Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, súc tích. Hãy tập trung mô tả đặc điểm nổi bật của quê hương một cách cụ thể và tự nhiên hơn.

예시: My hometown is Hating City, a beautiful and peaceful place surrounded by scenic views. It has friendly people, good schools, and convenient grocery stores nearby.

제안: Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sắp xếp ý rõ ràng hơn. Hãy dùng từ nối để liên kết các ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể để làm câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

예시: I like the people in my hometown because they are friendly and helpful. For example, they often assist me and others with problems and share interesting stories to make us feel relaxed.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và thiếu sự rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng thì hiện tại hoàn thành đúng cách và mô tả cụ thể hơn về sự thay đổi của quê hương.

예시: I have lived there for 18 years. Over time, the scenery has become more beautiful, and many new parks, schools, and grocery stores have been built to help people study, shop, and relax.

제안: Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tập trung vào lợi ích cụ thể cho người trẻ và đưa ra ví dụ rõ ràng.

예시: I believe my hometown is a good place for young people because it has suitable schools and parks where students can study and relax. Additionally, grocery stores provide everything they need for daily life.

× My hometown is in hating city.

✓ My hometown is in Hating City.

The preposition 'in' is correctly used here, but the city name should be capitalized as it is a proper noun. Proper nouns must always start with a capital letter.

× It is a beautiful and peaceful place which has more scenery and have the grocery store another tree beside.

✓ It is a beautiful and peaceful place which has more scenery and has a grocery store beside another tree.

The verb 'have' should agree with the singular subject 'place', so it should be 'has'. Also, the phrase 'another tree beside' is better expressed as 'beside another tree' for clarity and correct word order.

× The people and school are very friendly and have many students to.

✓ The people and school are very friendly and have many students too.

The word 'to' is incorrect here; it should be 'too' to mean 'also'. Additionally, 'have many students' is correct as 'students' is plural and matches the verb 'have'.

× Sometimes they also help me and other people to do anything and explained and solve the problems.

✓ Sometimes they also help me and other people to do anything and explain and solve the problems.

The verb 'explained' is in the past tense but should be in the base form 'explain' to parallel 'help' and 'solve' in the sentence. Parallel structure requires verbs in the same form.

× Besides, they also tell you about the daily life story or fun story to relax.

✓ Besides, they also tell you daily life stories or fun stories to help you relax.

The phrase 'tell you about the daily life story or fun story to relax' is awkward. It is better to say 'tell you daily life stories or fun stories to help you relax' for clarity and correct preposition use.

× I think that I have little there for 18 years.

✓ I think that I have lived there for 18 years.

The phrase 'have little there' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'have lived there' to indicate duration of residence. 'Little' is a quantifier and does not fit here.

× I see that the scenery is more beautiful and there are many new park, school and grocery store help uh people to buy, student to study or uh people to play and relax.

✓ I see that the scenery is more beautiful and there are many new parks, schools, and grocery stores that help people to buy, students to study, or people to play and relax.

The nouns 'park', 'school', and 'grocery store' should be plural to match 'many'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by adding 'that' to connect the clauses properly.

× Specially the school or the park are the suitable for students to study and relax.

✓ Especially the school and the park are suitable for students to study and relax.

The word 'Specially' is incorrect; the correct word is 'Especially'. Also, 'the suitable' should be 'suitable' without 'the' because 'suitable' is an adjective here.

× Beside the grocery store is a suitable place for people to buy and prepare anything for their home.

✓ Besides, the grocery store is a suitable place for people to buy and prepare anything for their home.

The word 'Beside' is a preposition meaning 'next to', but here the correct word is 'Besides', an adverb meaning 'in addition'. Also, a comma after 'Besides' is needed.