Puzzles— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains many hesitations and repetitions. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific supporting details using linking words to make your answer coherent and natural. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and redundant phrases.

예시: Yes, I did enjoy doing puzzles in my childhood because they were my favourite pastime. Moreover, solving puzzles helped me improve my concentration and enhanced my learning skills.

제안: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and has grammatical errors. Try to answer directly, then use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain your reasons clearly. Also, avoid repeating words and improve sentence structure for better fluency.

예시: I usually do puzzles in my free time, especially when I feel bored, because they uplift my mood and help me concentrate better. Therefore, I prefer puzzles over taking a nap.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors and repetitions. Try to clearly state your preference first, then explain why, using linking words. Also, avoid mixing up words and ensure your sentences are complete and logical.

예시: I usually prefer word puzzles because I find them more challenging. However, I enjoy both word and number puzzles since they help improve my concentration and lift my spirits.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and incomplete. Try to give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent.

예시: I believe puzzles have a significant positive impact on older people. For instance, doing puzzles can help them improve their concentration and boost their mood effectively.

× Of course, it was my favorite, uh, leisure. Uh, it was my favorite activity, which I used to do it in my leisure time and solving puzzles make me more uh, has increased my, uh, focus and also my, uh, in learning it also helping me in learning. So yes, it's had it is a.

✓ Of course, it was my favorite leisure activity, which I used to do in my leisure time. Solving puzzles made me more focused and also helped me in learning. So yes, it has been a favorite.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'solving puzzles make me' which should be 'solving puzzles made me' to match past tense and subject-verb agreement. Also, 'has increased my focus' is awkwardly placed and should be rephrased to 'made me more focused'. The phrase 'helping me in learning' should be 'helped me in learning' to maintain tense consistency. Avoid unnecessary pronouns like 'it' after 'do'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I don't remember clearly but I used to do it in my free time because it it have it it uplift my mood and it also in foster my concentration. So I used to do it in the same time instead of taking a nap and it was my favorite pastime.

✓ I don't remember clearly but I used to do it in my free time because it uplifted my mood and also fostered my concentration. So I used to do it at the same time instead of taking a nap, and it was my favorite pastime.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'it have it it uplift' which is grammatically wrong; it should be 'it uplifted' to match past tense. 'In foster my concentration' is incorrect preposition usage; it should be 'fostered my concentration'. 'In the same time' should be 'at the same time' as the correct preposition for time expressions is 'at'. These corrections fix verb tense and preposition errors.

× I usually prefer doing word puzzles and I feel it is very challenging so I often do what puzzles and some and frequently the number of puzzles. I enjoy doing both as they are very they just increase the help increase my concentration and uplift my mood.

✓ I usually prefer doing word puzzles and I feel they are very challenging, so I often do word puzzles and sometimes number puzzles. I enjoy doing both as they help increase my concentration and uplift my mood.

The original sentence has plural and singular mismatches such as 'it is very challenging' referring to 'word puzzles' which is plural; it should be 'they are very challenging'. 'Do what puzzles' is a typo and should be 'do word puzzles'. 'Some and frequently the number of puzzles' is unclear and corrected to 'sometimes number puzzles'. These corrections address pluralization and clarity.

× From my perspective, I think it is, it has a significant, uh, impact, good but significant impact on people who do puzzles. Uh, especially if older people start doing puzzles, they can, uh, increase, uh, they can, they can increase faster their concentration and also enhance their mood. So I think it is very.

✓ From my perspective, I think it has a significant impact on people who do puzzles. Especially if older people start doing puzzles, they can increase their concentration faster and also enhance their mood. So I think it is very beneficial.

The sentence has redundant and awkward phrasing like 'it is, it has a significant, uh, impact, good but significant impact'. This is corrected to 'it has a significant impact'. The phrase 'increase faster their concentration' is incorrectly ordered; it should be 'increase their concentration faster'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'So I think it is very.' which is incomplete; adding 'beneficial' completes the thought. These corrections improve sentence structure and clarity.