Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and add a brief specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct the verb form, and add one specific detail (e.g., a landmark or characteristic) to make the answer more informative.

예시: My hometown is Busada, a small city in central Algeria. It is known as the “City of Happiness” because of its annual cultural festival and friendly neighborhoods.

제안: Reduce redundancy and correct grammar. Give a clear topic sentence, link supporting points with cohesive words (for example, 'also' or 'in addition'), and include one specific example (e.g., a park name or activity) to show rather than tell.

예시: I like my hometown mainly because my family still lives there. In addition, the peaceful atmosphere helps me relax; for example, I often walk in Al-Mahra Park where the fresh air and green spaces make it easy to unwind.

제안: Use correct tense and a clear topic sentence. Say how long you lived there using precise phrasing (e.g., 'until I was 18' is fine), and link the reason for leaving briefly. Avoid informal phrases like 'lived up there.'

예시: I lived in Busada until I was 18. After I completed my baccalaureate, I moved to Algiers to continue my university studies.

제안: Correct sentence structure and add a specific example. Start with a direct opinion, use linking words ('because'/'also'), fix grammar (e.g., 'It is also a safe place'), and mention a specific facility or program for youth to strengthen the answer.

예시: Yes, I believe Busada is a good place for young people because it has several schools and a new sports complex. It is also relatively safe and affordable; for instance, the municipal youth centre offers free weekend activities for teens.

× My hometown is Busada. It's a small city located in central Algeria and it known as the City of Happiness.

✓ My hometown is Busada. It's a small city located in central Algeria and it is known as the City of Happiness.

The original sentence omits the verb 'is' after 'it', causing a sentence fragment. This is a sentence structure error but also involves the definite article 'the' which is used correctly; the main issue is missing verb. Add 'is' to form the passive 'is known' so the sentence is grammatically complete and clear. Suggestion: Always check that each clause has a subject and a finite verb; here add 'is' to complete the passive construction.

× I like my hometown because my family lives there. I also like the peaceful environment atmosphere because life and the time seems to move more slowly which help me relax.

✓ I like my hometown because my family lives there. I also like the peaceful atmosphere because life and time seem to move more slowly, which helps me relax.

Problems: 'environment atmosphere' is redundant; choose 'atmosphere' or 'environment'. Subject-verb agreement errors present: 'the time seems' should be 'time seem' because the compound subject 'life and time' is plural (Grammar Problem Type 27). Also relative clause 'which help me relax' needs third person singular agreement 'helps' (Grammar Problem Type 2). Suggestions: remove redundant word 'environment', use 'life and time seem' for plural subject, and use 'helps' for the singular pronoun referring to the situation.

× The people are friendly and there is a fresh air and many green spaces.

✓ The people are friendly, and there is fresh air and many green spaces.

Using 'a' before 'fresh air' is incorrect because 'air' in this sense is uncountable and should not take the indefinite article (Grammar Problem Type 22). Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: Use uncountable nouns without 'a' ('fresh air').

× I lived up there until I was 18. After getting my baccalaureate, I moved to Algiers for my studies.

✓ I lived there until I was 18. After getting my baccalaureate, I moved to Algiers for my studies.

The phrase 'lived up there' is colloquial; 'up' is unnecessary and can be removed for standard written English. Tenses are otherwise correct: past simple 'lived' and 'moved' describe completed past actions. Suggestion: Remove informal particles like 'up' unless they add necessary meaning.

× Yes, I think my hometown is a good place for young people because it has school, sports facilities and many places to relax with friends.

✓ Yes, I think my hometown is a good place for young people because it has schools, sports facilities, and many places to relax with friends.

The noun 'school' should be plural ('schools') when speaking generally about available educational institutions in the town (Grammar Problem Type 1). Add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when referring to general availability of more than one facility.

× It also safe place and not too expensive so they can live comfortably.

✓ It is also a safe place and not too expensive, so they can live comfortably.

Missing verb 'is' and missing article 'a' create a fragment; include them to form 'It is also a safe place'. Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity (Grammar Problem Type 26). Suggestion: Ensure every clause has a verb and use the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable nouns like 'safe place'.