Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha doğrudan ve akıcı olmalı; gereksiz dolgu kelimeler (uh) ve tekrarlar çıkarılmalı. Maksimum 1–2 kısa cümleyle konum ve bir özellik verin. Ayrıca 'town' yerine İstanbul için uygun kelime (city) kullanılması daha doğrudur.

예시: I was born and raised in Istanbul, a vibrant city just a short drive from the coast. It’s known for its rich history and friendly neighborhoods.

제안: Cevap doğrudan ve daha spesifik destekleyici detaylar içermeli; tekrar eden ifadeler azaltılmalı. Bağlaçlar (for example, because) kullanarak nedenleri veya örnekleri ekleyin ve maksimum 3 cümleyle sınırlandırın.

예시: I like that my hometown feels lively despite its small size because there are many local festivals and friendly cafés. For example, every summer there’s a street fair where neighbors gather, which created many good memories for me.

제안: Cevabı daha net ve kısa bir cümleyle verin; zaman ifadesini düzgün kullanın ve gereksiz tekrarlar/dolgular çıkarın. Gerekirse ikinci cümlede kısa bir değerlendirme ekleyin (ör. neden güzeldi).

예시: I have lived there for almost 18 years. Those years were wonderful because I grew up surrounded by supportive family and close friends.

제안: Cevabı daha yapılandırılmış ve nazikçe ifade edin; tekrar eden kelime ve yapıları (child, children) düzeltin. Kısa bir görüş cümlesi verin, ardından 1–2 destekleyici neden sıralayın ve bağlaç kullanın. Öneri veya çözüm de eklenebilir.

예시: I don’t think it’s ideal for young people because public safety can be a concern in some neighborhoods. For example, there are limited youth facilities and occasional safety issues, so more community programs would help.

× I am a currently living there and it it is almost uh, 18 years and at 18 years I spent there was amazing.

✓ I am currently living there and it has been almost 18 years; the 18 years I have spent there have been amazing.

The sentence has multiple tense and auxiliary errors. Use present continuous 'am currently living' without extra 'a'. For expressing duration up to now use present perfect continuous or present perfect: 'has been almost 18 years' (present perfect) or 'have been living there for almost 18 years'. Also 'the 18 years I have spent there have been amazing' uses present perfect to link past experience to the present and requires plural verb 'have' for 'years'. Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'it'. Suggestion: 'I have been living there for almost 18 years; the years I have spent there have been amazing.'

× I in my opinion I would say no because it is not a place for child because the security is not well in my country and in my city the security is not good as well.

✓ In my opinion, I would say no because it is not a place for children; security is poor in my country and in my city.

Pronoun and noun number errors: use plural 'children' not 'child'. The phrase 'it is not a place for children' is sufficient; remove redundant 'I' at the start. Use adjective 'poor' to describe security, not 'well' which is an adverb. Streamline repetition: combine country and city statements. Suggestion: 'In my opinion, I would say no because it is not a place for children; security is poor in my country and in my city.'

× I like how small but lively it is and also it holds a lot of memories for me.

✓ I like how small but lively it is, and it also holds a lot of memories for me.

This sentence mainly needs punctuation and word order adjustment rather than pluralization, but 'a lot of memories' is acceptable. Insert a comma before 'and' and place 'also' after the subject 'it' for natural word order: 'and it also holds'. Suggestion: 'I like how small but lively it is, and it also holds a lot of memories for me.'

× The time I spent there was such a great experience for me.

✓ The time I spent there was a great experience for me.

Sentence is grammatical but 'such a great' is colloquial; simplifying to 'a great experience' is clearer. If emphasizing duration connected to present, consider present perfect: 'The time I have spent there has been a great experience.' Suggestion: choose present perfect if linking to present.

× I was born and raised in a friendly and welcoming town just a short drive from the city. Uh, it is called Istanbul.

✓ I was born and raised in a friendly and welcoming town just a short drive from the city. It is called Istanbul.

Remove filler 'Uh' and use standard sentence punctuation. 'It is called Istanbul' is grammatically fine. Alternatively say 'It’s called Istanbul.' Suggestion: avoid filler words in formal speech.