Puzzles— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be more grammatically correct and concise. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

예시: Yes, I often did puzzles with my friends during my childhood because they helped sharpen my mind. Additionally, I enjoyed solving math quiz puzzles in my free time, which made time pass quickly. My parents also bought me puzzle games as birthday gifts, which I appreciated a lot.

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and incomplete sentences. Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearly stating your reasons. Also, be specific about the types of puzzles you like and why.

예시: I usually do puzzles when I feel bored because they help me relax and make me happy. There are many types of puzzles I enjoy, especially game-type puzzles that have a chance to win. Whenever I win, I feel really happy and satisfied.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical errors. Try to clearly state your preference and explain why one type is more difficult. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid incomplete sentences.

예시: I enjoy both word and number puzzles, so I don't have a strong preference. However, I find number puzzles more difficult because I often get confused about which numbers to use. On the other hand, word puzzles are easier for me as I just need to think about the correct words to write.

제안: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Express your opinion clearly and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and complete your thoughts.

예시: I believe puzzles are good for old people because they help pass the time and keep the mind sharp. For example, word puzzles can help them learn new words and improve their vocabulary. Therefore, doing puzzles is beneficial for elderly people.

× I usually do puzzles in my childhood with my friends.

✓ I usually did puzzles in my childhood with my friends.

The sentence refers to a past time period 'in my childhood', so the verb should be in the past tense 'did' instead of present tense 'do'.

× It makes also my mind sharp.

✓ It also makes my mind sharp.

The adverb 'also' should be placed before the main verb 'makes' for correct word order in English.

× And in my free time, my time was passed so quickly by solving so many math quiz puzzles as well.

✓ And in my free time, my time passed so quickly by solving many math quiz puzzles as well.

The phrase 'was passed' is incorrect here; 'passed' is the correct past tense verb. Also, 'so many' can be simplified to 'many' for naturalness.

× And my parents usually bought a puzzle game for me on my birthday as well.

✓ And my parents usually bought a puzzle game for me on my birthday as well.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× And.

This is an incomplete sentence and should be removed or completed for clarity.

× I usually do puzzles when I feel bored because I really feel relaxed and happy after solving puzzle and uh, there are many types of puzzles in which I, uh, like game type, uh, in which, uh, there is the lows or win chance.

✓ I usually do puzzles when I feel bored because I really feel relaxed and happy after solving puzzles. There are many types of puzzles, like game types, in which there is a low chance of winning.

The word 'puzzle' should be plural 'puzzles' after 'solving'. The phrase 'the lows or win chance' is unclear and corrected to 'a low chance of winning' for clarity and correctness.

× So whenever I win, umm, that puzzle, I feel really happy.

✓ So whenever I win that puzzle, I feel really happy.

The sentence is correct in present tense; removing unnecessary filler words improves clarity.

× So I usually.

This is an incomplete sentence and should be removed or completed for clarity.

× I usually do both the puzzles to be honest sometime well like there is no preference that I will play word or number puzzle.

✓ I usually do both puzzles, to be honest. Sometimes, I have no preference whether I play word or number puzzles.

The sentence had tense and structure issues; 'both the puzzles' corrected to 'both puzzles', 'sometime well like' corrected to 'sometimes', and sentence split for clarity.

× But I feel more difficult that number puzzles because in number puzzles I usually confused which number I have to like.

✓ But I find number puzzles more difficult because in number puzzles I usually get confused about which number I have to use.

The phrase 'I feel more difficult' is incorrect; 'I find ... more difficult' is correct. 'I usually confused' should be 'I usually get confused'. 'I have to like' is unclear and corrected to 'I have to use'.

× In written games I wear where I have to write this like.

✓ In word games, I am not sure where I have to write this.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect; corrected to a clearer form with proper verb usage and word choice.

× Everyone has their own preference right?

✓ Everyone has his or her own preference, right?

'Everyone' is singular, so the pronoun should be singular 'his or her' instead of plural 'their' for formal correctness.

× I but from my point of view I think doing puzzle in old age it's good for them.

✓ But from my point of view, I think doing puzzles in old age is good for them.

The phrase 'doing puzzle' should be plural 'doing puzzles'. 'It's' should be 'is' to agree with the subject 'doing puzzles'.

× They usually pass their time and also shop their mind and get new.

✓ They usually pass their time and also sharpen their mind and learn new things.

'Shop their mind' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'sharpen their mind'. 'Get new' is incomplete and corrected to 'learn new things' for clarity.

× Like in Word puzzles they can easily get new words.

✓ For example, in word puzzles, they can easily learn new words.

'Get new words' is informal; 'learn new words' is more appropriate. Added 'For example' for clarity and corrected capitalization.

× So I think puzzles are good for.

✓ So I think puzzles are good for them.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the object; added 'them' to complete the thought.