Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “I'm not working or studying full-time at the moment”), then give two short supporting details (what you are doing now and your immediate plan). Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas.

예시: I'm not working or studying full-time right now. I'm preparing for an English exam because I plan to apply for a master's degree. After I pass the exam, I hope to begin my graduate program next year.

제안: Answer directly and organize information: start with a clear statement about current status, then give concise, specific past experience with linking words (e.g., “for example,” “previously”). Correct tense and sentence structure to avoid fragments.

예시: I'm not working at the moment, but I'm a certified lab technologist. Previously, I worked in a hospital for six months, which was a valuable learning experience. I can also work in a research lab in the future.

제안: Give a clear opinion then support it with specific reasons and a brief contrast if needed. Use linking words (e.g., “because”, “however”) and correct article use and word order.

예시: Yes, I think hospitals are a good place to work because the salary is competitive and the work environment can be supportive. However, some people may be reluctant to work in labs because there are safety risks, so proper training is important.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give two specific supporting details (what you liked and why). Use correct tense and pluralization, and keep sentences concise.

예시: Yes, I loved the place where I worked. It provided an enjoyable learning experience, and my coworkers were friendly and helpful, which made it easier to improve my skills.

제안: Be specific and coherent: begin with a clear statement of your plan, then give reasons using linking phrases like “because” or “so”. Avoid unclear fragments and finish your thought. Explain why a government job appeals to you with one or two reasons.

예시: In the future, I plan to find a job in my country, preferably in the government sector because it offers job security and good benefits. I hope to gain experience there before possibly pursuing further studies.

× At the moment I'm currently neither working or a full time student, but I'm preparing for for my English exam so I can apply for my masters degree after that when I graduated. I hope I find.

✓ At the moment I'm neither working nor a full-time student, but I'm preparing for my English exam so I can apply for my master's degree after I graduate. I hope I find one.

Issues: incorrect coordination 'neither ... or' should be 'neither ... nor'; redundant 'currently' with 'at the moment'; 'full time' needs hyphen as adjective 'full-time'; doubled 'for for' is a typo; 'masters' needs apostrophe and be singular possessive 'master's degree'; incorrect tense 'when I graduated' should be future/intent 'when I graduate'; sentence 'I hope I find' is incomplete — add object 'one' (a place/job/program) or rephrase. Suggestion: use consistent present continuous for current preparation and present/future for intended actions, and fix punctuation and hyphens.

× I'm currently not working, but I am a certified lab technologist. I can work in a research lab or in a hospital. Actually, I worked in a hospital for six months is what it was like a really experience full of learning and.

✓ I'm currently not working, but I am a certified lab technologist. I can work in a research lab or in a hospital. Actually, I worked in a hospital for six months; it was a really valuable learning experience.

Issues: run-on and awkward structure 'for six months is what it was like a really experience full of learning and' is ungrammatical. Use a semicolon or separate sentences and correct noun phrase 'a really valuable learning experience'. Maintain past tense 'worked' and describe the experience in past tense. Suggestion: simplify and reorder to subject-verb-complement form.

× So in my opinion I think hospital is a a good place to work. The salary is really worth it and the environment I worked in was really good. Although you may some people will be afraid to work in in the lab because it's a full of risk.

✓ So in my opinion I think the hospital is a good place to work. The salary is really worth it and the environment I worked in was very good. Although some people may be afraid to work in the lab because it's full of risks.

Issues: missing definite article 'the hospital' when speaking about hospitals in general context here; double 'a a' typo; 'really good' better as 'very good' but either is acceptable; incorrect word order 'you may some people will' should be 'some people may'; double 'in in' typo; 'it's a full of risk' should be 'it's full of risks' (remove extraneous article and pluralize 'risk'). Suggestion: pay attention to article usage, word order for modal verbs, and pluralization for countable abstract nouns.

× Yes I love the place I worked in, it was really good place, provide a really enjoyable and learning journey for me and my coworkers were really nice to me and teach me.

✓ Yes, I loved the place I worked in; it was a really good place, providing a very enjoyable and educational experience for me, and my coworkers were really nice and taught me a lot.

Issues: tense inconsistency — 'I love' vs past context 'worked in' should use past 'I loved'; missing article 'a really good place'; 'provide' should be changed to present participle 'providing' to connect clauses; 'learning journey' is awkward — use 'educational experience'; 'teach me' should be past 'taught me'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent when describing past job, use participle phrases to link ideas, and ensure verbs agree in tense.

× My future work time is to find a job in my country. I would like it to be a government job because it's more. More effective, Not effective. What's the board?

✓ My future plan is to find a job in my country. I would like it to be a government job because it is more secure and offers better benefits. I'm not sure what the board requires.

Issues: 'future work time' is unnatural — use 'future plan' or 'goal'; 'I would like it to be a government job because it's more' incomplete fragment; 'More effective, Not effective. What's the board?' are fragments and unclear. Rephrase to give clear reasons (security, benefits) and clarify question about 'board' — interpret as uncertainty about requirements. Suggestion: use clear noun phrases for plans and complete sentences explaining reasons; avoid fragments.