Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'um'. Also, improve sentence structure for clarity, for example, say 'near the border with Laos' instead of 'nearly border with Laos'.

예시: My hometown is Nong Kai, located in the northeastern part of Thailand near the border with Laos. It's a peaceful city with beautiful natural surroundings, and I really enjoy living there.

제안: Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly, and correct grammar such as 'one of the reasons' and 'comfortable living there'. Also, try to add more specific details to enrich your answer.

예시: I really like my hometown because it offers a peaceful atmosphere and beautiful natural scenery. For example, the parks and rivers provide a perfect place to relax after a busy day. This environment is one of the main reasons I feel comfortable living there.

제안: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and improve sentence flow. Use correct expressions such as 'for three years now' instead of '3 years going to now'.

예시: I have lived there for 20 years since I was born. However, I have been living in Bangkok for three years now to study at university.

제안: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and improve sentence structure. For example, compare your hometown with big cities clearly and explain why it's good for young people.

예시: My hometown is a great place for young people because it is peaceful and surrounded by natural beauty. Unlike big, busy cities, it offers a quiet environment that helps students concentrate on their studies.

× My hometown is Nong Kai, which is located in northeastern part of Thailand.

✓ My hometown is Nong Kai, which is located in the northeastern part of Thailand.

The phrase 'northeastern part' requires the definite article 'the' before it because it refers to a specific region. Omitting 'the' is incorrect in this context.

× It's a peaceful city, nearly border with Laos.

✓ It's a peaceful city, near the border with Laos.

The word 'nearly' is an adverb meaning 'almost' and is incorrect here. The correct preposition is 'near' to indicate proximity, and 'the' is needed before 'border' as it is a specific border.

× I really enjoy living there because it's, uh, beautiful, natural.

✓ I really enjoy living there because it's, uh, beautiful and natural.

When listing adjectives, they should be connected with a conjunction like 'and' to be grammatically correct. Simply separating adjectives with a comma is incorrect in this context.

× I really like my hometown because it offers a peaceful atmosphere and natural scenery. It's a perfect place to relax after a busy day and this environment is the one of the reason I feel comfortable to living there.

✓ I really like my hometown because it offers a peaceful atmosphere and natural scenery. It's a perfect place to relax after a busy day, and this environment is one of the reasons I feel comfortable living there.

The phrase 'the one of the reason' is incorrect. It should be 'one of the reasons' without 'the' before 'one' and 'reason' should be plural. Also, 'to living' is incorrect; it should be 'living' without 'to' after 'feel comfortable'.

× this environment is the one of the reason I feel comfortable to living there.

✓ this environment is one of the reasons I feel comfortable living there.

After 'feel comfortable,' the verb should be in the gerund form without 'to.' Also, 'the one of the reason' is incorrect; it should be 'one of the reasons.'

× I have lived there for 20 years since I was born.

✓ I have lived there for 20 years since I was born.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× However, I moved to Bangkok to study at university for umm, 3 years going to now.

✓ However, I have been living in Bangkok to study at university for, umm, 3 years up to now.

The original sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'moved' with a time expression 'going to now.' The present perfect continuous tense 'have been living' is appropriate to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Also, 'going to now' is incorrect; 'up to now' or 'until now' is better.

× Here's my hometown.

✓ This is my hometown.

'Here's' is a contraction of 'here is' and is typically used to present or show something physically present. 'This is my hometown' is more appropriate when talking about one's hometown in conversation.

× It's great place for young people because it is peaceful and surrounded by natural beauty and like big, uh, busy, big cities.

✓ It's a great place for young people because it is peaceful and surrounded by natural beauty, unlike big, uh, busy cities.

The phrase 'great place' requires the indefinite article 'a.' Also, 'and like big, uh, busy, big cities' is awkward; 'unlike big, busy cities' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× And it offers a quiet environment that helps students to fo uh, to concentrate on their study.

✓ It offers a quiet environment that helps students to, uh, concentrate on their studies.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is generally discouraged in formal speech. Also, 'to fo uh, to concentrate' is a filler error; it should be 'to, uh, concentrate.' 'Study' should be plural 'studies' when referring to academic work in general.