Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific details. Avoid run-on sentences and fix prepositions and articles (e.g., 'in the division of Rajshahi', 'a small village near my town').

예시: I come from Jaipurhat, a town in the Rajshahi division of Bangladesh. I grew up in a nearby small village that has a primary school, a high school and a college, so I spent most of my childhood locally.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence about what you like, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because, such as) and correct vocabulary ('pitha' or 'pustaka' might be intended). Avoid vague phrases like 'I like everything'.

예시: I particularly like the food and friendly atmosphere in my hometown. For example, local dishes such as biryani and pitha are famous there, and because people are welcoming I always enjoy visiting local cafés and markets.

제안: Give a clear time frame in a simple sentence, then add one concise supporting detail. Use correct tense and sequence words (e.g., 'after finishing high school, I went abroad'). Avoid mixing tenses and unclear references ('here' vs 'there').

예시: I lived in my hometown throughout my childhood and until I finished high school. After that I went abroad for further studies, but I still miss my neighborhood and visit when I can.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and use linking words (for example, because, moreover). Correct grammar ('there are schools, colleges and a university', 'it has parks for relaxation'). Avoid filler phrases like 'why not?'.

예시: Yes, it is a good place for young people because there are schools, colleges and even a university nearby. Moreover, the community is friendly and there are several parks where young people can relax and meet friends.

× My hometown is Jaipurhat in the division of Rashahi of Bangladesh. I grew up a small village near my town there have a school, high school, college and a university, so I didn't go other places.

✓ My hometown is Jaipurhat in the Rajshahi division of Bangladesh. I grew up in a small village near my town; there is a school, a high school, a college, and a university, so I did not go to other places.

Multiple errors: missing preposition 'in' before 'a small village' (preposition error, ID 11), incorrect division name spelling 'Rashahi' should be 'Rajshahi' (word choice), run-on sentence and missing punctuation (sentence structure error, ID 26), incorrect verb form 'there have' should be 'there is' for existence with singular collective list (there be issue, ID 3), missing articles before institutions (article errors, ID 22), and incorrect use of 'didn't go other places' which needs 'did not go to other places' (preposition and verb phrase correction). Suggestion: add 'in' after 'grew up', split into two sentences or use a semicolon, use 'there is' and include articles 'a', and add 'to' after 'go'.

× I like everything in my hometown because I grew up there and I know everything about my local places and there has a lot of famous food like biryani, puska is a straight food and burger so I enjoy a lot.

✓ I like everything in my hometown because I grew up there and I know my local places well. There are many famous foods like biryani, pitha (a local sweet), and burgers, so I enjoy them a lot.

Errors: 'there has' is incorrect; use 'there are' for existence of plural noun (there be issue, ID 3). 'Local places' phrasing improved and add adverb 'well' (adverb use, ID 13). Missing articles and plural forms handled ('foods' or 'dishes'). 'puska' unclear; replaced with 'pitha' and clarified as a local food — if keeping original, spell consistently. 'is a straight food' is ungrammatical (sentence structure error, ID 26). Use pronoun 'them' to refer to foods (pronoun error, ID 12). Suggestion: use 'There are many famous foods' and list items clearly, and use 'enjoy them a lot'.

× I have been living here since my childhood after finish my high school then I went to abroad and living there but I still miss my neighborhood.

✓ I lived here during my childhood. After finishing high school, I went abroad and lived there, but I still miss my neighborhood.

Tense and form errors: 'I have been living here since my childhood' conflicts with later past events; better to use past simple 'I lived' (present perfect/past tense issue, ID 6 and 5). 'after finish my high school' needs gerund 'after finishing' (verb + -ing form, ID 8). 'went to abroad' should be 'went abroad' (preposition error, ID 11). 'and living there' lacks auxiliary verb; use 'and lived there' (sentence structure/verb form, ID 26). Suggestion: choose consistent past tense for completed past events and use 'after finishing' and 'went abroad'.

× Yes, why not? It's a good place because here I have a school, college and university and people are very friendly and either is amazing for living and they are having parks for relaxing people.

✓ Yes, why not? It's a good place because I have a school, a college, and a university here, and people are very friendly. It is also a great place to live, and there are parks for people to relax.

Errors: 'either is amazing' is incorrect; likely intended 'it is also amazing' (sentence structure/conjunction error, ID 16 and 26). 'they are having parks' is wrong: use 'there are parks' for existence (there be issue, ID 3) and 'for people to relax' is correct infinitive purpose structure (verb form). Missing articles before 'college' and 'university' (article errors, ID 22). Suggestion: break into two sentences, use 'it is also' and 'there are parks', and use 'for people to relax' to express purpose.