Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid informal expressions like 'Haha' and 'virtually' which can confuse the listener. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'a anklet' to 'an anklet'. Keep your answer concise and directly related to the question, and avoid redundancy by not repeating 'jewelry' unnecessarily.

예시: Yes, I often wear jewelry such as earrings, rings, necklaces, and an anklet. I developed a liking for jewelry since childhood because I was gifted many pieces when I was born.

제안: Make sure your sentences are grammatically correct, for example, 'I didn't had' should be 'I haven't had'. Also, clarify unclear phrases like 'writing in jewelry'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific reasons or examples to support your preferences.

예시: I personally like rings and earrings, especially those made of gold. In India, gold is considered very precious, and many people prefer it over silver. Although I like jewelry with inscriptions, I haven't had any such pieces yet.

제안: Avoid unclear phrases like 'and my home' and 'buying something at a joke'. Use correct expressions and grammar, for example, 'investing money in gold' instead of 'in the gold'. Provide clear reasons and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I usually buy jewelry once a year. I believe it is a good form of investment because gold retains its value. My family prefers investing in gold rather than spending money on things that lose value quickly.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more precise linking words and correcting minor grammar errors, such as 'till it broke' to 'until it breaks'. Also, avoid repeating 'wife' unnecessarily and try to make the explanation more concise and natural.

예시: Some pieces of jewelry hold sentimental value for people. For instance, in India, a husband gives his wife a mangal sutra, a special necklace, when they get married. The wife usually wears it for a long time until it breaks, as it symbolizes their memories and bond.

× I like to wear earrings, rings and a necklace and yes a anklet.

✓ I like to wear earrings, rings, a necklace, and yes, an anklet.

The article 'a' should be used before words starting with a consonant sound, and 'an' before vowel sounds. 'An anklet' is correct because 'anklet' starts with a vowel sound. Also, commas are needed to separate items in a list for clarity.

× I think when I was born I was showered with all kind of jewelry that made me develop a liking for the jewelry.

✓ I think when I was born I was showered with all kinds of jewelry that made me develop a liking for jewelry.

The phrase 'all kind of' should be 'all kinds of' to correctly indicate plural. Also, 'the jewelry' is unnecessary here; 'jewelry' as a general noun does not need 'the'.

× I also like writing in jewelry but I didn't had any so I'm.

✓ I also like writing in jewelry but I didn't have any so I'm.

After 'didn't', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'had' should be 'have'. The sentence is incomplete after 'so I'm', which should be completed or removed for clarity.

× I also like writing in jewelry but I didn't had any so I'm.

✓ I also like writing in jewelry but I didn't have any, so I am...

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. It needs completion or rephrasing to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Yes, once a year I buy jewelry and my home.

✓ Yes, once a year I buy jewelry for my home.

The sentence lacks a preposition to connect 'buy jewelry' and 'my home'. Adding 'for' clarifies the meaning.

× My family believes in investing money in the gold instead of buying something at a joke.

✓ My family believes in investing money in gold instead of buying something as a joke.

The phrase 'in the gold' should be 'in gold' because 'gold' is an uncountable noun here. 'At a joke' is incorrect; 'as a joke' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Some jewellery pieces hold a piece of memory for them.

✓ Some jewellery pieces hold memories for them.

'A piece of memory' is not a common expression; 'memories' is the correct plural noun to express multiple recollections.

× For example, in India, a husband gives their wife a mangal sutra which is like a necklace to the wife when they get newly married.

✓ For example, in India, a husband gives his wife a mangal sutra, which is like a necklace, when they get newly married.

The pronoun 'their' is plural, but 'a husband' is singular; 'his' should be used to agree in number. Also, 'to the wife' is redundant after 'gives his wife'.

× This necklace is worn by the woman for a long time till it broke.

✓ This necklace is worn by the woman for a long time until it breaks.

The phrase 'till it broke' mixes past tense with present context; 'until it breaks' is correct to maintain present tense consistency.