Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce grammatical errors and split into a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Use correct relative clause and avoid overlong single sentence. Add a linking phrase before the example.

예시: My hometown is Chongqing, which is located in the southwest of China. It is a large, modern city known for its varied cuisine; for example, many people enjoy spicy hot pot and noodles even for breakfast.

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Replace colloquial fragments (e.g., 'cause') with full forms.

예시: I like my hometown mainly because of its food and the friendly atmosphere. For example, the local dishes are unique and delicious, and the people are energetic and welcoming, which makes me feel comfortable since my family lives here.

제안: Give a direct, grammatically correct answer and optionally add a short supporting detail. Use correct tense and phrasing for duration expressions.

예시: I have lived there for about 30 years, since I was born. Because of that, I know the city very well and have many childhood memories there.

제안: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and two specific reasons linked with connectors. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'many many') and use concise phrasing.

예시: Yes, I think it is a good place for young people because public transport is extensive, with many subway lines and frequent buses, so commuting to college or work is easy. Moreover, there are plenty of entertainment options such as cinemas, shopping malls and parks.

× My hometown is Chongqing, which located in the southwest of China, is a very large modern city famous for its various kinds of food.

✓ My hometown is Chongqing, which is located in the southwest of China; it is a very large, modern city famous for its various kinds of food.

Missing verb 'is' after 'which' is a sentence structure/defining clause issue and the clause boundary needs fixing. Add 'is' to form the relative clause 'which is located'. Also replace the comma splice with a semicolon or split into two sentences and add a comma between 'large' and 'modern' to follow adjective order. Suggestion: include the linking verb in relative clauses and avoid comma splices. Note: This correction addresses the definite article context by ensuring the clause correctly identifies location 'the southwest of China' with the definite article 'the' already used correctly.

× For example, people like eating spicy hot pot and noodles even in the morning.

✓ For example, people like eating spicy hot pot and noodles even in the morning.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; 'like eating' correctly uses the verb + -ing form to express preference. No change needed. Keep using verb + -ing after 'like' to describe habitual preference.

× I love the local dishes and the local culture and also I love people.

✓ I love the local dishes and the local culture, and I also love the people.

The original has a run-on feel and awkward coordination. Insert a comma before the conjunction 'and' when joining independent clauses and place 'also' before the verb for natural word order. Suggestion: break long strings of 'and' and position adverbs ('also') before the main verb.

× They are always energetic and friendly and besides, 'cause my family lives here and I feel comfortable.

✓ They are always energetic and friendly. Besides, my family lives here, so I feel comfortable.

The original uses informal ' 'cause' and chains ideas with 'and' awkwardly. Use 'Besides,' to introduce an additional reason and 'so' to show result. Also separate into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: avoid informal contractions in formal speech and use conjunctions to show logical relations ('so' for result).

× I have been living here around 30 years since I was born.

✓ I have been living here for about 30 years, since I was born.

When expressing a duration up to now with present perfect continuous, use 'for' with a period of time ('for about 30 years') rather than 'around' alone; 'since' should introduce a point in time ('since I was born'). Also place a comma before the 'since' clause. Suggestion: use 'for' + duration and 'since' + specific time; use 'about' instead of 'around' for slight approximation in formal contexts.

× Personally, I think it is because there are many many subway lines and frequent bus routes so people can travel easily to college and workplace and moreover there are many entertainment facilities like cinema, shopping malls and parks.

✓ Personally, I think it is, because there are many subway lines and frequent bus routes, so people can travel easily to colleges and workplaces. Moreover, there are many entertainment facilities, like cinemas, shopping malls, and parks.

Use plural nouns 'colleges' and 'workplaces' when speaking generally about destinations. Reduce duplicate 'many many' to 'many'. Add commas to separate clauses and items in a list. Use plural forms for 'cinemas' when referring generally. Suggestion: avoid repetition, ensure plural forms for general references, and punctuate clauses and lists clearly.