Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and articles, and avoid run-on sentences. Use linking words like "also" or "currently" to connect ideas.

예시: I am currently a student. I have just completed a master's degree in Pharmacy with a specialization in Regulatory Affairs, and I am also taking a certification course on clinical trials and their regulation to gain practical experience.

제안: Answer directly and clearly. Begin with a topic sentence stating you do not work, then give one or two specific details about what you do at home. Use correct possessives and simpler phrasing to improve clarity and reduce redundancy.

예시: I don't have a paid job at the moment; I study full time. At home I help my parents with household tasks and also manage my own study-related work and projects.

제안: Respond directly and offer a brief explanation. If you have no direct experience, say so briefly and then give a related opinion or expectation about what makes a good workplace. Use linking words like "so" or "because" to connect ideas.

예시: I don't have experience working in an office, so I can't judge a workplace personally. However, I think a good place to work should have supportive colleagues and clear management because that helps productivity and job satisfaction.

제안: Be concise and avoid filler words. If you haven't worked, state that briefly and then describe what you would like in a future workplace (atmosphere, conditions). This shows communication ability even without direct experience.

예시: I haven't worked yet, so I can't comment on a specific workplace. In the future I would prefer a positive atmosphere with respectful colleagues and flexible hours to balance work and study.

제안: Organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence about your goals, then give specific steps or areas you will focus on. Avoid vague phrasing and correct grammar. Use linking words like "for example" or "also" to structure details about patient care, formulation, and research work.

예시: My long-term goal is to work in the pharmaceutical industry. Specifically, I aim to join a multinational company where I can contribute to drug formulation and patient care, and eventually work in research and development to improve medicines.

× Well, currently I'm a student, I have just completed my masters degree in Pharmacy specialization in Regulatory affairs.

✓ Well, currently I'm a student; I have just completed my master's degree in Pharmacy with a specialization in Regulatory Affairs.

Tense is mixed but mainly present perfect 'have just completed' is correct; errors are article and noun form ('masters' should be 'master's'), missing preposition 'with' for 'specialization', and capitalization. Suggestion: use 'master's degree' and 'with a specialization in Regulatory Affairs' for correct noun forms and clarity.

× At the moment I pursuing one certificate course related to the clinical trial and its regulation which enhance my practical knowledge.

✓ At the moment I'm pursuing a certificate course related to clinical trials and their regulation, which enhances my practical knowledge.

Missing auxiliary 'am' for present continuous; article 'one' is unnecessary; 'clinical trial' should be plural 'clinical trials' to match general meaning; 'its' should be 'their' to agree with plural; verb 'enhance' should be 'enhances' to agree with singular noun 'course'. Suggestion: include 'I'm pursuing', use 'a certificate course', and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× As I said earlier, I am a student so I didn't have any work related to the job so I totally work on my home which is helping with my mom and my father's and my younger brother and apart from that I can do my own work.

✓ As I said earlier, I am a student, so I don't have a job; I mostly work at home, helping my mother, father, and younger brother, and I also do my own work.

Mixed tenses: 'didn't have' is past but context needs present 'don't have'; 'work on my home' is incorrect preposition and wording—use 'work at home'; 'my mother's' and 'my father's' incorrect possessive use and listing; word order and conjunctions make sentence run-on. Suggestion: use present simple for current state, correct prepositions, use parallel list structure, and break into clearer clauses.

× As I said earlier, I'm not a working person so I don't know it is a good place to work or not.

✓ As I said earlier, I'm not currently employed, so I don't know whether it is a good place to work or not.

Use of 'working person' is awkward; better 'currently employed'. Also missing conjunction 'whether' to introduce alternative. Tense is present and should remain present. Suggestion: use 'whether' and clearer phrasing.

× As I before my turn, I didn't work, so I can't uh, judge the weather or atmosphere of the place which I will work in the future. So this question for me, it's not answerable.

✓ As I said before my turn, I haven't worked, so I can't judge the environment or atmosphere of a place where I might work in the future. So this question is not answerable for me.

Tense inconsistencies: 'I didn't work' is past simple but intended meaning is that they have no work experience—use present perfect 'I haven't worked'. 'Judge the weather' is incorrect collocation; use 'environment' or 'atmosphere'. 'Which I will work in the future' is awkward; use 'where I might work in the future'. Final clause needs proper word order: 'this question is not answerable for me.' Suggestion: use present perfect for experience, correct collocations, and clearer relative clause.

× Uh, for now, I have a planned letter to my career because I want to start in my own pharmaceutical and multinational company, which I can help to the help in the patient care as well as the formulation and particular medicines which I'm work for it. Even I, uh, do some work in my research and development so I can.

✓ For now, I have a plan for my career because I want to start my own pharmaceutical or multinational company, where I can help with patient care as well as formulation of specific medicines that I would work on. I also plan to do research and development work.

Many issues: 'have a planned letter to my career' is incorrect—use 'have a plan for my career'. 'Start in my own pharmaceutical and multinational company' should be 'start my own pharmaceutical or multinational company'. Relative clause and prepositions are incorrect: 'which I can help to the help in the patient care' → 'where I can help with patient care'. 'Particular medicines which I'm work for it' has wrong verb form and redundant pronoun—use 'specific medicines that I would work on'. Final sentence fragment lacks completion and proper tense—use 'I also plan to do research and development work.' Suggestion: simplify sentences, correct verb forms, prepositions, and use future/modal expressions like 'will' or 'plan to' for intentions.