Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ понятен, но содержит грамматические ошибки и неточные формулировки. Следует улучшить грамматику (singular/plural, артикли), словосочетания (major in International Relations, faculty → faculty/department) и сделать ответ короче и естественнее. Также можно добавить одно конкретное объяснение или пример, связанный с интересом к международному сотрудничеству.

예시: I'm a second-year student at a Russian university, majoring in International Relations. I chose this field because I'm fascinated by how countries cooperate on issues like trade and climate policy.

제안: Ответ содержит слово-прояснение, но есть явные ошибки: неправильное употребление 'can't' вместо 'can' и проблемы с артиклями и временами. Нужно исправить фактическую информацию и сделать предложение более естественным и кратким, не более 3–4 предложений. Добавьте конкретику о ежедневных обязанностях, чтобы показать словарный запас.

예시: I work at a fast-food chain called Rosters, which is similar to KFC. I have worked there for almost two years and the job has helped me improve my communication skills because I talk with many customers every day.

제안: Хорошая структура (тема + пример), но есть ошибки в словах и согласовании (leaning with us, a flexible hours, on daily basis). Следует использовать точные выражения: 'supportive and understanding', 'flexible hours', и дать более конкретный пример того, как гибкий график помогает. Уберите избыточность.

예시: Yes — it's a good place to work. The environment is pleasant and the managers are supportive and understanding. For example, they offer flexible hours, which makes it easier for me to balance work and my studies.

제안: Ответ ясный и конкретный, но есть грамматические ошибки и неестественные выражения ('every so often I late for the work', 'much earlier' можно уточнить). Рекомендуется исправить времена и фразы: 'I am often late for work', 'leave earlier to catch the bus', и добавить небольшое связующее слово для плавности.

예시: Honestly, I'm not very happy with the workplace because it's far from my home. I often have to leave much earlier to catch the bus, and sometimes I'm late for work, which makes the whole day more tiring.

제안: Ответ нечеткий в первой части ('To be honest, I won't' — неясно, не буду что?). Нужно прямо ответить и структурировать мысль: короткое вступление о планах, затем объяснение и конкретная цель. Следует использовать более точные фразы: 'a portfolio career' объяснить кратко, и 'help countries cooperate' формулировать естественно. Избегайте повторов ('cooperate together').

예시: I plan to build a portfolio career to develop communication and organisational skills across different fields. Ultimately, I hope to work in international relations, helping countries cooperate on issues like trade and environmental policy.

× Right now I'm a second year student in the Russian University and I major in International Relationship.

✓ Right now I'm a second-year student at a Russian university and I major in International Relations.

Use of 'second year' as a compound adjective requires hyphens: 'second-year'. Use article and preposition: 'at a Russian university' (not 'in the Russian University'). 'International Relationship' should be plural and treated as a field name: 'International Relations'. Suggestion: Use hyphenated compound adjectives before nouns, choose correct prepositions for institutions ('at'), and use standard program names (plural where appropriate).

× I've chosen these faculty because I like how different countries collaborate.

✓ I chose this faculty because I like how different countries collaborate.

'These' is incorrect demonstrative for singular 'faculty'; 'this' is correct. Use past simple 'I chose' for a completed decision. 'Faculty' can be countable as 'this faculty'. Suggestion: Match demonstrative pronouns to noun number and use appropriate tense for completed actions.

× I work in a fast food chain called Rosters.

✓ I work at a fast-food chain called Rosters.

Preposition 'at' is more natural for workplaces. Use hyphen in 'fast-food' as a compound adjective. Suggestion: Use 'at' for companies or places of work and hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns.

× It is similar to international chain KFC.

✓ It is similar to the international chain KFC.

When referring to a specific well-known chain in a comparative phrase, use the definite article 'the'. Suggestion: Use 'the' when speaking about a specific entity known to the listener.

× To be honest, I like this job because I can't build my communication skills and I've been working there for almost 2 years.

✓ To be honest, I like this job because I can build my communication skills and I've been working there for almost two years.

'Can't' (cannot) contradicts intended meaning; use 'can'. Also write numbers under ten as words: 'two years'. Suggestion: Check polarity of modal verbs to match intended meaning; write small numbers as words in formal writing.

× Yes, it is a good place to work.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Suggestion: No action required.

× I have a pleasant environment and our managers are very supportive and leaning with us.

✓ I have a pleasant work environment, and our managers are very supportive and lenient with us.

You need 'work environment' for clarity. 'Leaning with us' is incorrect; likely intended 'lenient' or 'leaning towards us'—'lenient with us' fits context. Also add a comma before 'and' joining independent clauses. Suggestion: Use precise adjectives and collocations: 'work environment', 'supportive and lenient'.

× For instance, they give us a flexible hours which makes me want to go to work on daily basis.

✓ For instance, they give us flexible hours, which makes me want to go to work on a daily basis.

'A flexible hours' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a'. Add comma before 'which'. Include article in 'on a daily basis'. Suggestion: Ensure articles agree with noun number and include commas before non-restrictive clauses.

× To be honest, I'm not very happy with my workplace because it's far from my neighborhood.

✓ To be honest, I'm not very happy with my workplace because it's far from my neighborhood.

Sentence is correct. Suggestion: No action required.

× Sometimes I have to leave much earlier in order to catch the bus, and every so often I late for the work.

✓ Sometimes I have to leave much earlier in order to catch the bus, and every so often I'm late for work.

Use contraction or form of 'to be': 'I'm late' (not 'I late'). Drop 'the' before 'work' when speaking about going to work in general. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms for states ('be' + adjective) and omit 'the' before 'work' in this context.

× That makes my whole day more tiring.

✓ That makes my whole day more tiring.

Sentence is correct and fits present tense narrative. Suggestion: No action required.

× To be honest, I won't.

✓ To be honest, I won't say so.

'I won't' is vague and incomplete here; it needs an object or phrase to complete the meaning. If the student means 'I don't know' or 'I won't answer', use full clause. Suggestion: Complete the negative future with a verb or phrase to convey the intended meaning.

× I would like to have a portfolio career in order to build communication and organizational skills across each field.

✓ I would like to have a portfolio career in order to build communication and organizational skills across different fields.

'Across each field' is awkward; 'across different fields' or 'in various fields' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'different' or 'various' when referring to multiple fields.

× However, I would like to work in international relations in order to help different countries to cooperate together.

✓ However, I would like to work in international relations in order to help different countries cooperate with each other.

Don't use both 'to' and 'together'—'cooperate' often takes 'with' + object or 'cooperate with each other'. Suggestion: Use 'cooperate with each other' or 'cooperate' + 'with' for mutual actions.