Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and informative, but avoid repeating words like 'rich rich'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: My hometown is ***** in the southern part of Tamil Nadu. It is well known for its jackfruit and cashew cultivation because of the fertile soil. Moreover, the cashews produced here are exported internationally.

제안: Your answer is natural but a bit long and repetitive. Try to use linking words and avoid repeating phrases like 'time to spend time'. Also, organize your points clearly.

예시: I feel very relaxed whenever I visit my hometown because I don't have to work. Additionally, I get to meet my school friends, and the most important thing is that everything is easily accessible since the shops are very close to my home.

제안: Your answer is direct and clear. To improve, use correct tense agreement and add a linking phrase for coherence.

예시: I was born and brought up there, and I lived there for nearly 17 years until I completed my high school education.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid awkward phrasing like 'improve the way how education used to be'.

예시: Yes, my hometown is becoming a great place for young people because significant developments have occurred recently. For example, many good colleges and schools have been established, which have improved education compared to when I was a child.

× I feel so relaxed whenever I visit my native place, I don't need to do any work, I get time to spend time with my school friends and the most important part is everything is easily accessible.

✓ I feel so relaxed whenever I visit my native place. I don't need to do any work. I get time to spend with my school friends, and the most important part is that everything is easily accessible.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with multiple independent clauses joined by commas, which is grammatically incorrect. It should be split into separate sentences or joined properly with conjunctions. Also, 'spend time with' is the correct phrase, so 'spend time with my school friends' is correct, but the original had 'spend time with my school friends' which is correct; however, the sentence structure needs improvement for clarity and correctness.

× I was born and brought up there. I lived for nearly 17 years until I complete my high school education.

✓ I was born and brought up there. I lived there for nearly 17 years until I completed my high school education.

The verb 'complete' should be in the past tense 'completed' to match the past time frame indicated by 'lived' and 'until'. Also, adding 'there' after 'lived' improves clarity.

× A lot of good colleges and schools have come up which improve the way how education used to be when I was a child.

✓ A lot of good colleges and schools have come up which have improved the way education used to be when I was a child.

The verb 'improve' should be in the present perfect tense 'have improved' to agree with 'have come up' and to indicate that the improvement has occurred over time up to the present. Also, 'the way how' is redundant; it should be 'the way education used to be'.