Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接并遵循结构：先一句明确定义身份，然后用1–2句补充理由或细节，避免重复与无意义的短语（如“practicals you are doing”不清楚）。注意句子简洁、衔接词自然。可以用更贴切的词汇（例如“practicals”替换为“practical skills”或“hands-on courses”）。

예시: I’m a finance student at South China University of Technology. I enjoy statistics and data analysis because they help me understand market trends and support better investment decisions. These practical courses also give me useful hands-on skills for a future finance career.

제안: 回答直接但要注意语法：问题问“Where do you work?” 学生应先纠正为“Where do you study?” 或回答说明自己不工作而是上学。句子要清晰并可补充地点细节（如校园或学院名称）。

예시: I don’t work at the moment; I study at South China University of Technology. My department is located on the main campus in Guangzhou, near the engineering buildings.

제안: 回答不连贯且有很多冗余及口误。先直接回答（Yes/No），然后给1–2个清晰具体的理由，用连接词（because, for example）。避免重复词与不相关表达，注意时态和主谓一致。

예시: Yes, I think it’s a great place to work because the campus is peaceful and the classrooms are well equipped. For example, I can easily access research databases and discuss ideas with professors.

제안: 表达要更准确与简洁。先直接回答，然后用具体细节说明喜欢的原因（环境、设施、氛围等）。避免犹豫词（uh）和语法错误（主谓不一致）。可以给一个具体情境说明如何帮助缓解压力。

예시: Yes, I like my university. The campus is beautiful with many trees and birds, which makes it a relaxing place to study when I’m stressed. I often walk in the gardens to clear my mind before exams.

제안: 回答需要更明确的职业规划和语法更正。先用一句话明确计划（例如继续读研或找工作），然后用1–2句说明原因或时间安排。避免重复词（maybe）和混乱结构。

예시: I plan to continue my studies and pursue a postgraduate degree in finance. After completing my master’s, I hope to work in investment analysis or financial consulting to gain professional experience.

× I am currently a student at South China University of Technology majoring in Finance.

✓ I am currently a student at the South China University of Technology majoring in Finance.

在英文中，很多以 University of ... 形式的院校名前需要使用定冠词 the。此句缺少定冠词，正确用法为 “the South China University of Technology”。建议记住类似结构的校名通常加 the。

× I enjoy studying statistics and data analysis because they help me understand the market trends and make informed decisions.

✓ I enjoy studying statistics and data analysis because they help me understand market trends and make informed decisions.

此处 “the market trends” 用法显得过于具体，通常可用复数名词泛指时不加定冠词，故改为 “market trends”。建议在泛指可数复数名词时不要使用 the。

× I trust these measures since finance offers strong career prospects as the practicals you are doing.

✓ I trust these subjects since finance offers strong career prospects and the practical work is useful.

原句结构混乱，短语 “as the practicals you are doing” 无法正确连接上下文。将 measures 改为 subjects 或 practical work，并用 and 连接两部分使句子通顺。建议理清句子主干，避免拼接不相关的短语。

× I'm studying in South China University of Technology.

✓ I'm studying at the South China University of Technology.

表示在某所学校学习时，常用介词 at 而不是 in，并且院校名前通常加定冠词 the。故改为 “at the South China University of Technology”。建议记住固定搭配：study at a university。

× Yes, I feel enjoyed in the places I like to study more than in my in my emails I see I love I lost the news knowledge as in the classroom.

✓ Yes, I enjoy being in the places where I like to study more than reading emails; I learn new knowledge better in the classroom.

原句混乱且使用了不正确的动词形式 “feel enjoyed”。应使用主动形式 enjoy 或 enjoy being。在表达比较时须分清主句和从句，并将多余重复部分（如 “in my in my”）去掉。建议简化句子，使用清晰的主语-谓语结构。

× Yes, our university are beautiful.

✓ Yes, our university is beautiful.

university 为单数名词，谓语动词应使用 is 而不是 are。主谓一致错误。建议根据主语单复数选择正确的动词形式。

× There are many trees, birds, uh, which might work is when I was when I was stressful.

✓ There are many trees and birds, which helped me when I was stressed.

原句有冗余和不连贯部分，“which might work is when I was when I was stressful” 语法混乱。用 which 引导定语从句并用过去时 helped 和形容词 stressed 表达既定意思。建议用简洁的从句表达原因和效果。

× I think maybe maybe we I have a further study from I will become a postgraduate and after that I will find a work.

✓ I think I will continue my studies and become a postgraduate; after that I will find a job.

原句有多重语病：时态混用、代词错误（we/I 混用）、词汇搭配不当（find a work 应为 find a job）。将句子统一为将来时并修正代词与搭配。建议说未来计划时使用 will 或 be going to，并注意代词一致性与常用搭配。