Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 表述已基本清晰，但有词汇和事实小错误（castle city 应为 coastal city/port city）。句子可更自然简练，先给主题句，然后补充一两项具体信息并用连接词。注意发音和固定搭配。

예시: I come from Fuzhou, a coastal city in Fujian Province in southeast China. It’s known for its subtropical climate and historic architecture, so people often visit for both the scenery and local culture.

제안: 内容有用但出现严重用词错误（snakes 应为 snacks 或 dishes），句子冗长且重复。回答应直接给主题句，随后用连接词举两点具体例子（气候、食物、生活便利等），避免重复结尾感叹句。

예시: Yes. Mainly because it has a pleasant climate and a comfortable lifestyle. For example, the mild winters and warm summers make outdoor activities easy, and the city’s local snacks, like fish balls and rice noodles, are famous across the region.

제안: 回答清楚且结构基本合理，但有小语法搭配问题（born and raised up there → born and raised there）。可以更自然地合并信息并用连接词。

예시: I lived there for 18 years—I was born and raised in Fuzhou—however, I’m currently studying in Beijing.

제안: 回答观点明确但表达有语法和搭配问题（Compared to live in my hometown → Compared to living in my hometown; job opportunities about → job opportunities in）。答题时先给立场，再用两点具体原因并用连接词使逻辑清晰。

예시: Not really. Compared with my hometown, I would rather live in Brighton because my preferred university is there, and I’d have more job opportunities in fashion design after graduation.

× I come from Fuzhou, a castle city in Fujian province, and it is in the southeast of China.

✓ I come from Fuzhou, a coastal city in Fujian Province, and it is in the southeast of China.

原句将“castle city”用作形容词，但描述福州更常用的是“coastal city”（沿海城市）而不是“castle city”（城堡城市），属于用词错误（形容词使用不当）。建议：根据语境选择准确的形容词，注意专有名词首字母大写（Province）。

× Yes I do, mainly because it is a livable city with agreeable climate and there are lots of delicious local snakes.

✓ Yes I do, mainly because it is a livable city with an agreeable climate and there are lots of delicious local snacks.

原句中“agreeable climate”缺少冠词，应为“an agreeable climate”；更重要的是将“snakes”（蛇）误写为“snacks”（小吃），这是词汇混淆，属于形容词/副词或词汇使用错误范畴。建议：检查近似词拼写，注意冠词使用（在单数可数名词前加不定冠词）。

× I have been living there for 18 years. I was born and raised up there, but now I'm studying in Beijing.

✓ I lived there for 18 years. I was born and raised there, but now I'm studying in Beijing.

原句第一句使用现在完成进行时（have been living there for 18 years）与后文“but now I'm studying in Beijing”矛盾，因为学生已经不住在福州。应使用过去时“lived”。此外“raised up there”中“up”多余，应直接用“raised there”。建议：根据实际时间背景选择时态；避免不必要的副词/介词。

× Compared to live in my hometown, I prefer to live in Brighton, mainly because my favorite school is there and I can get more job opportunities about fashion design if I stay there.

✓ Compared to living in my hometown, I prefer to live in Brighton, mainly because my favorite school is there and I can get more job opportunities in fashion design if I stay there.

短语“Compared to”后应接动名词“living”而不是不定式“to live”，这是动词+ -ing 形式使用问题。另有介词搭配错误：应说“opportunities in fashion design”而不是“about fashion design”。建议：在介词后用动名词；注意固定搭配（opportunities in ...）。