Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using proper expressions and sentence structures. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, instead of saying "I love shining myself," you can say "I like to add some sparkle to my look." Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I often wear jewelry daily because I like to add some sparkle to my look. In fact, I have three ear piercings, and I prefer wearing gold earrings since they don't irritate my ears.

제안: Focus on making your sentences complete and coherent. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid grammatical errors such as incorrect plural forms and incomplete sentences. Try to be specific about the types of jewelry you like and why.

예시: I prefer wearing trendy or symbolic jewelry. For example, I love my initial locket because it reflects my personality. Additionally, I enjoy wearing different kinds of jewelry each week to match my outfits.

제안: Avoid repetition and grammatical mistakes. Use correct verb tenses and plural forms. Keep your answer concise and clear. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically.

예시: Yes, I usually buy jewelry because I enjoy styling my clothes with different pieces. Therefore, I purchase new jewelry once or twice a month to keep my collection fresh.

제안: Try to avoid redundancy and run-on sentences. Use linking words to organize your ideas clearly. Also, use more precise vocabulary and sentence structures to express your thoughts effectively.

예시: Some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because it is expensive and holds sentimental value. Moreover, they may have developed a habit of wearing it regularly, making it difficult to replace or remove.

× I have got 3 piercings in my ears

✓ I have got 3 piercings in my ear

The word 'piercings' is plural but 'ears' is also plural. Usually, piercings are counted per ear, but here it is better to use singular 'ear' to indicate multiple piercings on one ear or specify both ears clearly. To avoid confusion, use singular 'ear' when referring to multiple piercings on one ear.

× I love shining myself

✓ I love to shine

The phrase 'shining myself' is incorrect because 'shine' is not reflexive in this context. The correct expression is 'I love to shine' meaning to look bright or attractive. Using 'myself' here is unnecessary and grammatically incorrect.

× I only wore gold because it doesn't affect my ear

✓ I only wear gold because it doesn't affect my ear

The verb tense should be present tense 'wear' to match the habitual action indicated by 'usually' earlier. Also, 'ear' is singular here as it refers to the ear that is pierced.

× I love different kind of jewelries to wear weekly

✓ I love different kinds of jewelry to wear weekly

The phrase 'different kind of jewelries' is incorrect. 'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' when referring to multiple types, and 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. So, 'different kinds of jewelry' is correct.

× I love to style my clothes with different jewelries

✓ I love to style my clothes with different jewelry

The word 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Using 'jewelries' is incorrect. The correct form is 'different jewelry'.

× So I brought I bought new jewelries every month or twice a month

✓ So I buy new jewelry every month or twice a month

The sentence mixes past tense 'brought' and 'bought' incorrectly and conflicts with the habitual action indicated by 'every month or twice a month'. The correct tense is present simple 'buy' to indicate regular action. Also, 'jewelries' should be 'jewelry' as it is uncountable.

× So I brought I bought new jewelries every month or twice a month

✓ So I buy new jewelry every month or twice a month

As above, 'jewelries' is incorrect; 'jewelry' is uncountable and should be used without 's'.

× A few people wear a piece of jewellery for a long run

✓ A few people wear a piece of jewellery for a long time

The phrase 'for a long run' is incorrect in this context. The correct expression is 'for a long time' to indicate duration.

× they cannot like remove it or buy a new one because they are used to it

✓ they cannot remove it or buy a new one because they are used to it

The word 'like' is unnecessary and incorrect here. The correct sentence is 'they cannot remove it or buy a new one'.

× they got a habit to wear that particular jewelry

✓ they have a habit of wearing that particular jewelry

The phrase 'got a habit to wear' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'have a habit of wearing' to indicate habitual action.