Puzzles— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然ですが、文法的な誤り（例えば、"the younger brother"は"my younger brother"が正しい）や冗長な表現を避けるために簡潔にすることが望ましいです。また、具体的な詳細をもう少し加えると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I used to play a game called Lucky, a block puzzle, with my older sister and younger brother. I really enjoyed building castles and houses with the blocks, which sparked my creativity.

제안: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、"watching drummers on my phones"は不自然な表現です。より自然な表現に直し、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。

예시: I don't usually do puzzles because I find them a bit boring. Instead, I prefer spending my free time watching drumming videos on my phone or playing sports.

제안: 文法の誤り（"world puzzles"は"word puzzles"）や冗長な表現が見られます。より明確で簡潔な表現を心がけ、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いでしょう。

예시: I don't really enjoy either word or number puzzles. However, if I had to choose, I find word puzzles easier, while number puzzles are more challenging for me.

제안: 文法の誤り（"really like"は"really likes"、"in thanks to"は"thanks to"）を直し、文を分けて明確にすると良いです。具体的な理由や効果をもう少し詳しく述べると効果的です。

예시: Yes, I believe puzzles are beneficial for older people because they help keep the mind active. For example, my grandmother enjoys doing puzzles in her free time, and thanks to this habit, she remains mentally healthy.

× Well, I played Block Puzzle which is called Lucky in Japan with my older sister and the younger brother because I really enjoyed making some castles or house using the blocks.

✓ Well, I played Block Puzzle which is called Lucky in Japan with my older sister and the younger brother because I really enjoyed making some castles or houses using the blocks.

'house' should be plural 'houses' because it refers to multiple items made from blocks, so plural form is needed.

× Well, I don't often do puzzles because it feels a little boring for me, but I prefer enjoying my free time by watching drummers on my phones or playing some sports rather than doing.

✓ Well, I don't often do puzzles because they feel a little boring to me, but I prefer enjoying my free time by watching drummers on my phone or playing some sports rather than doing puzzles.

Use 'they' to refer to plural 'puzzles' and 'feel' to agree with plural subject. 'Boring for me' should be 'boring to me'. 'Phones' should be singular 'phone' unless multiple devices are meant. 'Rather than doing' is incomplete; specify 'doing puzzles' for clarity.

× Unfortunately I don't really like both world puzzles and number puzzles, but if I had to say, I prefer word puzzles which is easier for me, but number puzzles is more difficult for me.

✓ Unfortunately I don't really like either word puzzles or number puzzles, but if I had to say, I prefer word puzzles which are easier for me, but number puzzles are more difficult for me.

'both' is used with two items but 'like both' is awkward; 'either...or' is better. 'world puzzles' is a typo for 'word puzzles'. 'word puzzles which is' should be 'word puzzles which are' because 'puzzles' is plural. Same for 'number puzzles is' to 'number puzzles are'.

× My grandmother really like doing puzzles when she is free in thanks to this habit she is now mentally really healthy.

✓ My grandmother really likes doing puzzles when she is free. Thanks to this habit, she is now mentally really healthy.

'grandmother' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'likes' not 'like'. Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs to be split for clarity.