Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然ですが、文法の誤りや語彙の選択に注意が必要です。例えば、「It's it has gold drill and in pink diamond」は不自然で意味が伝わりにくいです。より正確な表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることを心がけましょう。

예시: Yes, I often wear jewelry, especially a necklace that my grandma gave me when I was 20. It is one of my most precious possessions because it has a gold chain and a pink diamond.

제안: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、語彙の誤用（"jewelries"は不可算名詞で"jewelry"が正しい）や文法の誤りがあります。また、冗長な表現を避け、より自然な言い回しを使うことが望ましいです。

예시: I prefer simple jewelry because I like to wear several pieces at the same time, such as necklaces, bracelets, and earrings. Therefore, they need to be simple.

제안: 文法と語彙の誤りが目立ちます（"bury my juries"は意味不明で、おそらく"buy my jewelry"の誤り）。正しい単語を使い、意味が明確になるようにしましょう。また、回答は簡潔で直接的にすることが重要です。

예시: No, I don't usually buy jewelry. I prefer to buy it as a reward for myself when I work hard or achieve something.

제안: 語彙の誤用（"cherry"は誤りで"jewelry"が正しい）や文法の誤りがあります。より正確な語彙を使い、文を明確に構成しましょう。また、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使って論理的に説明すると良いです。

예시: I think some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because it might be a gift from their parents or grandparents. For example, I have a necklace that my grandma gave me, and I treasure it very much.

× I often wear jewellery especially necklace that my grandma gave when I was 20 years old.

✓ I often wear jewellery, especially the necklace that my grandma gave me when I was 20 years old.

The word 'necklace' is singular and should be preceded by 'the' to specify the particular necklace. Also, 'gave' requires an object, so 'me' is needed after 'gave'.

× It's it has gold drill and in pink diamond.

✓ It has a gold drill and a pink diamond.

The phrase 'It's it has' is redundant and incorrect. Also, 'gold drill' should be 'gold detail' or 'gold setting' if that was intended; assuming 'drill' is a typo, it should be corrected. 'In pink diamond' is incorrect; it should be 'a pink diamond'. Articles 'a' are needed before singular countable nouns.

× I like simple jewelries because I keep like to wear multiple jewel jewelries at the same time like wearing necklace, bracelets, pierced earrings.

✓ I like simple jewelry because I like to wear multiple pieces of jewelry at the same time, like necklaces, bracelets, and pierced earrings.

The word 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form 'jewelries'. Also, 'necklace' should be plural 'necklaces' to match the plural context. The phrase 'I keep like' is incorrect and should be 'I like'.

× No, I do not. I bury my juries because I prefer buying them as my treat when I work hard or achieve something.

✓ No, I do not. I buy my jewelry because I prefer buying them as my treat when I work hard or achieve something.

The word 'bury' is incorrect here; it should be 'buy'. Also, 'juries' is a misspelling of 'jewelry'.

× I think some people wear a piece of cherry for a long time because it might be the gift from their parents or their grandparents.

✓ I think some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because it might be a gift from their parents or grandparents.

'Cherry' is a typo and should be 'jewelry'. Also, 'the gift' should be 'a gift' because it is not a specific gift previously mentioned. 'Their grandparents' is sufficient without 'their' repeated.