Puzzles— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Essayez d'éviter les hésitations comme "umm" et améliorez la structure de la phrase pour qu'elle soit plus naturelle et claire. Par exemple, utilisez une phrase principale claire suivie d'une explication concise sans répétitions inutiles.

예시: Yes, I did a lot of puzzles in my childhood, especially those organized by my parents, because they helped me develop logical and critical thinking skills.

제안: Faites attention à la concordance des temps et évitez les erreurs grammaticales. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre la réponse plus fluide et naturelle.

예시: When I was a child, I did puzzles in almost every situation whenever I had time. However, now that I am older and have many deadlines, I don't have time to continue this hobby.

제안: Essayez de structurer votre réponse en phrases plus courtes et évitez les répétitions. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour clarifier vos idées et enrichir le contenu avec des exemples spécifiques.

예시: I prefer word puzzles because I love languages and enjoy improving my language skills. Although they are more difficult and complex for me, I find the challenge enjoyable, which has deepened my passion for languages.

제안: Évitez les hésitations et les répétitions comme "umm" et "and and". Améliorez la grammaire en utilisant le singulier/pluriel correct et structurez la réponse avec des mots de liaison pour plus de clarté.

예시: Yes, I think puzzles are interesting and useful activities for older people because they help maintain concentration, keep the brain active, and provide opportunities to practice memory skills.

× it keeps me be logical and critical and develop my problems

✓ it keeps me being logical and critical and developing my problem-solving skills

After 'keeps', the verb should be in the '-ing' form to indicate continuous action. Also, 'develop my problems' is incorrect; it should be 'developing my problem-solving skills' to express improving abilities.

× in almost every situations

✓ in almost every situation

'Every' is followed by a singular noun, so 'situations' should be singular 'situation'.

× and whenever that I have time

✓ and whenever I have time

'Whenever' does not require 'that' after it; removing 'that' corrects the sentence.

× I don't have time to continue my hobby in the past

✓ I don't have time to continue my hobby now

'In the past' contradicts 'don't have time' (present tense). The phrase should reflect the present situation, so 'now' is appropriate.

× it's an interesting and umm, useful activities for umm, old people

✓ it's an interesting and umm, useful activity for umm, old people

'It's' (it is) requires a singular noun, so 'activities' should be singular 'activity'.

× it keeps them concentrating and keeps the brain active and and they always have the chance to practice, umm, the memory

✓ it keeps them concentrating and keeps their brains active and they always have the chance to practice, umm, their memory

'The brain' and 'the memory' are general; using possessive pronouns 'their brains' and 'their memory' is more appropriate when referring to people.