Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は明確で簡潔ですが、より自然に聞こえるように語順や冠詞を直し、具体的な学年や理由を加えると良いです。例えば学んでいる年や専攻の理由を付け加えることで会話が広がります。

예시: I'm a student at Toy University, majoring in English and Accounting. I'm currently in my second year, and I chose these subjects because I'm interested in business and international communication.

제안: 文法と語順の誤りを修正し、可算名詞や冠詞（a/the）を正しく使いましょう。また、理由を言うときはより自然な表現（because → which means / so I can）を使うと効果的です。

예시: I work in a food court at a large shopping mall. I enjoy the job because I can try different foods during my lunch break, which is a nice perk.

제안: 発音や短いフレーズのつながり（it's, a good place）に注意し、文を整理して理由を明確に述べましょう。『charged』『trade』など不自然な語の選択を避け、正しい語（pay/commute）を使ってください。

예시: Yes, it's a good place to work because it's very close to my house, so I don't have to spend much money or time on commuting.

제안: 文が途切れていたり意味が不明瞭なので、文を一つにまとめて理由を順序立てて話しましょう。過去形や不適切な動詞（left）を避け、現在の状況を示す現在形を使ってください。

예시: Yes, I like my workplace because it's near my house, so I don't spend much money or time commuting. The convenient location makes my daily routine easier.

제안: 職業名は自然な形にし、理由や具体的な計画（どのように準備しているか）を付け加えると良いです。また文法や語順（become rich → become wealthy / an international businessman）を直しましょう。

예시: I want to become an international businessman. I'm studying accounting and English at university to prepare for working in global trade, and I hope to build a successful career in international business.

× I'm a student at the Toy University and I am studying English and Accounting.

✓ I'm a student at Toy University and I am studying English and accounting.

The original sentence used 'the Toy University' and capitalized 'Accounting'. University names usually do not take 'the' unless part of official name; 'Toy University' is more natural. 'accounting' as an academic subject is not a proper noun and should be lowercase. Suggestion: omit unnecessary definite article and use lowercase for academic subjects.

× I'm working at food court in big shopping malls.

✓ I work at a food court in a big shopping mall.

Using present continuous 'I'm working' can be acceptable for temporary jobs, but general statements about employment normally use simple present 'I work'. Articles are missing: 'a food court' and 'a big shopping mall' are required for singular countable nouns. Suggestion: use simple present for regular jobs and include appropriate articles.

× I love this work because I can eat delicious food of my lunch.

✓ I love this job because I can eat delicious food for my lunch.

'Work' vs 'job': 'job' is more natural here. 'delicious food of my lunch' is ungrammatical; use 'for my lunch' or 'for lunch'. Suggestion: replace 'work' with 'job' and use the prepositional phrase 'for my lunch'.

× Yes it it's good place to work because my workplace is here near the my house so I'm not charged. Expensive money to trade.

✓ Yes, it's a good place to work because my workplace is near my house, so I don't have to pay expensive commuting costs.

Multiple issues: missing commas and contractions fixed. 'good place' needs the indefinite article 'a'. 'here near the my house' should be 'near my house' (remove both 'the' and 'my' together). 'I'm not charged. Expensive money to trade.' is fragmented and ungrammatical; intended meaning likely 'I don't have to pay expensive commuting costs.' Suggestion: use 'a' before 'good place', remove extra articles, and rephrase the second clause into a single coherent sentence.

× Yes, I like my workplace because. The workplace near the my house so I don't spend much money on commuting so I left my workspace.

✓ Yes, I like my workplace because it is near my house, so I don't spend much money on commuting and I didn't have to leave my workplace.

Original contains sentence fragments and tense mismatches. 'because.' followed by fragment should be one sentence. 'The workplace near the my house' needs 'it is near my house' and remove extra 'the'. 'so I don't spend much money on commuting' is present tense and fine; final clause 'so I left my workspace' conflicts in meaning and tense — likely intended 'I didn't have to leave my workplace' or 'I didn't have to move'. Suggestion: combine clauses, correct articles, and align tenses to express intended meaning.

× My future work plan is international businessman.

✓ My future career plan is to be an international businessman.

Sentence lacks appropriate structure and infinitive form. 'work plan is international businessman' lacks verb form and article. Use 'career plan' or 'work plan', and 'is to be an international businessman' or 'is to become an international businessman.' Suggestion: use 'to be' or 'to become' plus article 'an' before 'international businessman'.

× I'm studying at the university about accounting and in English, so I want to become a rich.

✓ I'm studying accounting and English at university, so I want to become rich.

Word order: 'studying at the university about accounting and in English' is awkward. Use 'studying accounting and English at university.' 'become a rich' is incorrect because 'rich' is an adjective; do not use 'a'. Use 'become rich' or 'become a rich person'/'become wealthy.' Suggestion: reorder for natural English and remove the article before 'rich'.