Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời tốt về nội dung nhưng cần ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp/word choice. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, tránh lặp ý, sửa "medicine system" thành "medical systems" và có thể thêm một câu hỗ trợ ngắn bằng linking word như "because" hoặc "so". Giới hạn tối đa 3-4 câu.

예시: I'm a senior studying Electrical Engineering at Ho Chi Minh University of Technology. I chose this field because my father, who worked in education, inspired me and I became particularly interested in designing medical systems. This background has motivated me to focus on healthcare-related engineering projects.

제안: Ý rõ ràng nhưng câu hơi dài và có một số diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên (ví dụ "extending courses to others"). Nên dùng cấu trúc ngắn, sửa thành "tutoring" hoặc "teaching", dùng linking word như "but" hoặc "however" một cách tiết chế và bổ sung một chi tiết cụ thể (số giờ hoặc độ tuổi học sinh).

예시: I don't have a full-time job because I'm a student, but I work part-time tutoring high school physics. I usually teach small groups twice a week, which I enjoy because it helps me reinforce my own understanding and support younger students.

제안: Trả lời rõ, có ví dụ minh họa, nhưng nên ngắn gọn hơn và sửa một vài collocation ("industry linked projects" → "industry-linked projects" hoặc "collaborations with industry"). Có thể thêm một câu kết ngắn nói cảm nhận cá nhân. Giới hạn 2-3 câu.

예시: Yes, it's a great place to study and work because the university emphasizes practical training. For example, it has modern laboratories and regular collaborations with industry that give students hands-on experience, which I find very valuable.

제안: Câu trả lời có ý tốt nhưng ngữ pháp và collocation cần sửa ("help modern facilities" không đúng; dùng "have modern facilities", "well-equipped" với dấu gạch nối). Cần bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/I would like...), dùng linking word như "because" cho chi tiết, và giới hạn 2-3 câu. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về một thiết bị hoặc nguồn tài liệu mong muốn sẽ tốt hơn.

예시: Yes, I would like my workplace to have modern facilities because I need well-equipped labs to conduct experiments effectively. For instance, access to advanced measurement instruments and up-to-date technical journals would greatly support my research.

제안: Nội dung hợp lý nhưng nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng ("soft term" → "short term", "commit a master's degree" → "pursue/complete a master's degree", "high quality, research oriented positions" → "high-quality, research-oriented position"). Câu nên ngắn gọn, dùng linking word như "then" hoặc "and" giữa hai khoảng thời gian, và tránh lặp. Giới hạn 2-3 câu và nêu lý do cụ thể cho mỗi bước.

예시: In the short term, I plan to pursue a master's degree to strengthen my technical skills and improve my job prospects. In the long term, I hope to complete a PhD and work in a research-oriented position at a university, where I can supervise students and run projects.

× I am currently a senior student at Ho Chi Minh University of Technology majoring in Electrical Engineering.

✓ I am currently a senior student at the Ho Chi Minh University of Technology majoring in Electrical Engineering.

The proper noun of a specific university commonly takes the definite article 'the' in English. Use 'the Ho Chi Minh University of Technology' to refer to this particular institution. Suggestion: Include 'the' before specific university names when they function as unique institutions.

× I decided to follow my father's footsteps because he worked in education and inspired my interest in electrical systems design, especially in medicine system.

✓ I decided to follow my father's footsteps because he worked in education and inspired my interest in electrical systems design, especially in medical systems.

'Medicine system' is incorrect; the plural noun 'systems' should match 'electrical systems design' and the adjective form 'medical' is used to modify 'systems.' Suggestion: Use 'medical systems' to correctly express systems related to medicine.

× I'm currently a student so I don't have a full time job related to my studies.

✓ I'm currently a student, so I don't have a full-time job related to my studies.

Missing comma before 'so' joins two independent clauses; 'full time' should be hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before a noun: 'full-time.' Suggestion: Add a comma before coordinating conjunction joining two clauses and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× However, I have a part time job teaching physics to high school students because I'm good at the subject and I enjoy extending courses to others.

✓ However, I have a part-time job teaching physics to high school students because I'm good at the subject and I enjoy teaching courses to others.

'Extending courses' is not idiomatic; the correct verb is 'teaching' when referring to delivering courses. Also 'part-time' should be hyphenated. Suggestion: Use 'teaching courses' to express delivering instruction.

× Yes, my university is one of the most famous universities in Vietnam because it offers many benefits for students, especially in practical training.

✓ Yes, my university is one of the most famous universities in Vietnam because it offers many benefits for students, especially in practical training.

Sentence is acceptable; no article correction needed. Provided here to indicate no change. Suggestion: None.

× For instance, it has modern laboratories and regular industry linked projects which allow students to gain experience.

✓ For instance, it has modern laboratories and regular industry-linked projects which allow students to gain experience.

'Industry linked' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective 'industry-linked' modifying 'projects.' Suggestion: Hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns.

× Because my major is engineering, I would like my workplace to help modern facilities so I can conduct experiments effectively.

✓ Because my major is engineering, I would like my workplace to have modern facilities so I can conduct experiments effectively.

'Help' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'have' to indicate possession of facilities. Also article usage before 'modern facilities' is fine without 'the.' Suggestion: Use 'have' when expressing that a workplace should provide or possess facilities.

× In addition, I want access to a wide range of well equipped labs and reference materials to support my research and learning.

✓ In addition, I want access to a wide range of well-equipped labs and reference materials to support my research and learning.

'Well equipped' should be hyphenated as 'well-equipped' when used before a noun; this is standard for compound modifiers. Suggestion: Hyphenate 'well-equipped' when used as an adjective before nouns.

× In the soft term, I plan to commit a master's degree because it will boost my professional skills and make me more competitive in the job market.

✓ In the short term, I plan to pursue a master's degree because it will boost my professional skills and make me more competitive in the job market.

'Soft term' is a misuse; the correct phrase is 'short term.' Also 'commit a master's degree' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'pursue' or 'study for' a degree. Suggestion: Use 'short term' and verbs like 'pursue' for degrees.

× In the long term, I hope to pursue a PhD so I can obtain a high quality, research oriented positions in university.

✓ In the long term, I hope to pursue a PhD so I can obtain high-quality, research-oriented positions at a university.

Plural/singular and punctuation errors: 'positions' conflicts with 'a' and should be plural without 'a' or singular with 'a'; here use plural 'positions' so remove 'a.' Hyphenate compound adjectives 'high-quality' and 'research-oriented.' Use preposition 'at a university' to indicate location. Suggestion: Match articles with singular/plural nouns, hyphenate compound adjectives, and use correct prepositions ('at a university').