Puzzles— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words and repetition, and give one brief reason. Use linking words properly (e.g., because, so) and correct tense and pronouns.

예시: No, I didn't do puzzles as a child because my parents couldn't afford them. As a result, I didn't have that experience growing up, although I was curious about puzzles when I saw them at friends' houses.

제안: Give a direct answer first (whether you currently do puzzles), then a short conditional reason. Remove hesitations and awkward structure; use a clear conditional sentence and linking word (if/when).

예시: I don't often do puzzles now, but if I had the chance I would definitely do them when I feel bored because they help me pass time and relax.

제안: Answer directly which type you prefer, then give a concise reason and address difficulty. Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'word puzzles' not 'word fossils'), and use linking words (because) for clarity.

예시: I prefer word puzzles because I enjoy reading and thinking about language. Number puzzles are more difficult for me, since I find mental arithmetic harder than wordplay.

제안: Provide a clear opinion sentence, then two specific benefits with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing; use correct nouns (mental stimulation) and coherent structure.

예시: Yes, I think puzzles are good for older people because they provide mental stimulation and help maintain memory. Additionally, puzzles can be relaxing and improve concentration, which supports healthy ageing.

× Actually, actually, no. I didn't have the puzzle for my childhood because of my parents couldn't afford it for those things.

✓ Actually, no. I didn't have puzzles in my childhood because my parents couldn't afford them.

The original mixes past tense clauses and has awkward phrasing. Use 'didn't have' with plural 'puzzles' (general childhood period) and replace 'because of my parents couldn't afford it for those things' with 'because my parents couldn't afford them' for correct clause structure and pronoun agreement. Also remove the redundant 'actually'.

× They we were financially struggling for those times.

✓ We were financially struggling at that time.

The original contains an extra pronoun 'They' and an incorrect prepositional phrase 'for those times'. Use 'We were financially struggling at that time' for correct subject, verb and time expression.

× So I did not have that experience in my life.

✓ So I did not have that experience in my life.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change required. It correctly uses singular 'that experience' to refer to the specific missing experience.

× So no, I didn't do, if I had the chance to do the puzzles, I would do it definitely, uh, during, when I feel bored, definitely.

✓ No, I didn't. If I had the chance to do puzzles, I would definitely do them when I felt bored.

Mixes past and present tenses awkwardly and uses incorrect pronouns. Use conditional 'If I had the chance... I would' with plural 'puzzles' and plural pronoun 'them'. Change 'when I feel bored' to 'when I felt bored' to match the hypothetical past context of the conditional.

× I did not have puzzles in my life but I would happy to do a word fossils so I like more reading.

✓ I did not have puzzles in my life, but I would be happy to do word puzzles because I enjoy reading more.

Missing verb 'be' in 'would happy' and 'word fossils' is incorrect word choice; should be 'word puzzles'. 'I like more reading' is awkward—use 'I enjoy reading more'. Ensure comma before 'but' connecting independent clauses.

× I would say definitely the word puzzle.

✓ I would definitely say the word puzzle is easier for me.

Original lacks clarity and natural adverb placement. Place 'definitely' before the verb and add a complement to show comparison or preference: 'the word puzzle is easier for me'.

× I believe once you got older, it's good to, I believe, I believe yes.

✓ I believe that once you get older, it's good for you, yes.

Mixes past 'got' with present 'it's'. Use present simple 'get' for general statements about aging. Remove repeated 'I believe' and add 'for you' to complete the idea.

× So it's relaxing as well and it's can mentally for the mentally support.

✓ So it's relaxing as well, and it can provide mental support.

Original has article and modal errors: 'it's can' is ungrammatical; use 'it can provide'. Remove duplicate 'the mentally' and use noun 'mental support'.

× Good exercise as well. So once we are getting all the it's quite hard.

✓ It's also good exercise. However, as we get older it can become quite hard.

Fragment 'Good exercise as well' needs a subject and verb. 'Once we are getting all the it's quite hard' is ungrammatical; replace with 'as we get older it can become quite hard' to express the meaning clearly and match tense and subject-verb structure.