Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần sửa ngữ pháp, phát âm tên địa điểm, và câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn. Tránh lỗi như “I'm come from” (đúng là “I come from” hoặc “I'm from”), kiểm soát độ dài (không quá 4–5 câu), và dùng cụm từ chính xác (ví dụ “a medium-sized city”, “Hà Nam province” nếu đó là tên chính xác). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Ví dụ cụ thể cần nói rõ tính chất thành phố thay vì liệt kê chung chung.

예시: I’m from Ha Nam province in northern Vietnam. It’s a medium-sized city, peaceful and not overcrowded. The cost of living is reasonable, so it’s a comfortable place to live.

제안: Cần tránh lặp lại thông tin đã nêu, cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu, và sắp xếp ý mạch lạc bằng liên từ. Sử dụng một câu chủ đề ngắn, rồi nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ tên địa điểm, hoạt động bạn làm ở đó). Sửa lỗi như “I'm come from” → “I'm from”, “work to quiet park” → “work in a quiet park”, và hoàn thiện câu cuối bị dang dở.

예시: I like the peaceful atmosphere of my hometown. For example, there are pretty riverside parks and plenty of green spaces where I often go to relax or work quietly. The neighbors are friendly too, which makes the place feel warm and welcoming.

제안: Cần nói rõ và ngắn gọn, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc. Tránh từ thừa như “uh” và các câu không hoàn chỉnh. Dùng thì đúng: “I have lived there for 20 years” hoặc “I have lived there since I was born.” Nếu muốn nói về gia đình, diễn đạt rõ: “My whole family still lives there.”

예시: I have lived there for 20 years since I was born. My whole family still lives in the same city.

제안: Cần tổ chức ý rõ ràng: nêu quan điểm trực tiếp, rồi đưa lý do cụ thể (ví dụ cơ hội giải trí, chi phí, môi trường). Sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp như “Hannah province” (kiểm tra tên), “the most city life” không đúng — thay bằng “a good place for city life” hoặc “offers a comfortable lifestyle”. Dùng liên từ để kết nối lý do.

예시: Yes, I think it’s a good place for young people. It offers a relaxed city lifestyle with parks and cafés for socialising, and the reasonable cost of living makes it easier for young people to afford housing and leisure activities.

× Honestly, I'm come from a medium sized city in the north of Vietnam which is Hana province.

✓ Honestly, I come from a medium-sized city in the north of Vietnam called Ha Nam province.

The student used the contraction 'I'm' with 'come', which mixes present continuous structure with simple present meaning. Use simple present 'I come from' to state origin. Also correct 'medium sized' to hyphenated 'medium-sized' and 'Hana' to 'Ha Nam'. Suggestion: use simple present for facts and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× I like it because it's peaceful and not overcrowded and the cost of living is quite reasonable so it's a comfortable place to live.

✓ I like it because it's peaceful and not overcrowded, and the cost of living is quite reasonable, so it's a comfortable place to live.

This sentence mainly needs punctuation for clarity; adjective usage is fine. Add commas to separate ideas. Also maintain parallelism with 'peaceful' and 'not overcrowded'. Suggestion: use commas to join independent clauses with conjunctions.

× Well, I'm come from a medium sized city in the north of Vietnam.

✓ Well, I come from a medium-sized city in the north of Vietnam.

Same error as before: 'I'm come' incorrectly combines present continuous with a stative verb of origin; use simple present 'I come from'. Hyphenate 'medium-sized'. Suggestion: use simple present to express origin.

× I love it because it's beautiful and not too crowded so I feel relaxed and I can work to quiet park and Riverside area beside the city has many green space and friendly neighbor would make the atmosphere very.

✓ I love it because it's beautiful and not too crowded, so I feel relaxed and can work in the quiet parks and riverside areas. The city has many green spaces and friendly neighbors, which creates a pleasant atmosphere.

Multiple issues: awkward adjective/adverb use and missing prepositions. Use 'work in the quiet parks', pluralize 'parks' and 'riverside areas', 'green spaces', 'friendly neighbors'. Replace 'would make the atmosphere very' with 'which creates a pleasant atmosphere' to complete the thought. Suggestion: break long sentence into two, use correct prepositions and plural forms, and complete the adjective phrase.

× Uh, honestly, I have lived there for 20 years since I was born.

✓ Uh, honestly, I have lived there for 20 years; I was born there.

Using 'for 20 years since I was born' is redundant. 'Since' should be followed by a point in time (e.g., 'since 2006'), while 'for' is used with a duration. Here, better to say 'I have lived there for 20 years' or 'I was born there'. Suggestion: avoid combining 'for' and 'since' incorrectly.

× Uh, it were my whole family still life.

✓ My whole family still lives there.

Original is ungrammatical: 'it were my whole family still life' mixes tenses and incorrect subject. Correct subject is 'my whole family' with singular verb 'lives' and adverb 'still' placed before the verb. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb order and present tense 'lives' for current situation.

× Well in my opinion Hannah province is the most city life because it's quite beautiful and not too crowded so young people can enjoy atmosphere after hard work day.

✓ Well, in my opinion, Ha Nam province has the best city life because it's quite beautiful and not too crowded, so young people can enjoy the atmosphere after a hard day's work.

Multiple issues: 'Hannah' should be 'Ha Nam'; 'is the most city life' is ungrammatical—use 'has the best city life' or 'offers the best urban life'. Add articles: 'the atmosphere', 'a hard day's work'. Suggestion: choose correct verb phrases for 'city life' and include necessary articles and possessive construction.

× Beside, the cost of living is reasonable.

✓ Besides, the cost of living is reasonable.

Use 'Besides' (meaning 'in addition') rather than 'Beside' (meaning 'next to'). Suggestion: use 'Besides' to add information; also consider 'Moreover' or 'Additionally' for formal responses.