Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally relevant but contains grammatical errors and some awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I often wear jewellery, usually every day. However, sometimes I forget when I'm rushing in the morning. Most of the time, I make sure to wear at least my earrings because I particularly love them. I also have a couple of necklaces that I enjoy wearing occasionally.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains confusing phrases like 'mostly baseball silver'. Make sure to use accurate vocabulary and sentence structures. Provide specific details and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I prefer gold jewellery because it suits my skin tone well. I also like silver pieces, which look more elegant, and I wear them occasionally. For example, I have several gold necklaces that I wear regularly.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and informal fillers like 'Uh'. Try to avoid fillers and use more precise language. Also, organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details linked logically.

예시: Yes, I often buy jewellery whenever I go shopping. If I see something nice in the jewellery section, I usually buy it because I am quite obsessed with jewellery.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by combining sentences and using linking words for coherence. Also, expand your answer with more specific reasons or examples.

예시: People often wear a piece of jewellery for a long time because it holds special meaning for them. For instance, it might have been a gift from someone important, which makes it more valuable emotionally.

× I work very often jewelries maybe every day.

✓ I wear jewelry very often, maybe every day.

The word 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form 'jewelries'. The correct usage is 'jewelry' regardless of quantity.

× However sometimes I might forget from rushing in the morning to work.

✓ However, sometimes I might forget because of rushing in the morning to work.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect here. The phrase should use 'because of' to indicate the reason for forgetting.

× But majority of time I make sure I have put at least my earrings.

✓ But the majority of the time I make sure I have put on at least my earrings.

'Majority' requires the definite article 'the' and 'time' should be 'the time' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'put' should be followed by 'on' when referring to wearing items.

× I love earrings in particular but as well necklace which I have couple.

✓ I love earrings in particular, but also necklaces, of which I have a couple.

The phrase 'but as well' is awkward; 'but also' is better. 'Necklace' should be plural 'necklaces' because 'a couple' implies more than one. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I like gold, mostly baseball silver.

✓ I like gold, mostly basic silver.

The word 'baseball' is likely a mishearing or typo; 'basic' fits context better. No plural issue here, but correction improves meaning.

× I have so many necklace in gold material and I think that suits my skin tone and as well silver which is more elegant and I wear them occasionally.

✓ I have so many necklaces made of gold, and I think that suits my skin tone, as well as silver, which is more elegant, and I wear them occasionally.

'Necklace' should be plural 'necklaces' to agree with 'so many'. Added commas and conjunctions improve sentence flow.

× I buy jewelry every often or probably every time I go to shop for different things and if I see something nice in jewelry section I'll just go and pick it up.

✓ I buy jewelry very often, or probably every time I go shopping for different things, and if I see something nice in the jewelry section, I'll just go and pick it up.

The phrase 'every often' is incorrect; 'very often' is correct. 'Go to shop' should be 'go shopping'. Added commas for clarity.

× Because that might be something special to them.

✓ Because that might be something special for them.

The preposition 'to' is less appropriate here; 'special for them' is the correct collocation.

× So probably someone important gifted to them and that makes the jewelry more special.

✓ So probably someone important gifted it to them, and that makes the jewelry more special.

The verb 'gifted' requires a direct object; 'it' refers to the jewelry. The sentence needs 'it' to be grammatically correct.