Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid redundancy and use the correct plural form 'jewellery' which is uncountable. Also, keep your answer concise and natural by limiting it to around 3-4 sentences and avoid repeating the word 'jewellery' too often.

예시: I don't often wear jewellery, but I prefer simple pieces that add a subtle touch to my outfit. I usually avoid heavy or flashy items that some people like to wear.

제안: Focus on using correct grammar and sentence structure. For example, use plural forms correctly and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, try to link your ideas smoothly and be more specific about why you like these items.

예시: I like simple gold necklaces because they match almost every outfit I own. Additionally, I wear small hair studs to add a touch of elegance to my look.

제안: Pay attention to verb tenses and word choice. For example, use 'possess' instead of 'possessed' for current ownership, and 'close ones' instead of 'closed ones'. Also, try to make your sentences clearer and more natural.

예시: I usually don't buy jewellery myself because most of the pieces I own have been gifts from my close friends and family.

제안: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Use 'jewellery' as an uncountable noun and avoid awkward phrases like 'status quo' in this context. Also, try to explain your ideas more clearly and avoid incomplete sentences.

예시: Jewellery is more than just an accessory; it can represent a person's identity. In Nepal, owning more jewellery often reflects higher social status, so people tend to wear their pieces for a long time to show this.

× Well, I'm not particularly fond of jewelleries, I just like to wear simple jewelries to add a subtle touch to my outfit.

✓ Well, I'm not particularly fond of jewellery, I just like to wear simple jewellery to add a subtle touch to my outfit.

The word 'jewellery' is an uncountable noun in English and does not have a plural form. Using 'jewelleries' is incorrect. The correct form is 'jewellery' whether referring to one piece or multiple pieces.

× Besides that, I don't really wear any heavy jewelries like other people do.

✓ Besides that, I don't really wear any heavy jewellery like other people do.

As above, 'jewellery' is uncountable and should not be pluralised. 'Jewelries' is incorrect.

× Well I love simple gold uh necklace which pretty much matches every outfit I wear and small hair stud just to look a bit elegant on whatever I wear.

✓ Well, I love a simple gold necklace which pretty much matches every outfit I wear and a small hair stud just to look a bit elegant on whatever I wear.

The sentence is missing the indefinite articles 'a' before singular countable nouns 'necklace' and 'small hair stud'. Without these articles, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× Well, I don't. Most of the jewelry I possessed are gifted to me by my closed ones, so I never had really bought any kind of jewellery.

✓ Well, I don't. Most of the jewellery I possess was gifted to me by my close ones, so I have never really bought any kind of jewellery.

'Jewelry' should be 'jewellery' (British English). 'Possessed' is past tense but the context requires present tense 'possess'. 'Are gifted' is incorrect; the correct passive form is 'was gifted' because 'most of the jewellery' is singular. 'Closed ones' should be 'close ones'. 'Never had really bought' is awkward; 'have never really bought' is correct present perfect tense.

× Jewelries are not just pieces of accessories, it also gives you an identity of who you are.

✓ Jewellery is not just a piece of accessory, it also gives you an identity of who you are.

'Jewelries' is incorrect; 'jewellery' is uncountable. 'Pieces of accessories' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'a piece of accessory' or better 'pieces of accessory' but 'a piece of jewellery' is more natural. The sentence should treat 'jewellery' as singular.

× Well, in Nepal, the more jewelries people possess, the more status quo they have.

✓ Well, in Nepal, the more jewellery people possess, the more status quo they have.

Again, 'jewelries' is incorrect; 'jewellery' is uncountable and singular.

× So people wear jewelries for a long time to showcase their identity, and some may even have.

✓ So people wear jewellery for a long time to showcase their identity, and some may even keep it for life.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and some may even have' which is incomplete and unclear. It needs a complete clause to make sense. Also, 'jewelries' should be 'jewellery'.