Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сформулируйте тему ответа чётко и исправьте лексические и грамматические ошибки. Избегайте слов, которые неуместны (например, «decree» вместо «degree») и неверного порядка слов в придаточных предложениях. Дайте одно или два конкретных поддерживающих факта, используя связки (for example, because) и не более 3–4 предложений в сумме.

예시: I'm a second-year student at Russian Corporation University, where I study Tourism and Hospitality. I chose this degree because I've always been curious about how hotels operate behind the scenes. For example, I enjoy learning about guest services and hotel management, which is why I want to work in this industry.

제안: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и пропуски (например, missing verb в «It quite similar»), используйте связки (because, so) для логичности и уточните детали (какая именно работа, какие обязанности). Держите ответ компактным: тема, причина, пример.

예시: I work at a fast-food chain called Frostex, which is quite similar to KFC. I enjoy the job because it pays well for a student and offers flexible hours, so I can balance work and my studies. For instance, I usually work evening shifts three times a week.

제안: Уберите повторения и исправьте грамматику (например, «staff usually get high tips»). Используйте логические связки вместо длинных перечислений (for example, because, moreover) и добавьте конкретный пример о гибком графике или размере чаевых. Ограничьте ответ 2–3 предложениями.

예시: Yes, it's a good place to work because the restaurant does well financially, so employees often get good tips and higher wages. Moreover, managers provide flexible schedules, which helps me balance shifts with my classes.

제안: Используйте настоящее время согласованно (I find, not I found) и замените неестественные выражения («normal temperature») на более подходящие (comfortable temperature). Добавьте одно конкретное примечание о том, что именно помогает вам работать продуктивно, и держите ответ в пределах 2–3 предложений.

예시: Yes, I do. I find the restaurant comfortable to work in because it has a quiet staff area and a comfortable temperature, which helps me concentrate. Also, having good equipment and friendly colleagues makes shifts more productive.

제안: Исправьте повторы и грамматику (удалите двойное «in», замените «interested by» на «interested in», «con conflicts» на «conflicts»). Начните с чёткой темы (I want to work as…), затем объясните причину и приведите конкретный пример или шаг (например, изучать международные организации). Не больше трёх предложений.

예시: In the future, I would like to work in international relations, ideally as a diplomat. I've been interested in how countries cooperate since childhood, so I plan to study foreign policy and intern at a government or international organization to gain practical experience.

× I'm a second year student at Russian Corporation University studying tourism and hospitality. I have chosen this decree because since childhood I've always been curious about working in hotels and how do they work behind the scenes.

✓ I'm a second-year student at Russian Corporation University, studying tourism and hospitality. I chose this degree because, since childhood, I've always been curious about working in hotels and how they work behind the scenes.

The original contains sentence structure and word choice errors: 'second year' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective (second-year). 'Decree' is the wrong word; the correct noun is 'degree'. The clause 'how do they work behind the scenes' uses incorrect word order for an indirect question — it should be 'how they work behind the scenes'. Also 'I have chosen this degree' is grammatically correct but simple past 'I chose' is more natural when giving a reason for a past decision. Suggestions: use hyphenation for compound adjectives, choose the correct noun (degree), and use statement word order for indirect questions.

× I work in a fast food chain called Frostex. It quite similar to international chain KFC. I like my job because it's really lucrative for me as a teenager as our salaries are much higher than in other places and flexible working allows me to combine both work and studies.

✓ I work in a fast-food chain called Frostex. It is quite similar to the international chain KFC. I like my job because it's really lucrative for me as a teenager: our salaries are much higher than in other places, and the flexible working hours allow me to combine both work and studies.

Errors include missing hyphen in 'fast-food' (compound adjective), missing verb 'is' in 'It quite similar', and awkward coordination and punctuation in the third sentence. 'Flexible working' needs a noun (hours) and a definite article 'the' improves clarity. Use a colon or commas to separate reasons. Suggestions: include the verb 'is', hyphenate compound adjectives, specify 'working hours', and use clearer punctuation to list reasons.

× Our salaries are much higher than in other places because the restaurant is very lucrative and the staff is usually get a high tips and moreover, our managers offer a flexible schedule which makes it easy to balance between work and studies.

✓ Our salaries are much higher than in other places because the restaurant is very lucrative, and the staff usually get high tips. Moreover, our managers offer a flexible schedule, which makes it easy to balance work and studies.

Problems: 'the staff is usually get a high tips' mixes verb forms and number agreement. 'Staff' can take plural verbs in informal use but here we must correct structure: 'the staff usually get high tips' or 'staff usually receive high tips'. 'A high tips' is incorrect: 'tips' is plural so 'high tips' or 'a high tip' for singular. Also punctuation: 'moreover' should start a new sentence or follow a semicolon. Suggestions: use consistent verb forms, match singular/plural for countable nouns, and punctuate connecting adverbs correctly.

× Yes, I would. I found our restaurant very comfortable to work in. It has all necessary amenities from a quiet dining room to the normal temperature, which makes it easy to concentrate and be productive during the shift.

✓ Yes, I would. I find our restaurant very comfortable to work in. It has all the necessary amenities, from a quiet dining room to a comfortable temperature, which makes it easy to concentrate and be productive during a shift.

Tense and word-choice issues: 'I found' implies past and conflicts with present opinion — use present 'I find'. 'All necessary amenities' needs the definite article 'the'. 'The normal temperature' is awkward; use 'a comfortable temperature' for clarity. 'During the shift' is acceptable but 'during a shift' is more general. Suggestions: keep tense consistent when expressing general opinions, use definite articles with 'necessary', and choose adjectives that fit meaning ('comfortable').

× To be honest, in the future I would like to work as an expert in in international relations because since childhood I've always been interested in how different countries coordinate with each other.

✓ To be honest, in the future I would like to work as an expert in international relations because, since childhood, I've always been interested in how different countries coordinate with each other.

Minor errors: double 'in in' — remove the duplicate. Comma after 'because' is optional but adding commas around the time phrase improves clarity. The rest is grammatically fine: 'would like to work' correctly expresses a future wish. Suggestion: proofread for duplicated words and use commas to set off introductory or time phrases.

× I'm particularly interested by diplomacy because I would like to resolve con conflicts among countries.

✓ I'm particularly interested in diplomacy because I would like to resolve conflicts among countries.

'Interested by' is incorrect collocation in English; use 'interested in'. 'Con conflicts' includes an extraneous 'con' — remove it. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'in' after 'interested' and proofread for stray fragments or repeated letters/words.