Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的かつ情報が整理されていますが、発音の誤り（会社名や専門分野の読み）や自然さを高めるための簡潔さに改善余地があります。例えば固有名詞は正確に発音し、2文目以降は結びの一文でまとめると良いです。また“associate lawyer”より“an associate”や“a fifth-year associate at a law firm called ___”のように自然な表現を使いましょう。

예시: I work as a lawyer. I'm a fifth-year associate at a firm called Immunology, and I specialize in financial law.

제안: 地名や固有名詞の発音ミス（“malnutrition”“Malnochi”など）があり、意味を不明瞭にしています。内容も少し冗長なので、短く明確に場所とその特徴を述べる練習をしてください。繋ぎの語（As I said）を使う時は自然に使い、

예시: I work at a well-known law firm in Malnochi, a city that hosts many prominent Japanese law firms. My firm is one of the largest in the country.

제안: 考えながら話す「uh」「I don't, I, I」などの頻出を減らし、意見をはっきり一文で示してから理由を述べる構造にしてください（Topic sentence → Reason(s)）。具体的な例や程度を付け加えると説得力が増します。

예시: Actually, I don't think it's a good place to work. The atmosphere is quite tense because everyone is extremely busy, so junior staff rarely have time to ask questions or receive guidance.

제안: 回答の一貫性が欠け、言いかけや不完全な文（"without their"）が残っています。まず肯定・否定を明確にし、その理由を簡潔に補足してください。代名詞や複数形の使用（staffは集合名詞）にも注意しましょう。

예시: Yes, I like my workplace because there are many skilled staff members who support our work, which makes complex cases easier to handle.

제안: 伝えたい内容が混乱しており、文法ミスと繰り返しが多いです。まず結論（will I stay or plan to quit）を明確にし、理由を論理的に述べてください。さらに“rewarding”と“overwhelming”の対比を整理して、どちらが重要か述べると良いです。

예시: I'm considering quitting my current job. Although the role is rewarding financially and professionally, the workload is overwhelming and I want to find a position with better work-life balance.

× I'm a fifth year associate lawyer at the law firm Immunology.

✓ I'm a fifth-year associate at the law firm Immunology.

Hyphenate 'fifth-year' as a compound adjective and remove redundant 'lawyer' because 'associate' in context implies a lawyer; keeps sentence concise and grammatically correct.

× I specialize in financial law.

✓ I specialize in financial law.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. (Included because it met the allowed list; no change required.)

× As I said, I work at a law firm in malnutrition.

✓ As I said, I work at a law firm in Malnochi.

Use the proper place name 'Malnochi' capitalized; 'in malnutrition' is incorrect because 'malnutrition' is a noun unrelated to a location. Using the correct proper noun fixes the preposition usage and meaning.

× Malnochi is home to many of prominent Japanese law firms.

✓ Malnochi is home to many prominent Japanese law firms.

Remove the unnecessary 'of' which makes the phrase ungrammatical; 'many prominent' is the correct adjective-noun order.

× My firm is one of the most well known ones in the country.

✓ My firm is one of the most well-known firms in the country.

Hyphenate 'well-known' and replace vague 'ones' with 'firms' for clarity and formality; the structure 'one of the most ... firms' is standard.

× Honestly, I don't, I, I think my workplace is uh, sorry, uh, actually I don't think so.

✓ Honestly, I don't think so.

Remove fillers and repetitions for clarity; 'I don't, I, I think' is disfluent. The concise version conveys the intended meaning and fits spoken response norms.

× Uh, everyone is too busy and the, the atmosphere in the office is quite tense.

✓ Everyone is too busy, and the atmosphere in the office is quite tense.

Remove filler sounds and duplicate words; add a comma before 'and' to join the two independent clauses correctly.

× Because of this, it is hard to ask questions.

✓ Because of this, it's hard to ask questions.

Contraction 'it's' is acceptable in spoken English; sentence is otherwise correct. This keeps tone natural for speech.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The examiner's question wording is unnatural for meaning; 'Would you like the place where you work?' implies desire to have it. 'Do you like...' fits the intended inquiry. This is not strictly a grammar error in student's response but improves interaction clarity.

× In UH, in our office there are a lot of skilled UH Staffs which supports our work.

✓ In our office there are a lot of skilled staff who support our work.

'Staff' is an uncountable collective noun so do not add 's'; remove repeated 'UH' unless it is a proper name; use 'who' for people and 'support' to agree with plural meaning.

× I work as a lawyer but without their.

✓ I work as a lawyer, but I couldn't do it without them.

Replace incorrect 'without their' (possessive adjective) with object pronoun 'them' and add 'couldn't do it' to complete the thought; fixes pronoun and sentence structure.

× This this.

✓ I've been thinking about this.

The original 'This this.' is incomplete and disfluent. 'I've been thinking about this.' provides a grammatically complete spoken response matching context.

× I've been to consider quitting my job, my current job, since uh, also my current role is rewarding.

✓ I've been considering quitting my current job, even though my role is rewarding.

Use the present perfect continuous 'I've been considering' instead of 'I've been to consider'; remove repetition and awkward 'since uh, also'; use 'even though' to contrast the rewarding nature of the role with the desire to quit.

× The work itself is overwhelming.

✓ The work itself is overwhelming.

No change needed; sentence is grammatically correct and appropriately describes the situation.