Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and articles, and avoid extra information that confuses meaning. Improve accuracy in past tense and prepositions, and reduce redundancy. Use linking words only if adding brief supporting detail (e.g., "I’ve worked as a staff nurse in the emergency department of a regional hospital for five years. I graduated from university eight years ago and chose emergency nursing because...").

예시: I’ve worked as a staff nurse in the emergency department of a regional hospital for five years. I graduated from university eight years ago, and I chose emergency nursing because I enjoy fast-paced work and helping patients in urgent situations.

제안: Give a complete, grammatically correct sentence that directly answers the question. Use correct verb forms and add one short detail to sound natural. For example, use present simple or present continuous appropriately: "I work at a regional hospital" or "I’m working at a regional hospital." Use an article and capitalisation correctly.

예시: I work at a regional hospital, in the emergency department on the main floor.

제안: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because"/"so"). Correct noun and verb forms and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "busy", "stressful", "high-pressure").

예시: Not really. The emergency department is very busy and high-pressure, so staff are often stressed and must focus closely on each patient because many cases are critical.

제안: Answer directly, then give concise supporting reasons using linking words like "because" or "but". Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and be specific about what you dislike (e.g., workload, rules, management). Avoid repetition.

예시: Not really. I enjoy the work because it's challenging, but I don’t like the workplace because the regulations and management feel unfair and the workload is often excessive.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating your main plan, then add brief specific steps or timeline using correct tenses and prepositions. Use linking words like "so" or "then" to show sequence. Correct phrasing: "I got my US nursing license in October last year" and "I signed a contract with an agency in December."

예시: My main plan is to work as a nurse in the US. I got my US nursing license in October last year and signed a contract with an agency in December, so I’m now preparing for the IELTS exam to complete the relocation process.

× I work as a staff nurse in the emergency department over a Regional Hospital and I've been in this role for about 5 years.

✓ I work as a staff nurse in the emergency department of a regional hospital, and I've been in this role for about five years.

Use 'of' to indicate belonging ('department of a hospital') and lowercase 'regional hospital' unless it is a proper name. Use 'and' with a comma to join two independent clauses. Write numbers under ten in words for formal speech/writing. ID:26

× I graduate from university on eight years ago and I choose this job to be emergency.

✓ I graduated from university eight years ago, and I chose this job in the emergency department.

Use past tense 'graduated' for completed action and omit unnecessary preposition 'on' with time expressions like 'eight years ago'. Use past tense 'chose' to match timing. Rephrase 'to be emergency' to 'in the emergency department' for clarity and correct preposition. ID:5

× I working in a Regional Hospital.

✓ I work in a regional hospital.

Use the base present tense 'work' for habitual actions. The present participle 'working' requires an auxiliary verb (e.g., 'I am working') for present continuous. Also use 'regional hospital' lowercase unless it is a proper name. ID:10

× I think not really because emergency department is feel with, uh, nervous emotion and you need to pay attention to every patient because it may be a critical.

✓ I don't really think so because the emergency department is full of nervous emotions, and you need to pay attention to every patient because they may be in a critical condition.

Use 'don't' for negation with 'think'. Include the definite article 'the' before 'emergency department'. 'Is full of' is correct for indicating something contains many emotions; 'feel with' is incorrect. 'Nervous emotion' should be pluralized and 'full of' used. 'It may be a critical' is ungrammatical; use 'they may be in a critical condition' referring to patients and correct noun phrase. ID:13

× I'm not really like the place where I working because it's stressful and some regulation.

✓ I don't really like the place where I work because it's stressful and there are some unfair regulations.

Use 'don't like' for negation. Use base verb 'work' after relative clause 'where I'. Add 'there are' to introduce plural 'some regulations'. Clarify 'some regulation' to 'some unfair regulations' if speaker means rules they disagree with. ID:12

× It's it's not fair.

✓ It's not fair.

Remove the repeated 'it's'. Repetition is a spoken disfluency and should be edited out in written form. ID:26

× I mean, I like my job, it's challenging, but I don't like the place I work.

✓ I mean, I like my job; it's challenging, but I don't like the place where I work.

Add 'where' to introduce the relative clause 'where I work' for grammatical completeness. Use a semicolon or period to separate clauses for clarity. ID:12

× I've got my US nurse license last year on October and signed a contract with an agency on December.

✓ I got my US nursing license last October and signed a contract with an agency in December.

Don't use present perfect ('I've got') with a specific past time expression; use simple past 'got'. Use 'last October' (no 'on') and 'in December' (preposition for month). Use 'nursing license' for natural collocation. ID:6

× I'm planning prepare my IELTS exam now for working in the US.

✓ I'm planning to prepare for my IELTS exam now in order to work in the US.

Use the infinitive 'to prepare' after 'planning'. Include 'for' before 'my IELTS exam'. Rephrase 'for working in the US' to 'in order to work in the US' for clarity and correct preposition use. ID:8