Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating location, then add one or two specific details. Correct grammar (use 'is located in' and 'is known for'). Avoid redundancy.

예시: My hometown is Molobi Bazaar. It is located in the Select Division and is best known for its monorail system, which connects the market area to nearby neighborhoods.

제안: Organize your answer: give a topic sentence then two specific reasons with brief examples. Use linking words (for example, additionally) and correct grammar (e.g., 'there are' not 'there have'). Avoid filler words.

예시: I like my hometown mainly because of its friendly people and rich history. For example, the residents are very welcoming, and the Mono River runs through the town, where many historical buildings and tourist sites are located.

제안: Use the correct tense and structure for duration questions. Start with a clear, concise statement: 'I have lived... for...' Avoid repeating words and unnecessary clauses.

예시: I have lived in Molobi Bazaar since I was born, so I have been here for 23 years and still live with my family.

제안: Reduce hesitation and be specific about what opportunities exist. Use linking words to list examples and avoid repetition. Correct plural forms and choose more relevant facilities for young people (e.g., schools, universities, jobs, sports centers).

예시: Yes, it is a good place for young people because there are many job opportunities and educational facilities. For instance, there are several factories and companies offering entry-level positions, as well as training centers and sports clubs for young residents.

× My hometown is Molobi Bazaar, it is located the select division and everyone known for its monorail.

✓ My hometown is Molobi Bazaar; it is located in the Select Division and is well known for its monorail.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and has missing verbs. Use 'located in' to indicate position (preposition 'in' required). Replace 'everyone known' with 'is well known' to form a correct passive description. Also use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses. Suggestion: Use 'located in' for places and use 'is known' or 'is well known' for passive descriptions.

× I usually like my hometown for its friendly people and they are very welcoming and also famous for its Mono river and there have lots of historical buildings and famous places that's why I like my hometown.

✓ I like my hometown because its people are friendly and welcoming, it is also famous for the Mono River, and there are lots of historical buildings and famous places; that's why I like my hometown.

Problems: inappropriate pronoun use and incorrect verb forms. Replace 'they are' with 'its people are' to correctly refer to 'people' as a property of the town. 'There have' is incorrect; use 'there are' to state existence. Also 'I usually like' is unnecessary—use 'I like' to express general preference. Suggestions: Keep pronoun references clear (use 'its' for possessions) and use 'there is/there are' for existence.

× I lived in this city since I was born and I have been here for 23 years and I still live here in my family with my family.

✓ I have lived in this city since I was born; I have been here for 23 years and I still live here with my family.

The clause 'I lived in this city since I was born' mixes past simple with a time expression requiring present perfect ('since'). Use present perfect 'have lived' to show an action that started in the past and continues now. Also remove redundant phrase 'in my family with my family' — use 'with my family.' Suggestion: Use present perfect with 'since' or 'for' when the action continues to the present.

× Yes, it is good for, uh, young peoples, for, uh, there are lots of uh, opportunities and uh, many, uh, several types of uh, facilities are here, uh, such as uh, police, worker factories, companies and working offices. That's why young people.

✓ Yes, it is good for young people because there are many opportunities and several types of facilities here, such as police services, factories, companies, and offices. That's why young people like it.

Errors: 'young peoples' is incorrect pluralization — use 'young people' (uncountable plural). Redundant filler words removed. 'Many' and 'several' overlap; use either 'many' or 'several' appropriately. 'Worker factories' is unclear; 'factories' suffices. 'Police' as a service should be 'police services' or simply 'the police.' Final clause 'That's why young people' is incomplete; add 'like it' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct plural noun forms and choose quantifiers that match nouns ('many opportunities', 'several facilities').