Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on clarity and correct sentence structure. Start with a simple clear topic sentence stating where your hometown is. Give one or two specific supporting details (e.g., famous food, landscape, tourism) using linking words like 'also' or 'because'. Keep answers under five sentences and avoid redundant phrases.

예시: I am from Jodhpur, a town in the southern part of Bangladesh. It is famous for its fresh hilsa fish, so many tourists visit for the riverside cuisine. Because the town has beautiful landscapes, it attracts visitors year-round.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence naming one or two things you like. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'also') to explain reasons. Provide specific details (e.g., rivers, riverside area) and avoid repeating words. Keep it concise and grammatically correct.

예시: I especially like the riverside areas in my hometown because three rivers meet near the town. This creates beautiful scenery and peaceful spots for walking and fishing, which many locals and visitors enjoy.

제안: Give a clear direct answer to the time question first (e.g., 'I have lived there for 20 years'). Then add one or two brief supporting details about current situation using linking words like 'but' or 'now'. Correct tense and concise phrasing will improve clarity.

예시: I have lived in Jodhpur for about 20 years because it is my birthplace. However, I moved to Dhaka later for my studies and work, and now my mother and younger brother still live there, so I visit them sometimes.

제안: Answer directly with a clear opinion sentence ('Yes, it is a good place for young people') and then give two specific reasons, linked logically (use 'because' and 'for example'). Mention concrete activities or facilities that appeal to young people (e.g., parks, festivals, markets). Avoid vague words and repetition.

예시: Yes, it is a good place for young people because the community is friendly and there are many cultural events. For example, there are regular festivals, local markets, and riverside parks where young people can socialize and take part in activities.

× I am from Jodhpur is the southern part of Bangladesh.

✓ I am from Jodhpur, which is in the southern part of Bangladesh.

The sentence wrongly uses two clauses without correct linking and omits the verb 'be' structure for location. Use a relative clause 'which is in' to state location. Also add a comma before the relative clause for clarity.

× A people known as a Chatpur hilsha home because the best fresh hillshah in port from Jatpur, another place to other place and there are lot of tourists came here every day to visiting our homeland which is very positive things because my hometown is quite very beautiful and the landscape.

✓ People know it as Chatpur, famous for hilsha because the freshest hilsha comes from Jatpur; many tourists come here every day to visit our hometown, which is very beautiful and has lovely landscapes.

Original sentence has many issues: incorrect article 'A people', wrong word order, incorrect verb forms ('came', 'to visiting'), and unclear clauses. Correction uses plural 'people', correct verb forms 'know', 'comes', 'come', and infinitive 'to visit'. Also divides into clearer clauses and corrects adjective use ('very beautiful' rather than 'quite very beautiful').

× Actually, I like about my hometown everything except the overpopulation right now the most important and people came to from here to visiting the place the Riverside area, because in all around the city there are a lot of river located the most important things the three river river located in one potential.

✓ Actually, I like everything about my hometown except the current overpopulation. The most important attraction is the riverside area, because there are many rivers around the city; notably three rivers meet here.

Original uses incorrect prepositions ('like about'), incorrect word order, and wrong noun forms ('river' vs 'rivers'). Use 'like everything about' (no 'about' after 'like' when followed by object), 'current overpopulation' for present state, 'around the city' for location, and plural 'rivers'. Also simplify and clarify sentence structure.

× Well, it's my birth place so actually I live since they are almost 20 years.

✓ Well, it's my birthplace, so I have actually lived there for almost 20 years.

Talk about a period from past to present uses present perfect ('have lived') and 'since' requires a point in time; use 'for' with a duration. Also 'birthplace' is one word and 'there' refers to the place.

× After that I actually migrated from Dhaka because of my study and job purpose so but nowadays my mom lives in here and my younger brother also.

✓ After that I migrated to Dhaka for my studies and job, but nowadays my mom still lives there and so does my younger brother.

Use past tense 'migrated' for the completed action. Preposition 'to Dhaka' (migrate to a place). Use plural 'studies' and 'for my studies and job' or 'for my studies and work'. Use 'there' not 'in here' when referring back to hometown. Use 'so does' for correct inversion.

× Sometimes I visit their place for my enjoyment.

✓ Sometimes I visit them for enjoyment.

Using 'their place' is vague; if referring to family, 'them' is clearer. Also 'for my enjoyment' is acceptable but 'for enjoyment' is more natural here.

× Yes, it's a very good place for young, not only young people.

✓ Yes, it's a very good place for young people, not only them.

'Young' needs the noun 'people' when used as a noun phrase. Clarify with 'young people' and reference 'them' to avoid repetition.

× Every generational people come to comfort here to living here because the people was very friendly, their cultural, their food, the quite friendly.

✓ People of every generation come here to live comfortably because the people are very friendly; their culture and food are pleasant and welcoming.

Original has noun phrase errors and subject-verb agreement ('people was' should be 'people are'). Use 'people of every generation' and correct verbs 'come' and 'are'. Replace awkward phrases with natural expressions 'live comfortably', 'culture', and 'food are pleasant'.

× So I think it's the very positive environment that give the young people and living here.

✓ So I think it's a very positive environment that gives young people the opportunity to live here.

Original misuses 'give' (subject-verb agreement and infinitive structure) and 'living here' needs to be a noun phrase. Use 'gives' to agree with singular 'environment' and 'the opportunity to live' to express purpose.

× They doing lot of activities from here the the.

✓ They do a lot of activities here.

Use present simple 'do' for habitual actions rather than 'doing' without auxiliary. Remove redundant words and correct article 'a lot of activities' and preposition 'here'.