Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors such as 'jewelleries' (should be 'jewelry') and 'boost my boost my elegance'. Try to avoid repetition and use correct singular/plural forms. Also, improve sentence structure for clarity and naturalness. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I often wear jewelry because it complements my outfits and enhances my elegance. For example, it helps me look more professional and attractive at work. Additionally, it gives me ideas on how to coordinate my dressing style.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors and awkward phrases, such as 'favorite time of jewelry', 'elevate the lobe frame by phrase', and 'matched with my Elvis'. Focus on clear, simple sentences and correct vocabulary. Use linking words to explain why you like earrings.

예시: My favorite type of jewelry is earrings because they add a touch of elegance and can easily match different outfits. For instance, I often wear earrings to complement both casual and formal clothes.

제안: There are several unclear phrases like 'analyze malls with mice' and 'gold leagues'. Also, 'jewelries' should be 'jewelry'. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid confusing expressions. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

예시: Yes, I often buy jewelry, especially earrings, because they suit my personal style. I also purchase gold bracelets and necklaces as gifts for my family and friends. I believe jewelry is a good investment.

제안: Your answer has repetition ('wear wear') and some grammatical errors ('in the especially in the workplace', 'the juries'). Try to avoid repetition and use correct grammar. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' to connect your ideas clearly.

예시: People often wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because it boosts their confidence and helps them look more beautiful and professional, especially at work. Also, such jewelry can be matched with different styles for various occasions.

× Yes, I do often wear jewelleries because it can accomplish my outfits and boost my boost my elegance.

✓ Yes, I do often wear jewelry because it can complement my outfits and boost my elegance.

The word 'jewellery' is an uncountable noun in English and does not have a plural form. Using 'jewelleries' is incorrect. Also, 'accomplish' is not the correct verb here; 'complement' fits better to mean 'go well with'. The repeated phrase 'boost my boost my' is a typographical error and should be corrected to 'boost my'.

× Especially is will make me look more professional and beautiful in the workplace.

✓ Especially, it will make me look more professional and beautiful in the workplace.

The sentence is missing the subject 'it' and the adverb 'especially' should be followed by a comma. The phrase 'is will' is incorrect; it should be 'it will' to form the future tense properly.

× It's also additionally gives me some idea how to match with my dressing.

✓ It also additionally gives me some idea of how to match with my dressing.

The phrase 'It's also additionally gives' is incorrect; 'It also additionally gives' is correct. Also, the phrase 'some idea how to match with my dressing' requires the preposition 'of' after 'idea' to be grammatically correct.

× Earrings are the are my favorite time of jewelry is can consistently elevate the lobe frame by phrase, release a touch of elegance and earrings can easily be matched with my Elvis and different dressing, so I'd really love to.

✓ Earrings are my favorite type of jewelry; they can consistently elevate the earlobe, release a touch of elegance, and can easily be matched with my clothes and different outfits, so I'd really love to wear them.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'time' should be 'type' to refer to category; 'lobe frame by phrase' is unclear and likely meant 'earlobe'; 'Elvis' is incorrect and should be 'clothes'; 'different dressing' should be 'different outfits'. Also, the sentence structure is fragmented and needs to be connected properly.

× Yes, I do often buy jewelries, especially earrings.

✓ Yes, I do often buy jewelry, especially earrings.

As before, 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'jewelries'.

× They can analyze malls with mice, a personal style.

✓ They can analyze malls with mice, a personal style.

This sentence is unclear and seems to contain errors or typos. Possibly intended: 'They can analyze malls with mice, a personal style.' However, this does not make sense. It likely should be: 'They can match my personal style.' Since this does not fit the grammar problem list, no correction is made.

× I also buy jewelry such as gold bracelets or gold leagues and gifts for my family and friends.

✓ I also buy jewelry such as gold bracelets or gold rings as gifts for my family and friends.

The word 'leagues' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'rings'. Also, 'gifts' should be connected properly to the sentence.

× When people wear wear a piece of jewelry for the long time because they think the jewelry can boost their confidence and make them look more beautiful and professional in the especially in the workplace.

✓ When people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time, it is because they think the jewelry can boost their confidence and make them look more beautiful and professional, especially in the workplace.

The sentence has repeated word 'wear wear', which is a typo. 'For the long time' should be 'for a long time'. The phrase 'in the especially in the workplace' is incorrect; 'especially in the workplace' is correct. Also, the sentence structure needs a comma and clearer subject reference.

× On the other hand, the juries can be matched with different style on different occasions.

✓ On the other hand, the jewelry can be matched with different styles on different occasions.

'Juries' is incorrect; it should be 'jewelry'. 'Style' should be plural 'styles' to match 'different'.