Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains several errors that affect naturalness and clarity. Try to use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'jewelry' instead of 'chewy') and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: No, I don't often wear jewelry because I find it uncomfortable. However, I sometimes wear it on special occasions, such as when I have to give a speech or attend an important meeting.

제안: Your answer is relevant and includes personal feelings, which is good. However, some phrases are unclear or incorrect (e.g., 'I'm a sister bracelet'). Try to be more precise and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I like wearing a sister bracelet because it symbolizes wisdom and helps me feel motivated. Whenever I wear it, I feel reassured and confident, especially during exams.

제안: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases (e.g., 'colleague student', 'flushes a lot practical'). Try to use correct grammar and vocabulary, and organise your answer logically with linking words.

예시: No, I usually don't buy jewelry because I am a college student with limited money. Most of my budget goes on food and travel, so I prefer to spend my money on practical things.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more coherent. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar.

예시: I think some people wear jewelry for a long time because it has sentimental value, especially if it was given by a family member. Wearing it makes the jewelry more meaningful and provides a sense of reassurance.

× No, normally I don't like very chewy because it is uncomfortable.

✓ No, normally I don't like wearing jewelry because it is uncomfortable.

The word 'chewy' is an adjective describing texture and is incorrectly used here. The student likely meant 'jewelry' but mistakenly said 'chewy'. The sentence should refer to 'wearing jewelry' to make sense in context.

× But I will wear it in some important okays, like I need a hold, I need to hold a class meeting or give a speech.

✓ But I will wear it on some important occasions, like when I need to hold a class meeting or give a speech.

The phrase 'some important okays' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'some important occasions'. Also, 'I need a hold' is incorrect; it should be 'when I need to hold'. This corrects the quantifier and clarifies the meaning.

× I like I'm a sister bracelet because it is a symbol of wisdom and could help me pass all my exams.

✓ I like my sister's bracelet because it is a symbol of wisdom and could help me pass all my exams.

The phrase 'I'm a sister bracelet' is incorrect. The student likely meant 'my sister's bracelet'. This corrects the possessive pronoun and noun usage.

× I find it useful and every time I wear it I will feel motivated and reassured.

✓ I find it useful, and every time I wear it, I feel motivated and reassured.

The original sentence uses 'will feel' which is future tense; however, the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'feel' is more appropriate. Also, commas improve sentence clarity.

× No, because you know, I'm a colleague student without much money and most of my money are spent on food and travel.

✓ No, because you know, I'm a college student without much money and most of my money is spent on food and travel.

The word 'colleague' is incorrect; it should be 'college' to describe a student. Also, 'money' is uncountable and singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'.

× I don't like buying something that flushes a lot practical.

✓ I don't like buying things that are not very practical.

The phrase 'flushes a lot practical' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'not very practical'. This correction clarifies the meaning and uses correct adjective placement.

× I guess maybe it is something important that their family gave it to them so they will wear it for a long time, Just want to make it more meaningful and otherwise they will feel reassured.

✓ I guess maybe it is something important that their family gave to them, so they will wear it for a long time. They just want to make it more meaningful, and otherwise, they will feel reassured.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'gave it to them' where 'gave to them' suffices. Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs to be split for clarity. Adding 'They' at the start of the second sentence corrects the sentence structure.