Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha doğru dilbilgisi ve doğal ifadelerle verilmelidir. Kısa bir konu cümlesi ile başlayın, ardından mezuniyet beklentinizi açık ve doğru bir şekilde belirtin. Örneğin zaman ifadeleri ve doğru fiil formları (graduate, hope) kullanılmalı; gereksiz kelime hatalarından kaçının.

예시: I'm currently studying at an open high school. I haven't graduated yet, but I hope to graduate later this year.

제안: Cümleleri daha akıcı ve dilbilgisi kurallarına uygun kurun. Zaman ve sıklık zarflarını doğru yerleştirin ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın. Bağlaçlar (for example, because) veya sıralama bağlaçları (usually, generally) kullanarak mantıklı akış sağlayın.

예시: I'm mainly a student, but during the summer I work part-time as a waiter in several cafes. It depends on the place and my schedule, but I usually work on weekends to earn extra money.

제안: Daha net bir görüş belirtin ve destekleyici sebepler verin. Kişi odaklı ifadeler kullanırken iyelik ve çoğul eklerine dikkat edin. Tekrarları azaltın ve neden beğenmediğinizi somut örneklerle açıklayın.

예시: It depends on the person. For me, it's not ideal because the hours are long and the environment is noisy, although some people enjoy the social aspect of working in a café.

제안: Cümleleri daha kibar ve doğru bir dilbilgisiyle ifade edin. Meslek isimlerinin kullanımına dikkat edin (waiter/waitress, a job in computer science, study criminology). Neden tercih etmediğinizi açıkça belirtin ve alternatif hedefinizi kısa destekleyici detayla açıklayın.

예시: Definitely not. I don't enjoy being a waitress because it's tiring and repetitive. I'd prefer a more professional job, such as working in computer science or studying criminology, because those fields interest me more and offer better career prospects.

제안: Cevabınızı daha düzenli bir yapı ile verin: konu cümlesi, nedenleri ve kısa planlar. Coherence için bağlaçlar kullanın ve tutarlı zaman ifadeleri seçin. 'Also' veya 'too' kullanımını doğru yerde kullanın; gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın.

예시: I'm still undecided, but I would like to work abroad rather than in my home country. I also hope to live in a different city because I want to experience a new culture and have more career opportunities.

× I am studying in open high school.

✓ I am studying at an open high school.

Use of preposition: in -> at for institutions; include article 'an' before a singular countable noun. Suggestion: say 'I am studying at an open high school.'

× I didn't graduate yet but I hope I will gratitude this year.

✓ I haven't graduated yet, but I hope I will graduate this year.

Incorrect verb and tense: 'didn't graduate yet' should be present perfect 'haven't graduated yet' to indicate an action up to now; 'gratitude' is a wrong word; use verb 'graduate'. Suggestion: use present perfect for unfinished actions and the correct verb 'graduate'.

× I'm a student but during the summer I work part time as a waiter in a few cafes.

✓ I'm a student, but during the summer I work part-time as a waiter in several cafes.

Minor word choice: 'a few' -> 'several' is clearer; add hyphen in 'part-time' and comma before 'but'. Suggestion: use consistent phrasing and punctuation.

× It varies depends on the place and my schedule, but I usually have at weekends to earn extra money.

✓ It varies depending on the place and my schedule, but I usually work on weekends to earn extra money.

Incorrect structure: 'varies depends' should be 'varies' or 'depends' or 'varies depending on'; 'have at weekends' is ungrammatical—use 'work on weekends'. Suggestion: use 'depends on' or 'varies depending on' and correct verb 'work' with preposition 'on'.

× It depends on the person.

✓ It depends on the person.

This sentence is correct and needs no change; included for completeness.

× Mostly yes, but other people's might be don't like the working place.

✓ Mostly yes, but other people might not like the workplace.

Incorrect possessive and negation: 'other people's' is wrong; should be 'other people'; 'might be don't like' is ungrammatical—use 'might not like'; 'working place' -> 'workplace'. Suggestion: use 'other people might not like the workplace.'

× Also I don't like the working place too.

✓ I also don't like the workplace.

Word order and redundancy: 'Also' and 'too' both indicate addition—use one. 'working place' -> 'workplace'. Suggestion: place 'also' before the verb: 'I also don't like the workplace.'

× Definitely not because I don't want to be waitressed.

✓ Definitely not, because I don't want to be a waitress.

Wrong form 'waitressed' is not a verb form; use the noun 'a waitress' for the profession. Also add comma. Suggestion: use 'be a waitress' or 'work as a waitress.'

× I want to be more elegant job like computer science or studying in criminology.

✓ I want a more respectable job, such as working in computer science or studying criminology.

Incorrect noun phrase and preposition: 'be more elegant job' is ungrammatical—use 'want a more respectable job'; 'like computer science' should be introduced with 'such as' or 'working in'; 'studying in criminology' -> 'studying criminology'. Suggestion: rephrase to 'I want a more respectable job, such as working in computer science or studying criminology.'

× Waitress is so tired job.

✓ Being a waitress is such a tiring job.

Incorrect adjective/noun order: need gerund 'Being a waitress' and adjective 'tiring' rather than 'tired' to describe the job; 'so' -> 'such a' for noun phrase. Suggestion: say 'Being a waitress is such a tiring job.'

× I'm still thinking about it, but I'd say I want to work in another country, not my own country.

✓ I'm still thinking about it, but I'd say I want to work in another country, not my own.

Redundant 'country' repetition: 'not my own country' is understandable but 'not my own' is more natural. Tense is appropriate. Suggestion: shorten to 'not my own.'

× I always want to live in another city is too, so it really changes.

✓ I've always wanted to live in another city too, so that would be a big change.

Tense and structure: 'I always want' -> 'I've always wanted' for life desire up to now; 'in another city is too' is ungrammatical—use 'too' at end; 'so it really changes' -> 'so that would be a big change.' Suggestion: use present perfect for longstanding desires and rephrase for clarity.