Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid repetition and use more natural expressions. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid filler phrases like 'Oh my God'. For example, you can say: "Yes, I often wear jewelry because it boosts my confidence. I usually wear rings, watches, and bracelets, especially bracelets which I love and wear daily."

예시: Yes, I often wear jewelry because it boosts my confidence. I usually wear rings, watches, and bracelets, especially bracelets which I love and wear daily.

제안: Focus on clear pronunciation and correct vocabulary. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. For example, "I like all types of jewelry, but I especially love bracelets because they make me feel confident. For instance, I wear my Pandora bracelet every day."

예시: I like all types of jewelry, but I especially love bracelets because they make me feel confident. For instance, I wear my Pandora bracelet every day.

제안: Try to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid short, choppy sentences. Use linking words to improve coherence. For example, "I buy jewelry occasionally, usually on special occasions like my birthday. For instance, last birthday I received a ring from my mom."

예시: I buy jewelry occasionally, usually on special occasions like my birthday. For instance, last birthday I received a ring from my mom.

제안: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear references. Use linking words to explain your ideas clearly. For example, "I think some people wear jewelry for a long time because it has sentimental value. For example, they might wear a bracelet received from their late mother or father."

예시: I think some people wear jewelry for a long time because it has sentimental value. For example, they might wear a bracelet received from their late mother or father.

× Oh my God I love this questions.

✓ Oh my God I love this question.

The word 'questions' is plural but the demonstrative 'this' is singular. They should agree in number, so 'this question' is correct.

× it makes me feel confidence.

✓ it makes me feel confident.

'Confidence' is a noun, but the sentence requires an adjective to describe the feeling. 'Confident' is the correct adjective form here.

× I wear rings and watch and watch and bracelets.

✓ I wear rings, watches, and bracelets.

The word 'watch' should be plural 'watches' to match the plural 'rings' and 'bracelets'. Also, repeated 'and watch' is likely a mistake.

× Oh my God I love bracelet so much I wear them every day.

✓ Oh my God I love bracelets so much I wear them every day.

'Bracelet' is singular but 'them' refers to plural. To be consistent, use plural 'bracelets'.

× I like all type of chili but.

✓ I like all types of jewelry.

'Type' should be plural 'types' to agree with 'all'. Also, 'chili' seems to be a typo for 'jewelry'.

× The one thing that I love the most is bracelet because it makes me feel very confident

✓ The one thing that I love the most is a bracelet because it makes me feel very confident

When referring to a single item, use the article 'a' before 'bracelet'.

× I don't know it's just I have to wear everything everyday or else I will feel very empty on my hand.

✓ I don't know, it's just that I have to wear something every day or else I will feel very empty on my hand.

'Everything' is too broad; 'something' fits better. 'Everyday' should be two words 'every day' when meaning each day.

× I wear my Pandora bracelet grow school every day.

✓ I wear my Pandora bracelet to school every day.

'Grow school' is incorrect; likely meant 'to school'.

× I buy jewelry occasionally.

✓ I buy jewelry occasionally.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× I will ask my mom to buy me a jewelry like a watch or a bracelet.

✓ I will ask my mom to buy me jewelry like a watch or a bracelet.

'Jewelry' is an uncountable noun and does not take the article 'a'.

× Because last birthday I got a ring.

✓ Because last birthday I got a ring.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× I think I buy jewelry on occasions.

✓ I think I buy jewelry on special occasions.

Adding 'special' clarifies the meaning; 'occasions' plural is correct.

× I would say that some people were a piece of jewelry for a long time because it has sentimental value.

✓ I would say that some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because it has sentimental value.

'Were' is past tense; 'wear' is present tense and correct here.

× For example like the receive a bracelet from.

✓ For example, they receive a bracelet from

The sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical; corrected to a proper clause.

× They are late, Mom.

✓ Their late mom.

'They are' is incorrect; should be possessive pronoun 'their'.

× Or their late father.

✓ Or their late father.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× There is no good in this world.

✓ There is no one good in this world.

The sentence is unclear; adding 'one' clarifies meaning.