Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite short and has some grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and then add specific reasons or examples. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

예시: Yes, I often wear jewelry on special occasions because it enhances my personality and makes me feel confident.

제안: Your answer needs better sentence structure and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Be specific about the types of jewelry and explain why you like them, using linking words like 'because' or 'depending on'.

예시: I like to wear simple jewelry such as necklaces and bracelets, depending on the occasion and my mood because they complement my outfit well.

제안: Try to avoid repetition and improve grammar. Use linking words to explain your buying habits clearly and provide more details about when and why you buy jewelry.

예시: Yes, I usually buy jewelry during special occasions like weddings and festivals because these events call for traditional accessories.

제안: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Try to give a clear reason and support it with examples. Use correct pronouns and avoid repetition for better clarity.

예시: Some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because it symbolizes important life events, such as a wedding ring representing marriage.

× Yes, I wear jewelry. On. Occasion because it is enhanced my personality and I like to wear jewelry also.

✓ Yes, I wear jewelry on occasion because it enhances my personality and I like to wear jewelry.

The original sentence has incorrect sentence breaks and verb form. 'On. Occasion' should be 'on occasion' as a phrase. 'It is enhanced my personality' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it enhances my personality' because the subject 'it' performs the action. Also, 'I like to wear jewelry also' is better as 'I like to wear jewelry' to avoid redundancy.

× Well I also like wear a necklace and bracelet and I also wear simple jewelry and this is depend on occasion and my mood.

✓ Well, I also like to wear a necklace and bracelet, and I also wear simple jewelry; this depends on the occasion and my mood.

The phrase 'like wear' is incorrect; it should be 'like to wear' as 'like' is followed by the infinitive form. 'This is depend' should be 'this depends' to agree with the singular subject 'this'. Also, prepositions 'on occasion' and 'on my mood' are corrected to 'on the occasion' and 'my mood' without preposition respectively. Commas and semicolons improve sentence clarity.

× Yes, I also buy jewelries, but I also buy jewelry on famous occasions like weddings and festivals.

✓ Yes, I also buy jewelry, but I buy jewelry on famous occasions like weddings and festivals.

The word 'jewelries' is incorrect because 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Therefore, 'jewelry' should be used in both instances.

× Well, some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time likes women's also wear wear jewelries because it is a sign of his marriage life and he also.

✓ Well, some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time. Women also wear jewelry because it is a sign of their married life.

The phrase 'likes women's also wear wear jewelries' is incorrect. 'Likes' should be 'like' or omitted. 'Women's' is possessive and incorrect here; 'women' is the plural noun needed. 'Wear wear' is a repetition error. 'Jewelries' is incorrect; 'jewelry' is uncountable. 'His marriage life' should be 'their married life' to agree with plural subject 'women'. The sentence is split for clarity.