Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your hometown and its location. Avoid repetition and give one or two specific features with correct vocabulary (e.g., 'Cox's Bazar' and 'Chattogram'). Keep it to 1–2 sentences and correct minor grammar errors.

예시: My hometown is Cox's Bazar, a coastal town near Chattogram. It is famous for its long sandy beach and many seafood restaurants.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating what you like, then support with a specific reason and one brief example. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'sea beach' → 'beach') and linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid fragments and filler words.

예시: I especially love the beach in Cox's Bazar because it is the longest natural sandy beach in the world. For example, many tourists visit every year to enjoy the sunset and local seafood.

제안: Answer directly with a clear time duration, then add one supporting detail. Avoid tense errors and repeated phrases. Use linking words like 'since' and 'because' correctly, and remove hesitation sounds ('uh'). Keep to 1–2 sentences.

예시: I have lived in Cox's Bazar since I was a child, so for over 20 years. I still enjoy the beach there because it is very beautiful and peaceful.

제안: Give a direct yes/no followed by specific reasons and examples. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'young people enjoy the nightlife, cafes, and outdoor activities'). Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: Yes, Cox's Bazar is a good place for young people because there are many restaurants, music venues, and outdoor activities like beach sports. For example, students often visit to relax, swim, and enjoy local food.

× Well, I live in Cox Bazaar which is located in Chittagong city.

✓ Well, I live in Cox's Bazar, which is located in Chittagong.

Use of preposition 'in' with city is acceptable but the place name is 'Cox's Bazar' (possessive form) and 'Chittagong' is the district; 'city' is unnecessary. Also add a comma before 'which'. Suggestion: use correct place name and punctuation.

× It it is.

✓ It is.

The sentence contains a duplicated word 'It'. Remove the extra word to produce a grammatically correct short sentence.

× It is well known for its sea, beach, restaurants, park and more more thing.

✓ It is well known for its sea, beaches, restaurants, parks and many other things.

Use plural forms for countable nouns (beaches, restaurants, parks) and the phrase 'many other things' instead of the duplicated 'more more thing'. Maintain parallel structure in the list.

× If I answer this question in honestly, I would say my hometown.

✓ If I answer this question honestly, I would say my hometown.

Remove the unnecessary preposition 'in' before the adverb 'honestly'. The adverb should directly modify the verb phrase. Also the sentence is stylistically odd but grammatically corrected here.

× I would say my one answer is the seaweed.

✓ One thing I would mention is the sea.

The original 'my one answer is the seaweed' is awkward and uses an incorrect noun 'seaweed' when meaning 'the sea' or 'sea beach'. Rephrase for natural English and correct noun choice.

× It is because it is longest sea beach in the world.

✓ This is because it is the longest natural sea beach in the world.

Missing definite article 'the' before superlative 'longest' and missing adjective 'natural' if intended; add 'the' and correct noun order 'sea beach' to 'sea beach' or 'natural sea beach'. Ensure superlative uses 'the'.

× All over that tourists come here for their Yeah.

✓ Tourists from all over come here to visit.

The original is ungrammatical and contains filler 'Yeah'. Reorder to natural expression 'Tourists from all over come here to visit.' Remove unnecessary words.

× Actually, I lived there and since my childhood, I love the place so much because of its own, uh, sea beach.

✓ Actually, I have lived there since my childhood; I love the place so much because of its sea beach.

Use present perfect 'have lived' with 'since my childhood' to indicate continuous residence. Remove 'and' before 'since' and the incorrect possessive 'its own'. Maintain punctuation.

× It's, it has a longest CBS in the world, uh, which is very, very beautiful.

✓ It has the longest sea beach in the world, which is very beautiful.

Remove filler duplication 'It's, it has' and incorrect acronym 'CBS'. Use definite article 'the' before 'longest' and avoid repeating adverbs; 'very, very' is informal.

× Uh, I love so much my hometown.

✓ I love my hometown very much.

Adverb placement: 'very much' should follow the object 'my hometown', not split the verb and object. This produces natural word order.

× Uh, I used to go there in.

✓ I used to go there often.

The original ends abruptly with 'in'. Use a complete expression such as 'often' or specify when; 'I used to go there often' completes the thought.

× If I have to answer this question straightforward, I would say yes 'cause many young people, young student, come once in a life, come here to visit Cox Bazaar.

✓ If I have to answer this question straightforwardly, I would say yes, because many young people and students come here at least once in their lives to visit Cox's Bazar.

Use adverb 'straightforwardly' to modify 'answer'. Replace colloquial ''cause' with 'because'. Correct plural 'students' and phrase 'come once in a life' to 'come here at least once in their lives'. Use correct place name 'Cox's Bazar'.

× They love to sing, lots of many types of restaurant, many types of sea park.

✓ They enjoy singing; there are many types of restaurants and seaside parks.

'Lots of many' is redundant; use 'many'. Ensure plural forms 'restaurants' and 'seaside parks'. Rephrase for clarity and parallel structure.