Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer provides relevant information but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity. For example, say "Victoria, the capital city of British Columbia, is known for its beautiful views and notable architecture. In summer, people enjoy outdoor activities like hiking, boating, and river rafting."

예시: Victoria, the capital city of British Columbia, is famous for its stunning scenery and unique architecture. During summer, many visitors come to enjoy activities such as hiking, boating, and river rafting.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use clearer sentence structures and linking words to connect ideas. For example, "I really appreciate the natural environment of my city because it helps me relax. I often go hiking and spend time with friends at the seaside and beaches during my free time."

예시: I really appreciate the natural environment of my city because it helps me relax. I often go hiking and spend time with friends at the seaside and beaches during my free time.

제안: Your answer has several grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Use the present perfect tense to talk about duration and improve clarity. For example, "I have lived in this city since my childhood. My parents also grew up here and have told me how much the city has changed over time. Nowadays, I enjoy hiking and boarding with my parents to relax and appreciate nature."

예시: I have lived in this city since my childhood. My parents also grew up here and have told me how much the city has changed over time. Nowadays, I enjoy hiking and boarding with my parents to relax and appreciate nature.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to organize your ideas clearly and avoid filler words. For example, "Yes, my hometown is a great place for young people. Firstly, there are many job opportunities, especially because of the local university. Additionally, young people can enjoy various outdoor activities like boating, hiking, and river rafting. Overall, it offers both career prospects and a healthy lifestyle."

예시: Yes, my hometown is a great place for young people. Firstly, there are many job opportunities, especially because of the local university. Additionally, young people can enjoy various outdoor activities like boating, hiking, and river rafting. Overall, it offers both career prospects and a healthy lifestyle.

× My hometown is Victoria which is a capital city of British Columbia.

✓ My hometown is Victoria, which is the capital city of British Columbia.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'capital city' because it refers to a specific, unique city in British Columbia.

× This city is known for its attractive views and important from the architectural point of view.

✓ This city is known for its attractive views and importance from the architectural point of view.

The word 'important' is an adjective and cannot be used as a noun here; 'importance' is the correct noun form to express the intended meaning.

× People come here to enjoy the nature in summer time to do different type of activities such as hiking, boating and river rafting.

✓ People come here to enjoy nature in the summer time and to do different types of activities such as hiking, boating, and river rafting.

'Nature' is uncountable and does not need 'the' here; 'different type' should be pluralized to 'different types' to agree with the plural activities.

× I like to go down to on the hiking with my friends in my spare time so that I can feel relaxed and get enjoyed with friends on the seaside and beaches as well.

✓ I like to go hiking with my friends in my spare time so that I can feel relaxed and enjoy time with friends on the seaside and beaches as well.

The phrase 'go down to on the hiking' is incorrect; 'go hiking' is the correct expression. Also, 'get enjoyed with friends' is incorrect; 'enjoy time with friends' is appropriate.

× I am living in the sea in this city since my childhood.

✓ I have been living in this city by the sea since my childhood.

The present continuous 'am living' is incorrect for an action that started in the past and continues; present perfect continuous 'have been living' is appropriate. Also, 'in the sea in this city' is awkward; 'in this city by the sea' is clearer.

× My parents grown up over here and they told me that this city has changed a lot with the passes of the time.

✓ My parents grew up here and they told me that this city has changed a lot over the passage of time.

'Grown up' is the past participle and requires an auxiliary verb; the simple past 'grew up' is correct here. 'Passes of the time' is incorrect; 'passage of time' is the correct phrase.

× Nowadays I like to do hiking, boarding in my spare time with my parents to get relaxed from the work and enjoy the nature.

✓ Nowadays, I like to go hiking and boarding in my spare time with my parents to relax from work and enjoy nature.

'Do hiking' is incorrect; 'go hiking' is the correct collocation. 'Get relaxed from the work' is awkward; 'relax from work' is better. Also, 'the nature' should be 'nature' without 'the'.

× Yes, there is a no doubt this city is important for the young generation.

✓ Yes, there is no doubt that this city is important for the young generation.

The phrase 'there is a no doubt' is incorrect; it should be 'there is no doubt that' to express certainty.

× First and foremost reason is that there are a lot of the job opportunities because of the uh, botanical university.

✓ The first and foremost reason is that there are a lot of job opportunities because of the botanical university.

'First and foremost reason' needs the definite article 'The' at the beginning. Also, 'a lot of the job opportunities' is incorrect; 'a lot of job opportunities' is correct because 'job opportunities' is plural and general.

× In addition to this, there uh, there are many activities people can do in their spare time such as boating, hiking, river rafting.

✓ In addition to this, there are many activities people can do in their spare time such as boating, hiking, and river rafting.

The repeated 'there uh, there' is redundant and should be corrected to a single 'there are'. Also, a comma before 'and' in a list is standard in Canadian English.

× So overall it is important from nature and future point of.

✓ So overall, it is important from the perspective of nature and the future.

The phrase 'from nature and future point of' is incomplete and ungrammatical; it should be 'from the perspective of nature and the future' to convey the intended meaning clearly.