Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response clearer and grammatically correct by using a concise topic sentence and separating ideas with a linking word. Avoid run-on sentences and be specific about location and features.

예시: My hometown is Pyeongchang in Anyang. It is mainly a residential area with many parks, so it’s great for walking. In addition, there is a large commercial area nearby, which makes daily life very convenient.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and expand with a specific example using linking words. Correct small grammar errors and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I like that my hometown is quite flat and has many parks. For example, there is a riverside park where I often jog on weekends, which makes the living environment very pleasant.

제안: Give a precise time phrase and separate the ideas into two sentences. Use linking words to connect the duration with the reason and avoid repetition and filler words like "so" twice.

예시: I have lived there all my life, for about 20 years. Because the town is well known for many private academies, I’m very used to a strong academic atmosphere.

제안: Avoid hesitations and correct small errors. Begin with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons and an example. Use linking words and correct article usage ("a very large commercial area").

예시: Yes, I think it is a good place for young people. For example, Bomgay Street in the downtown area has many shops, cafes and entertainment venues, so young people have plenty of places to meet and spend time.

× My hometown is Pyeongchang in Anyang is a mainly residential area with lots of parks so it's really nice for walking and also there's a large commercial area which makes it very convenient to live in.

✓ My hometown is Pyeongchang in Anyang; it is a mainly residential area with lots of parks, so it's really nice for walking, and there is also a large commercial area which makes it very convenient to live in.

The original sentence contains two independent clauses about the hometown but duplicates the verb 'is' incorrectly, creating a run-on and incorrect 'there is' placement. Use a semicolon or split into two sentences and replace the second 'is' with 'it is' or 'there is' as appropriate. Also add commas to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: break into shorter sentences and ensure each clause has a clear subject and verb.

× What I like about my hometown is that it's quite flat and has a lot of parks, so it's really pleasant living environment.

✓ What I like about my hometown is that it's quite flat and has a lot of parks, so it's a really pleasant living environment.

The phrase 'pleasant living environment' needs an article 'a' and the adverb 'really' should modify the adjective 'pleasant'. The missing article makes the noun phrase ungrammatical. Suggestion: include the appropriate article before countable noun phrases and place adverbs before adjectives they modify.

× I've lived here for several years since I was born, and my hometown is well known for having a lot of private academies, so it's so I'm quite used to the academic atmosphere.

✓ I've lived here since I was born, and my hometown is well known for having a lot of private academies, so I'm quite used to the academic atmosphere.

Combining 'for several years' with 'since I was born' is redundant and inconsistent: 'since' requires a point in time, while 'for' requires a duration. Remove 'for several years' to keep present perfect continuous meaning. Also remove the extra 'so' which creates redundancy and a grammatical glitch. Suggestion: choose either 'for' + duration or 'since' + point and avoid redundant linking words.

× The the name of downtown in my hometown is Bomgay St. UH, and I think it's best fitted to young people.

✓ The name of the downtown area in my hometown is Bomgay St., and I think it's best suited to young people.

There is a duplicated 'the' and 'downtown' needs an article and 'area' to be natural: 'the downtown area'. 'Best fitted' is not the correct collocation in this context; 'best suited' or 'best fit for' is correct. Also add punctuation and remove filler 'UH'. Suggestion: avoid word repetition, use correct collocations, and remove filler words in formal speech.

× This is because it is very large commercial area.

✓ This is because it is a very large commercial area.

The noun phrase 'large commercial area' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Without an article, the sentence is ungrammatical. Suggestion: include the correct article for singular countable nouns ('a' or 'the') depending on context.