Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and use correct verb forms. Add one specific detail and use linking words if needed. For example, correct ‘Is is’ to ‘It is’, avoid ‘uh’, and change ‘the weather always is like a summer is’ to a clearer phrase.

예시: It is a small city called Melgar, located near Bogotá, the capital. It is well known for its hot climate, so the weather feels like summer year-round.

제안: Answer directly with a topic sentence and follow with specific, grammatically correct supporting details. Remove repetition and filler words, use correct plural/singular forms, and include linking words for coherence (for example, 'because' or 'so').

예시: I love the strong sense of community in my hometown because people are very friendly and helpful. For instance, neighbors often support each other with childcare and household chores.

제안: Answer clearly using correct tense and a concise structure: topic sentence stating the duration, then a brief supporting detail if needed. Avoid unclear phrasing and grammar errors. Use past tense to describe childhood residence and present tense for current situation.

예시: I lived in Melgar for about 19 years when I was growing up. However, I have recently moved to another country, so I no longer live there.

제안: Give a clear opinion sentence and then add specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy and use precise vocabulary (for example, 'universities' and 'technical colleges').

예시: Yes, I believe it is a great place for young people because it offers many opportunities, including universities and technical colleges, as well as local internships and community programs.

× Is is a small city and is called Melgar.

✓ It is a small city and is called Melgar.

The sentence begins with 'Is is' which incorrectly places the verb before the subject; this is a 'there be' / subject-verb order issue. The correct subject is 'It' followed by the verb 'is'. Use 'It is' to introduce and name the city.

× It's famous for, uh, the hot climate.

✓ It's famous for the hot climate.

The filler 'uh' interrupts the phrase and the comma is unnecessary. Remove the filler for clarity. Also no adverb-placement error beyond the interruption; keep the prepositional phrase 'famous for the hot climate.'

× The weather always is like a summer is.

✓ The weather is always like summer.

The original repeats 'is' and places the adverb 'always' before the verb, creating awkward word order and an extra 'is'. Move 'always' after the verb 'is' or before it depending on emphasis: 'The weather is always like summer.' Remove the extra 'is' and article before 'summer.'

× To be honest, I I love them.

✓ To be honest, I love it.

The student uses 'them' to refer to their hometown or community, which is singular; this is an incorrect pronoun choice. Use 'it' for a singular noun like 'my hometown' or 'my community.' Also remove the duplicated 'I.'

× The community is quite a polite in my hometown, the people are very friendly and my neighbors offers, uh, help of support each other's every single day.

✓ The community in my hometown is quite polite; the people are very friendly and my neighbors offer help and support to each other every day.

Multiple issues: 'a polite' incorrectly uses an article with an adjective — remove 'a' and place 'in my hometown' correctly. 'Neighbors offers' is wrong subject-verb agreement (plural subject needs plural verb 'offer') — this is subject-verb agreement but mapped here as adjective/adverb misuse and sentence structure. 'Help of support' is incorrect collocation; use 'help and support.' 'Each other's' should be 'each other' when used as a reciprocal pronoun. Remove filler 'uh' and 'every single day' can be simplified to 'every day.'

× Nowadays I move in with another country, but when I was young I live in the in the for around 19 years and now I is very recalled some activities but.

✓ Nowadays I live in another country, but when I was young I lived there for around 19 years and now I recall some activities clearly.

Multiple tense errors: 'Nowadays I move in' incorrectly uses 'move' for a current state — use present 'live.' 'I live in the in the for around 19 years' has extra words and wrong tense: use past 'lived' for completed action in the past. 'Now I is very recalled' mixes 'is' with passive/past participle incorrectly; use active 'I recall' or 'I remember.' Clean up extraneous words and correct verb tenses to match time references.

× I think so is absolutely a great place for a young people because of many opportunities, because they all they have provided universities, technical scholars and nowadays.

✓ I think it is absolutely a great place for young people because there are many opportunities, such as universities and technical schools.

The original has incorrect word order 'I think so is' and unnecessary articles 'a young people.' Use 'it is' to refer to the hometown and 'young people' without 'a.' 'Because of many opportunities' needs 'there are many opportunities' (there be construction). 'They all they have provided' is ungrammatical; instead give examples: 'such as universities and technical schools.' Remove 'nowadays' or place it correctly if needed. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms ('schools' not 'scholars').