Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时语法和用词需更准确，避免重复表达。例如“they add a beautiful and brilliant touch to different outlook of the day”表达不够自然，应简化并明确。

예시: Yes, I often wear jewelry because it adds a beautiful touch to my daily outfits. For instance, I usually wear a silver bracelet which makes me feel more confident and elegant.

제안: 回答结构较好，但连接词使用不够自然，且部分表达重复。建议使用更自然的连接词并简化句子。

예시: I prefer silver jewelry because its bright color makes me look more attractive. Besides, I also like gold jewelry since it retains its value over time and looks beautiful.

제안: 注意语法错误，如“jewelries”应为“jewelry”，“when I is”应为“when I am”。句子结构可更简洁自然。

예시: Yes, I often buy jewelry because it makes me feel more attractive and elegant. Also, shopping for things I like helps me relieve stress and recharge my energy.

제안: 表达不够流畅，语法和用词有误，如“evaluate very much”不合适。建议简化句子并使用更准确的词汇。

예시: I think some people wear jewelry for a long time because it is a gift from their parents or grandparents, so they cherish it deeply. Also, the jewelry may symbolize good luck or blessings, which makes it special to them.

× Yes, I enjoy wearing jewelry because I think they add a beautiful and brilliant touch to different outlook of the day.

✓ Yes, I enjoy wearing jewelry because I think it adds a beautiful and brilliant touch to different outlooks of the day.

这里的主语是不可数名词"jewelry"，应使用单数代词"it"，且"outlook"应为复数形式"outlooks"，表示不同的外观。

× For example, I always wear silver bracelet because I think they can makes me feel more beautiful when wearing them.

✓ For example, I always wear a silver bracelet because I think it can make me feel more beautiful when wearing it.

"bracelet"是单数，前面应加冠词"a"，代词应使用单数"it"，动词"makes"应为原形"make"，因为前面有情态动词"can"。

× And moreover, I also like golden jewelry because their worth remains stable after many years and they also are very beautiful.

✓ And moreover, I also like golden jewelry because its worth remains stable after many years and it is also very beautiful.

"jewelry"是不可数名词，代词应使用单数"its"和"it"，而不是复数"their"和"they"。

× Yes, I usually buy jewelry because firstly I think they can make me more attractive and elegant.

✓ Yes, I usually buy jewelry because firstly I think it can make me more attractive and elegant.

"jewelry"是不可数名词，代词应使用单数"it"，而不是复数"they"。

× so I enjoy buying jewelries when I is very stressful.

✓ so I enjoy buying jewelry when I am very stressed.

"jewelry"是不可数名词，没有复数形式，不能用"jewelries"。"I is"应改为"I am"，"stressful"形容事物，形容人应用"stressed"。

× sometimes this jewelry is a gift given by their parents or grandparents so they cherish it very much and moreover sometimes the jewelry also means blessing to themselves, so they wear for very long time and evaluate very much.

✓ Sometimes this jewelry is a gift given by their parents or grandparents, so they cherish it very much. Moreover, sometimes the jewelry also means a blessing to themselves, so they wear it for a very long time and value it very much.

"means blessing"前应加不定冠词"a"。"wear for very long time"应为"wear it for a very long time"，缺少代词"it"和冠词"a"。"evaluate"用词不当，应为"value"表示重视。