Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence: name the place and its location. Avoid unclear phrases ("the social") and add one or two concise details. Use correct article and word order (e.g. "in southeast China").

예시: My hometown is Suzhou, a quiet and beautiful city in southeast China. It is known for its classical gardens and canals, which give the city a peaceful atmosphere.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence then specific supporting details connected with linking words. Fix grammar ("people live here live a slow life"). Use phrases like "for example" or "because" to show reasons. Limit to 2–4 sentences total.

예시: I like the relaxed atmosphere in my hometown because people tend to live a slower, less stressful life. For example, many residents spend mornings by the lakes and evenings walking along the rivers, which creates a calm community vibe.

제안: Use correct tense and clear number. For duration, use present perfect continuous or simple present perfect: "I have lived there since I was born" or "for 23 years." Avoid fragmented sentences and finish your thought about the future. Keep it to one or two clear sentences.

예시: I have lived in Suzhou since I was born, so I have lived there for 23 years. I have never moved to another city and I plan to stay there for the foreseeable future.

제안: Answer directly and give specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar and complete phrases: "because it has... and its relaxed atmosphere..." Provide one concrete example of opportunities or lifestyle for young people.

예시: Yes, I think it's a good place for young people because there are many career opportunities in technology and tourism, and its relaxed atmosphere reduces stress. For instance, startups and small businesses often hire local graduates, making it easier for young people to start their careers.

× My hometown is the social It's a quiet, beautiful city in the southeast China.

✓ My hometown is a small, quiet, beautiful city in southeast China.

The original sentence misused 'the' before 'southeast China' and contained 'the social' which seems to be a mistaken fragment. Use 'a' before a singular countable noun ('a small, quiet, beautiful city'). Do not use 'the' before regions like 'southeast China' when speaking generally. Also combine fragments into one clear sentence. Suggestion: Remove unclear words, use appropriate articles and order adjectives as 'small, quiet, beautiful.'

× I like the atmosphere in my hometown. A people live here, live for a slow life and people can do whatever they like.

✓ I like the atmosphere in my hometown. People who live here live a slow-paced life and can do whatever they like.

'A people' is incorrect: 'people' is already plural and does not take 'a.' Use 'people' or 'the people.' Also 'live for a slow life' is unnatural; use 'live a slow-paced life' or 'lead a slow life.' Combine clauses for clarity. Suggestion: remove the article and use correct collocation: 'live a slow-paced life.'

× And there are lots of lakes and rivers in this city.

✓ There are lots of lakes and rivers in this city.

Starting with 'And' is informal but not strictly grammatical error; main issue was redundancy and sentence connection. The sentence is otherwise correct. Suggestion: omit the leading 'And' in formal responses to improve style.

× I lived in Suzu since I was born for about 20-3 years.

✓ I have lived in Suzu since I was born, for about 20–23 years.

When an action began in the past and continues to the present, use the present perfect ('have lived') not simple past. '20-3 years' is unclear; likely '20–23 years.' Include a comma before the duration phrase. Suggestion: use 'have lived' and write the duration clearly.

× I never moved to other city and in the future I want to live.

✓ I have never moved to another city, and in the future I want to continue living here.

Use present perfect 'have never moved' for life experiences up to now. 'Other city' should be 'another city.' The second clause was incomplete: 'I want to live' needs an object or continuation; 'continue living here' clarifies intent. Suggestion: use 'have never moved to another city' and complete the future intention.

× I think it's a good place for young people because it has a lot of career opportunities and. It's relaxed atmosphere that helps people.

✓ I think it's a good place for young people because it has a lot of career opportunities and a relaxed atmosphere that helps people.

The original had a sentence fragment ending with 'and.' Also 'It's relaxed atmosphere that helps people' has incorrect use of contraction 'It's' (it is) with a noun without a verb structure; 'a relaxed atmosphere that helps people' should be part of the sentence. Remove the fragment and join ideas. Suggestion: combine clauses and use 'a relaxed atmosphere.'