Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use correct articles and plural forms, and avoid repeating similar phrases. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

예시: Yes, I usually wear jewelry on special occasions like birthday parties and weddings.

제안: Your answer has good content but some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use singular or plural forms correctly and connect your ideas smoothly. Also, try to use linking words to explain your preference clearly.

예시: I prefer wearing lightweight jewelry rather than heavy pieces because they make me feel more comfortable and relaxed.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains hesitations and grammatical errors. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use correct plural forms. Also, clarify your buying habits directly and concisely.

예시: No, I usually buy jewelry only on special occasions like my birthday or weddings.

제안: Your answer has many hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to speak more fluently and organize your ideas clearly. Use linking words to explain reasons logically and avoid redundancy.

예시: I think some people wear heavy jewelry for a long time to display their identity and social status to others.

× Yes, I mostly ever wear a jewellery on a special occasions, on a birthday party and a weddings.

✓ Yes, I mostly wear jewellery on special occasions, like birthday parties and weddings.

The phrase 'mostly ever' is incorrect; 'mostly' alone suffices. 'A jewellery' is incorrect because 'jewellery' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article 'a'. 'On a special occasions' is incorrect because 'occasions' is plural and should not have 'a'. Also, 'a birthday party and a weddings' mixes singular and plural incorrectly; it should be 'birthday parties and weddings' to match plural 'occasions'.

× I mostly prefer to wear a lightweight jewellery instead of the heavy because when I wear a light jewelries I feel very comfortable and relax.

✓ I mostly prefer to wear lightweight jewellery instead of heavy jewellery because when I wear light jewellery I feel very comfortable and relaxed.

'A lightweight jewellery' is incorrect because 'jewellery' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. 'The heavy' should be 'heavy jewellery' to specify the type. 'Light jewelries' is incorrect because 'jewellery' is uncountable and does not have a plural form. 'Relax' should be 'relaxed' to correctly describe the feeling.

× No, I just only prefer to buy jewelries on my birthday and uh, on vacation on uh, sorry, weddings.

✓ No, I only prefer to buy jewellery on my birthday and, uh, on vacations or, uh, sorry, weddings.

'Just only' is redundant; 'only' alone is sufficient. 'Jewelries' is incorrect because 'jewellery' is uncountable and does not have a plural form. 'On vacation on' is awkward; it should be 'on vacations or'.

× Uh, I think that mostly people wear, uh, heavy jewelries to show in the front of the others as they be, uh, they show their identity and the status in the society.

✓ Uh, I think that mostly people wear heavy jewellery to show off in front of others as they, uh, show their identity and status in society.

'Heavy jewelries' is incorrect because 'jewellery' is uncountable and does not have a plural form. 'To show in the front of the others' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'to show off in front of others'. 'The status in the society' should be 'status in society' because 'status' is uncountable and 'society' here is general, so no article is needed.