Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the sentence more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct article usage, and a short supporting detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g. “in the world” is unnecessary here).

예시: I’m from Samarkand, a historic city in Uzbekistan. It’s famous for its ancient architecture and plays an important role in the country’s history.

제안: Be specific and avoid overgeneral phrases like “I like everything.” Give one or two focused reasons and use linking words to list examples. Correct names/phrasing and grammar (e.g. “which are known worldwide”).

예시: I especially like the historical sites in Samarkand because they are beautiful and rich in history. For example, the Registan and Shah-i-Zinda are well-preserved complexes that attract visitors from around the world.

제안: Use the present perfect or simple past correctly for duration, and make the time reference clear. Start with a short direct answer and then add a brief time frame with a linking phrase.

예시: I lived in Samarkand until 2021. I grew up there from my birth and moved to Tashkent when I started university in 2021.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear reason with accurate vocabulary. Avoid unclear phrases like “medicine one of the strongest medicine.” If you mean medical education or healthcare, state it precisely and give a brief example or comparison.

예시: Yes, Samarkand is a good place for young people, especially for education. For instance, its universities and medical colleges offer strong programs, so many students study there before moving to larger cities.

× I am from Samarkand, which is known as historical city in the world and the second largest city in Uzbekistan.

✓ I am from Samarkand, which is known as a historical city in the world and is the second largest city in Uzbekistan.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'historical city' and missing verb 'is' before 'the second largest city'. Use 'a historical city' to make the noun phrase grammatical and include 'is' to complete the relative clause. Suggestion: add articles and ensure each clause has a verb.

× I like everything and Samarkand especially historical places like Registan, Bibehanum, Shahzinda which is known As for whole world.

✓ I like everything about Samarkand, especially its historical places like Registan, Bibi-Khanym, and Shah-i-Zinda, which are known throughout the world.

Problems: missing preposition 'about' after 'everything', missing possessive 'its' for 'Samarkand', incorrect capitalization and spelling of place names, missing commas and conjunction 'and', and incorrect clause 'which is known As for whole world'. Use plural verb 'are' because multiple places are referred to, and 'throughout the world' is the correct idiom. Suggestion: include 'about', use 'its', correct place names, use commas and 'and', and use 'which are known throughout the world'.

× I live it in my hometown from my birthday till 2021 when I entered to university in Tashkent.

✓ I lived in my hometown from my birth until 2021, when I entered university in Tashkent.

Tense and wording errors: 'I live it in my hometown' is ungrammatical—use 'lived' for a past period that ended in 2021. 'From my birthday' is unnatural; use 'from my birth'. 'Till' can be 'until'. 'Entered to university' is incorrect; use 'entered university' or 'entered the university'. Suggestion: use past tense 'lived', correct prepositions and noun phrases, and remove unnecessary 'to'.

× Of course, Samarkand is a good place for young people for studying because Samarkand's medicine one of the strongest medicine in the world.

✓ Of course, Samarkand is a good place for young people to study because Samarkand's medical system is one of the strongest in the world.

Awkward phrasing and grammatical omissions: 'for studying' is better as 'to study'; 'Samarkand's medicine one of the strongest medicine' lacks a verb and repeats 'medicine'. Use 'medical system' or 'medical services' and include 'is' and 'one of the strongest in the world'. Suggestion: use 'to study', supply the verb 'is', and choose a clearer noun phrase like 'medical system' or 'medical services'.