct small grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence (I work as a lawyer) then add one or two concise supporting details (my role and workplace). Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "deputy head" not "deputy Hope"). Aim for 2–4 sentences and avoid filler words like "uh".

예시: I work as a lawyer for a private company. I am the deputy head of the firm, where I supervise a small legal team and handle corporate contracts. I enjoy the job because it gives me responsibility and opportunities to grow.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence naming the city and type of company, then give one specific detail about the company. Avoid vague claims like "one of the greatest" without evidence, and correct grammar ("our goal is" not "our goals is"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I work in Batumi for a private construction company. The company focuses on residential and commercial building projects in our region, and our goal is to deliver high-quality developments on schedule.

제안: Give a direct answer, then support it with specific reasons. Reduce hesitations and fix grammar ("Batumi is a fascinating city," "on the bank of the sea," "there are many cultural heritage sites"). Use linking words like "because" or "also" to connect ideas. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, it's a good place to work because Batumi is a fascinating city on the Black Sea coast. There are many cultural heritage sites and recreational options nearby, which makes my work-life balance better.

제안: Respond clearly and expand with one or two concrete reasons. Remove questions back to the examiner. Correct plural and phrasing ("cinemas" not "cinema"; "I can see the soul of the city" instead of asking). Use linking words like "also" or "because." Keep it natural and under 4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I like working there because our office is in the city center, so there are many cafes and cinemas nearby. I also appreciate the mix of modern and historic buildings, which helps me experience the city's culture during breaks.

제안: Be specific about plans and remove hesitations. Start with a clear statement of your goals (e.g., "I plan to gain more experience and learn new skills"), then name particular skills or courses you want (e.g., "leadership training" or "advanced corporate law courses") and why. Use 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: I plan to gain more experience and develop my leadership skills. Specifically, I want to take advanced corporate law courses and a management training program to prepare for a senior executive role.

× I work, uh, I am a lawyer and uh, I'm working now in the private company.

✓ I work. I am a lawyer and I am currently working in a private company.

The student used both simple present and present continuous inconsistently and included an unnecessary definite article 'the'. Use simple present to state occupation (I am a lawyer) and present continuous with 'currently' for ongoing action. Remove 'the' before 'private company' because it is not a specific previously mentioned company.

× I'm, uh, deputy Hope, deputy head of the this company.

✓ I'm the deputy head of this company.

The phrase had wrong word 'Hope' (likely 'head') and incorrect use of articles: 'the this' is wrong. Use the definite article 'the' before the title 'deputy head' and 'this' before 'company' but not both together. Also correct the title word to 'head'.

× Uh, and uh, I think that, uh, it's uh, uh, great job for me.

✓ I think that it's a great job for me.

A countable noun 'job' requires an article 'a'. The original omitted the article and had extra filler words. Use 'a great job' to be grammatically correct.

× I work uh, in Batumi uh, as I said, uh, it's uh, private company, uh, it's uh, one of the greatest uh, company in our region.

✓ I work in Batumi. As I said, it's a private company; it's one of the greatest companies in our region.

'in Batumi' is correct; 'private company' needs the article 'a'. The phrase 'one of the greatest company' is wrong because 'one of the' must be followed by a plural noun: 'companies'. Also punctuation and filler words were cleaned for clarity.

× Umm, our goals is uh, to achieve great success uh, on building.

✓ Our goal is to achieve great success in building.

Mismatch: 'goals is' should be either 'our goals are' or 'our goal is'. The meaning fits singular 'goal is'. Also the preposition 'on' is incorrect with 'building'; use 'in building' or rephrase to 'in construction' depending on intended meaning.

× Yes, it's a good place to work. Uh, I uh, can say that's a Batum is a, uh, fascinate city.

✓ Yes, it's a good place to work. I can say that Batumi is a fascinating city.

Remove incorrect 'a' before 'Batum' and correct city name to 'Batumi'. Use adjective 'fascinating' rather than 'fascinate'. Also avoid extra articles before proper nouns.

× It's situated uh, on the, uh, Bank of the, uh, sea and here is the many, uh, cultural heritages, uh, also.

✓ It's situated on the bank of the sea, and there are many cultural heritage sites here as well.

Lowercase 'bank' and use 'on the bank of the sea'. 'Here is the many' is ungrammatical; use 'there are many'. 'Cultural heritages' is awkward; use 'cultural heritage sites' or 'cultural heritage'.

× Yes, I like the place where I work because it's situated in the center of the city and there are many cafes, cinema.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because it's situated in the center of the city and there are many cafes and cinemas.

List must be parallel: use plural 'cinemas' to match 'many'. Add 'and' between items. 'Cinema' as a singular doesn't fit after 'many'.

× Also there are many new buildings. Where can I see, uh, the soul of the city?

✓ Also, there are many new buildings where you can see the soul of the city.

The original split two related ideas into separate sentences awkwardly and used a question form 'Where can I see...' that doesn't fit context. Rewriting into a single sentence clarifies that the new buildings are places where one can see the city's soul. If the student intended a question, it should be 'Where can I see the soul of the city?' directed to the examiner.

× I would like, umm, exaggerate, uh, my experience, uh, so I would like uh, to learn new skills, umm, uh, especially, uh, I would like to umm, yeah, to take new course about.

✓ I would like to expand my experience, so I would like to learn new skills. Specifically, I would like to take a new course.

'Exaggerate my experience' is incorrect; use 'expand' or 'broaden' experience. 'Take new course about' is incomplete and needs an article: 'take a new course' and specify the subject if possible. Remove redundant 'would like' repetitions and filler sounds for clarity.