Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'really like wear jewelry' nên là 'really like wearing jewelry'. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy chú ý đến cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

예시: Yes, I often wear jewelry because it makes me feel confident and stylish when I meet my friends or go to school. It has become an essential part of my daily life.

제안: Bạn đã trả lời khá đầy đủ nhưng câu trả lời hơi dài và có một số lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp và từ vựng như 'parents are quite straight' nên là 'strict'. Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

예시: I like wearing earrings because they add a stylish touch to my look and boost my confidence. However, my parents are quite strict, so I haven't got any piercings yet. In the future, I hope to get a helix piercing because I think it looks trendy and unique.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt, có cấu trúc rõ ràng và nội dung cụ thể. Tuy nhiên, bạn nên chú ý đến số nhiều và số ít, ví dụ 'gift' nên là 'gifts'. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể sử dụng thêm một số liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I usually don't buy jewelry because it is quite expensive and doesn't fit my budget. Although I like earrings, necklaces, and bracelets, I prefer to save money for more important things like technology devices or gifts for my family. For example, I recently bought a new smartphone instead of jewelry because it is more useful for me.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như 'Shed as gifts' và 'her loom passes down' gây khó hiểu. Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng từ đúng và câu hoàn chỉnh. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Some people wear jewelry for a long time because it has sentimental value. For example, it might be a gift from loved ones or a family heirloom passed down through generations. Also, wearing the same ring or necklace can be part of their personal identity, like a wedding ring.

× I'm the person who's really like wear jewelry because it makes me feel confident and fashionable when I go with my friends or go to school.

✓ I'm the person who really likes wearing jewelry because it makes me feel confident and fashionable when I go with my friends or go to school.

The verb 'like' should be in third person singular form 'likes' to agree with the singular subject 'person'. Also, after 'like', the verb should be in the '-ing' form 'wearing' to indicate the activity enjoyed.

× So it is one of indispensable for my life and I wear it on a daily basis.

✓ So it is indispensable for my life and I wear it on a daily basis.

The phrase 'one of indispensable' is incorrect because 'indispensable' is an adjective and cannot be used with 'one of'. The correct form is simply 'indispensable' to describe the importance.

× Unfortunately my parents are quite straight so they don't allow me to get any piercing yet.

✓ Unfortunately, my parents are quite strict so they don't allow me to get any piercings yet.

The word 'straight' is incorrect here; the intended adjective is 'strict' meaning strict rules or discipline. Also, 'piercing' should be plural 'piercings' when referring to any type of piercings in general.

× However, in the future I hope to get a Helix piercing and maybe some other types of ear piercing as I think they look trendy and can't really enhance.

✓ However, in the future I hope to get a Helix piercing and maybe some other types of ear piercings as I think they look trendy and can really enhance my style.

The phrase 'can't really enhance' is incorrect in context; it should be 'can really enhance' to express positive effect. Also, 'piercing' should be plural 'piercings' when referring to multiple types.

× Although I really like items such as earrings, necklace and bracelets, I prefer to save money for more important things like technology devices or gift for my family.

✓ Although I really like items such as earrings, necklaces and bracelets, I prefer to save money for more important things like technology devices or gifts for my family.

The nouns 'necklace' and 'gift' should be plural 'necklaces' and 'gifts' to match the plural context of 'items' and 'things'.

× Shed as gifts from loved ones or family, her loom passes down through generations.

✓ Shared as gifts from loved ones or family, heirlooms pass down through generations.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'Shed' should be 'Shared'; 'her loom' is a misspelling of 'heirloom'; 'passes' should be plural 'pass' to agree with plural subject 'heirlooms'.

× For instance, wedding ring is a typical 1 continuous.

✓ For instance, a wedding ring is a typical continuous piece of jewelry.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks articles. 'Wedding ring' needs the article 'a'; '1 continuous' is unclear and should be replaced with 'continuous piece of jewelry' to make sense.