Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Antwort verbessern: Verwenden Sie eine natürlichere, direktere Formulierung und vermeiden Sie ungewöhnliche Wortwahl. Geben Sie eine klare Hauptaussage und ggf. ein kurzes Detail. Beispielsweise: sagen Sie "I’m a 12th-grade student" statt "visiting the 12th grade". Verwenden Sie einfache, korrekte Grammatik und keine unnötigen Wörter.

예시: I’m a 12th-grade student. I’m preparing for my final exams this year, so most of my time is spent studying and attending classes.

제안: Antwort verbessern: Nutzen Sie eine klarere Wortwahl und richtige Grammatik (z. B. "I have a part-time job" statt "I am working a mini job"). Fügen Sie ein kurzes, spezifisches Detail hinzu und verwenden Sie ein verbindendes Wort, falls nötig. Halten Sie die Antwort natürlich und kurz.

예시: I have a part-time job at a bar by the sea, and I really enjoy it. The location is beautiful, so serving customers with a view makes the work pleasant.

제안: Antwort verbessern: Strukturieren Sie die Antwort mit einem klaren Thema, verwenden Sie Verknüpfungswörter (e.g. "because", "also") und geben Sie spezifische Gründe. Vermeiden Sie Wiederholungen wie zweimal "I think it's a good place to work."

예시: Yes, it’s a great place to work because I can earn some money while studying and the team is friendly. Also, the manager is supportive, which makes the job more enjoyable.

제안: Antwort verbessern: Entfernen Sie Füllwörter wie "umm" und vermeiden Sie unklare Formulierungen (z. B. "on the other side of the sea"). Erwähnen Sie ein oder zwei konkrete positive Aspekte und verbinden Sie sie logisch mit "because" oder "so".

예시: Yes, I like it a lot because I can earn some money while studying and the atmosphere is lovely — the bar faces the sea, so I often watch the sunset during my shifts.

제안: Antwort verbessern: Korrigieren Sie Wortwahl und Grammatik (z. B. "I’m still planning" ist gut, aber Begriffe wie "Abbey tour", "gymnasium", "become up psychologist", "RB2" sind unklar). Erklären Sie kurz und klar Ihren Plan: nennen Sie das gewünschte Berufsziel und welche Schritte nötig sind. Vermeiden Sie Füllwörter und Abkürzungen ohne Erklärung.

예시: I’m still deciding, but I plan to study psychology at university. First, I need to finish high school and get good exam results so I can apply for a psychology program.

× I'm currently visiting the 12th grade in high school.

✓ I'm currently in the 12th grade in high school.

Using 'visiting the 12th grade' is incorrect because 'visit' implies a short-term action; we use 'be in' or 'attend' to describe being a student in a grade. Suggestion: say 'I'm in the 12th grade' or 'I'm attending the 12th grade.'

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

The sentence includes an extra '>' character likely from a typo. Remove the extraneous character. Ensure punctuation is only the question mark.

× I am working a mini job at a bar at a very beautiful sea.

✓ I have a mini job at a bar by a very beautiful sea.

The progressive 'I am working a mini job' is unnatural for a regular job; use 'I have a mini job' or 'I work a part-time job.' Also 'at a very beautiful sea' is unidiomatic; use 'by' or 'near' the sea. Suggestion: 'I have a part-time job at a bar by a very beautiful sea.'

× I really like my coworkers and my chef.

✓ I really like my coworkers and my boss/chef.

If the person is referring to the person who manages the bar, 'boss' is more natural in English; if they mean the cook, 'chef' is fine. No grammar error if intended 'chef', but clarify role. Suggestion: use 'boss' for manager or 'chef' for cook.

× I think it's a very good place to make a little bit of money while I am still studying.

✓ I think it's a very good place to earn a little money while I am still studying.

Use 'earn' or 'make' without 'a little bit of' for concise English. 'Make a little bit of money' is colloquial but acceptable; 'earn a little money' is more natural in this context.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The examiner's question 'Would you like the place where you work?' is awkward; 'Do you like the place where you work?' is standard. 'Would you like' asks about hypothetical preference.

× Yes, it's a very good place to work. I can earn a bit of money while I'm still studying and I really love the atmosphere because it is umm, it is on the other side of the sea, so I can watch the sunset while I work.

✓ Yes, it's a very good place to work. I can earn a bit of money while I'm still studying, and I really love the atmosphere because it's on the seaside, so I can watch the sunset while I work.

Replace 'on the other side of the sea' with 'on the seaside' or 'by the sea' for natural English. Remove repetition 'it is umm, it is' and combine clauses with a comma and 'and.' Suggestion: '...because it's by the sea, so I can watch the sunset while I work.'

× What are your future work plans?

✓ What are your future work plans?

No grammatical error. The sentence correctly uses present continuous/form for asking future plans.

× I'm still planning because I'm currently doing my Abbey tour in the gymnasium, but umm.

✓ I'm still deciding because I'm currently doing my Abitur at the gymnasium.

'Abbey tour' is likely a misheard phrase; the correct term in many contexts is 'Abitur' (the German final exam) and 'doing my Abitur at the gymnasium' fits. Use 'deciding' or 'planning' rather than 'still planning because I'm currently doing' for clarity.

× My plan for the future is to become up psychologist umm and do like my study there, but it still depends on how good my RB2 will be.

✓ My plan for the future is to become a psychologist and study that field, but it still depends on how good my RB2 results will be.

Several issues: 'become up psychologist' is incorrect—use 'become a psychologist.' 'Do like my study there' is ungrammatical; use 'study that field' or 'study psychology.' 'RB2' is unclear but assumed to be exam results; say 'results' for clarity. Use 'how good my RB2 will be' -> 'how good my RB2 results will be.'